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"Hot damn, he’s gorgeous!" Max had never seen a man more strikingly masculine: long, dark, shoulder-length hair of loose ringlets fanned out from his head to lay upon the pillow on which his head rested, an unlined forehead sloped to heavy brows lined with thick, combed eye-brows, long lashes, broad nose – nostrils seemingly flaring in the act of sensual overload, and full, dusky, rose-colored lips. The neat, full beard couldn't hide his sharply defined jaw and strong chin, and added contrast to

Congratulations Thorn!!! A much deserved recognition.

That was stunningly effective and well performed.

Ha-ha. I'd have left the line too, as the other guy did.

A rather nice point of difference made at the end. Keep up the good work, Andrew.

Welcome to GA, Chris.

What a nice look into a scene of interaction between a father and his son that should be the norm rather than the exception.

Good to have the story back on, James. This chapter was intense, informing and exciting in turns. Great writing.

Don't be a stranger, Rico. Welcome to GA, John.

In the last year, I have had the pleasure of working with Lisa, Myiege and Thorn Wilde. Each of these wonderful people have brought their set of skills and unique perspectives to my work and made it better. Thank you so very much.

Thanks, K.C. I look forward to the return of Pour Me Another.

You mention that you might have another supernatural story in you, and that idea wouldn't be amiss, I think. Would that be another ghost story or would you take it in an entirely different direction? If another direction, which way might you be leaning?

Hi, K.C. I mention in my review of the story that I got up and walked around the room trying to decide if I wanted to continue reading when Tanner was killed. The second time, reading it today, did not garner the same response, but it was nonetheless moving, and incredibly sad. When Tanner called out as Ethan and Amanda walked away, it was amazingly poignant even the second time around. How difficult was that scene to write in your original screenplay? And was it tough to revisit again when you turned it into a story? And, one more - How much worry did it cost you when you posted that chapter? I seem to remember there was mention of hiding under the bed after the chapter was posted.

I read K.C.'s story in one setting at the beginning of Aug. last year and again today. After the first chapter, I realized I'd already read it but continued anyway because it's such a good read. I was totally surprised by my five paragraph story review at the end of the epilogue; I hadn't remembered doing that until confronted with my own words. I still agree with them, though my depth of reaction was a tad more subdued as compared to the first time around.

Welcome to participation, alfredfranco. I read for about a year or so before signing up myself and you've got the right idea; every author appreciates encouragement.

At first, I was surprised that the chapters were coming one after the other so quickly, and now, with Jesse and Dylan, what a bigger surprise. The first question that come to mind is, will they become integral to the story as key characters or act in the nature of a supporting role? The story has been interesting and allowed us time to get to know the twins and their abilities. When Oliver arrived, he was a welcome addition, and this led to new discoveries. Now the pace is picking up and we have new additions, and some well known, and the story is getting exciting as well as holding my interest. Good, solid writing, Andrew.

I'm glad you liked my story. Thanks for the note, Slytherin.

Guilty, I think I did this once! Then I had to go and look up scoff when I was corrected. And that was when I realized that my definition of scoff matched what I thought it did, an expression of scornful derision, which meant I needed the Dictionary of British-isms to figure it out.

While I may not agree with all of your assertions - Bacon Truth #7, is spot on in my experience too--and, Bacon Truth #10, cracked me up!

This article is now the cover story for today's, The New York Times Magazine, for anyone who wants a hard copy. I haven't read the article yet but I plan to soon.

Loved it! I almost felt like a fly on the wall experiencing the interaction between the friends. When Tim gasped, I pulled back from the screen. That doesn't happen often.

It took me til somewhere in the midst of chapter three/four to catch on (who writes about those three anymore) but once I did, you received a big chuckle in response. Nice reworking of the tale, Valkyrie.

In three chapters, this is proving to be one of the better, Back to the Future, type of stories. While raising questions and providing answers based on the MC's life experiences, it leaves the reader, this reader, with those very same questions to answer. Just what should be changed, does the butterfly effect hold true, and does it matter if you can't go back to the future? There is also the question of whether it truly is his past that the MC has gone back to. Is it a different dimension created specifically for the event and not his true past, or anyone else's that lived or died at the time of the experiment? If he truly has gone back to his past, what happened to the boy of twelve that he replaced, is his mind gone? Will it come back, unchanged and intact, should his future self return to where his body lies? Or will the timeline cease to exist? There are many possible outcomes for time travel, and since this is my first time reading this well crafted story, I look forward to where you're taking me, and the journey of getting there.

Short answer to your question: they weren't all so protective. Dougie was the only aggressor and the only one of David's group of friends to be unwelcoming. Picture yourself as one of the anonymous friends. You're out having fun and suddenly David shuts down, you witness the altercation with this man you don't know and in the aftermath - you look on, you are with David and his date Robert and Dougie is causing tension. I think that all the reactions of the unnamed friends would be everyday normal and do not indicate that they are privy to intimate facts about David or his life. Dougie on the other hand is aware and he says so to Robert. I cannot include things that Robert doesn't know, has guessed at, or has been told outright in the story, but that does not preclude readers from finding things between the lines. Things that are not said. Thanks for commenting, Bill. I hope I was able to clear some things up for you.

Thank you for the note, Myr. I appreciate your having read one of my stories.