Thorn Wilde

Now that is a very bad sentence. It's true that a lot of 'had's can (and should) be eliminated by simply changing the sentence structure. In the case of the sentence above, I'd cut half of it and just write, 'John and Raven had met in the third grade and become instant besties,' for instance. It can also be a good idea to restructure or rephrase sentences with 'was' in them. A good way to make things more interesting. Either way, though, the key is variety. If every sentence in a paragraph is 'subject, verb, object', things get boring fast, for instance. While punctuation definitely counts, punctuation rules in English are actually extremely complex, convoluted, and inconsistent, especially where commas are concerned. There are vast varieties of styles that use commas differently (Oxford comma or not is only one of many points where people wildly disagree) and no hardcore rules for them. You can ask three different editors who are equally experienced, educated, and knowledgeable and get three completely different answers about comma placement.

Congrats on clearing the mod queue! And this is getting very exciting. Hellfire, huh? Interesting... Also, I loved your descriptions of the museum. Detailed enough to set the scene nicely, but not so much you lose focus on the story. Nicely done!

What a sweet and beautiful poem! I'm glad you two had a nice time.

I mean, hands-free orgasm is a real thing, but it has less to do with your lover's skill than with, well, physiology. Some can, some can't. Either way, I do think this version was an improvement. You're doing a great job reworking this.

Good chapter! You do a great job of expressing the frustration Ronnie feels, I think. Keep it up!

Against Me! - True Trans Soul Rebel

Ooh, exciting! Can't wait to see what more you two create together.

Sometimes 'had' is necessary; past perfect is often needed when writing a story in past tense, and then 'had' is essential. That's just good grammar.

Sounds really tasty. Definitely need to try making it...

Hugs for you both. Hope tomorrow is a better day.

This poem hit me hard. Raw poetry is right. Makes me think of the people I’ve lost. Loss, love... is the pain worth it for the memories? I think so, most of the time... Thank you for sharing these beautiful words with us, tim.

Been listening to this album by Voltaire on repeat for the past couple of days. Cracks me up so much! For my fellow nerds (contains swearing). Fair warning if you go on to listen to the rest of the album: These are the least offensive songs on it. And if you're sensitive, DO NOT listen to The Trouble with Tribbles or Cantina.

Maya is such a dick. In a good way. Lol! Ronnie might have noticed how uncomfortable his fanboying made Taran, though. Kind of oblivious, isn't he? In more ways than one.

I like Mari! Wouldn't mind seeing more of her.

Thank you! I really appreciate that. Thanks for giving my work a chance, and I'm really happy you're enjoying it.

It's horrific. No other word to describe it. And millions upon millions of animals, some members of vulnerable species, are dead or at great risk. Just awful.

Exciting! I wonder who and what this bad thing that's coming is... Poor Maya. I hope she'll be okay. And I feel for Taran. Family expectations can be stifling. But he and Ronnie both like each other. Hopefully, Taran will find a way to get out from his father's thumb.

Ooh, California! I've been to San Diego once. Really want to go to northern California, though. One of my best friends lives there.

Great chapter! Yay, Ronnie knows who Taran is now! I wonder what important thing it was Taran didn't get to tell him, though. Also, happy birthday! Hope it was a good one!

I'm sorry for all the pain you're feeling, and will continue to feel. It's never easy. When my ex-boyfriend broke up with me four and a half years ago, I was a wreck for months. It's okay to not be okay. But, as you see here, you're not alone. I hope that gives you some comfort.

Well, I don't think I should have to argue that my gender or sexual orientation is valid on a supposedly queer website, but here we are, and I have had to do so in the past. So I believe my question remains valid.

Yay! I'm sure you won't regret it. ❤️

I haven't seen the remake, but I love Let the Right One In. One of my favourite horror movies. I love atypical vampire movies.

I seem to recall @CassieQ didn’t, but I may be mistaken. Anyway, thanks for the response, and your hard work around the anthologies.

Let Me In... is that the American remake of Let the Right One In?