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Sorry about the name mix-up. I am embarrassed. Aside from the name mistake, the comments were genuine and meant for you.
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So many questions; so few answers. Jimmy is a most interesting character. Your first two chapters have drawn me in. I look forward to reading more and finding answers to my questions. Thanks.
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Good story, Gary! You created empathy for your characters quickly. They felt real and not just two- dimensional. The dialogue was great, and you gave us enough description to put us in the place without going overboard. Now about this complete designation. I feel you gave the readers enough information to decide what's next for Tyler and Logan. That makes where you ended the story a good place. However, there is a lot more we could learn. Good characters like these are deserving of more. Maybe a sequel as someone suggested. In any event Thanks, I enjoyed this story.
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I was not expecting uncle Errol to die, and I am even more surprised Sebastian just watched it happen. I don't understand his thinking. With Errol gone who will support him, provide shelter and the other necessities? I am curious to see if Sebastian can avoid a total mess and life with Grandma. Thanks.
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I like Corey and his "voice," or I should probably say your voice. I am intrigued with the set up of your story. I look forward to reading more. Thanks.
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So now we have two causes for worry: Katherine and Leon. And maybe Stratos himself will be the third? Gemini's story could be an analogy for race, gender, and/or ethnic relations. How long ago was it that people were usually hostile about someone who associated with or married a person outside their race, religion, gender, or ethnicity? I am enjoying this story as a good story, but these thoughts keep running through my head. You are doing a tremendous job! Keep up the good writing! Thanks.
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I had the pleasure of reading several chapters this afternoon to get caught up! I enjoyed finding out about Noah's new life in New York and meeting his new boyfriend! I have some mixed feelings about Noah and Sky being sexually active. I have to keep reminding myself they are not little kids anymore. These characters are wonderful! I like the way they love and support each other, just like the many characters in your other stories! Thanks.
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Even as a dick in the last story, Dorian was a fun character! To get to read his story and see him fleshed out as a character was great! It's too bad he had to die at the end, but in some ways it was the best ending for the story. I am hoping this is not the end, or that there will be a final chapter or an epilog. Thanks.
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Who The F Is Wednesday?
JeffreyL commented on Laura S. Fox's story chapter in Who The F Is Wednesday?
This story has been a lot of fun! You have created several really great characters! I will be sorry to see it end. Thanks. -
Who The F Is Wednesday?
JeffreyL commented on Laura S. Fox's story chapter in Who The F Is Wednesday?
Fox's Animaniacs animated character aka Dot and Night Manager at the Boston Tipton Hotel (The Suite Life of Zack and Cody - Disney Channel). My first guess, Ricardo Montalban, was wrong. Thanks to Google I found the answer. Great challenge! I am too old to know either answer! 🙂 -
Just finished the first three chapters, and I enjoyed how it started. Kevin and Uncle are interesting characters. I look forward to reading more. Thanks.
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More fun with Bailey and Harlan! Dinner was a big success! Part of that was the fact that Shawn showed up. I am glad he did. Less stress for Bailey, both at dinner and work on Monday. Thinking ahead, I am wondering if Harlan will be more truthful with Bailey if/when they are a couple. From what you wrote, I felt like he told the truth about himself, but painted with a broad brush. Many of the details he skipped over. I hate to sound like a broken record, but once again I must say I am really enjoying this story! Thanks.
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I am really enjoying seeing Stephen growing as a person and gaining self confidence! Thanks.
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OMG! I thought ending a chapter with Rick's sister's call was bad. I chuckled because I knew, being behind, I had a couple of chapters still to read. Now I am caught up, and I end with Aiden severely beaten! Aaaaaaugh! I want to cry No Fair! But I will stay calm and wait patiently for the next chapter. Thanks.
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I am reading a few chapters to get caught up. I have enjoyed getting to know Aidan and Rick. You have really ramped up the emotions and drama in these last chapters! I love the healing in Aidan's family, and now Rick's sister needs help! I have to get back to my reading! The good part of being behind is being able to go on to the next chapter without waiting! Thanks.
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It is great to see Stephen settling in so well. I can't wait to see how school goes for him! Thanks.
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I am usually quite content to be at home. I find Covid has changed that some. I occasionally feel housebound. I think it's because before I could leave when I wanted. I guess I can still leave, but the things I would leave for are not available: movies, theater, dinner out. Your poem speaks to me. I envy you woods that are available to you. Thanks.
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A lovely poem with a touch of sadness. Beautifully written. Thank you.
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I enjoyed the beginning of this story! I am curious to see how things go for Stephen in Denmark. I visited there once many years ago. I remember the country being beautiful and the people very friendly. Thanks.
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I am happy for Elias! He had made so much progress from when he first came to the campground! I think I am even more proud of Orson! Every parent knows how hard it is to let your child start their own life away from you. Elias called him correctly. "Dad." That's exactly what Orson has been for him. You did a great job writing his confusion and sadness over Elias' place for his own space. And Joseph's love, compassion, and support for him. I also enjoyed Harlan's and Bailey's courtship, or at least the beginning of it! Great chapter! Thanks.
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I was a little behind in my reading. I just binged four chapters, and you've really ramped up the excitement level! Wow! I have been enjoying this story since the beginning, but you've made it even better! I am impressed with how well leadership fits Alex. Although based on his earlier actions it should come as no surprise. Things have become life and death. That adds to the tension, but also creates sadness as characters you like are killed. Thanks for more good story.
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So Much is New--and Perfect
JeffreyL commented on FlyOnTheWall's story chapter in So Much is New--and Perfect
Thank you for another wonderful story! You writing style is very readable. Your characters are mostly loveable, and readers are drawn to them. Your plot and dialogue are both first rate! As with your other stories, I have enjoyed this immensely! Thank you. -
You have created these quirky characters that I find intriguing! I have two friends who are professional musicians, but because we are long time friends, they don't seem quirky to me. Musicians do have a reputation for eccentric behaviors. I hope by the end of the story Stratos not be letting his manager and sister push him around. Looks like he has already started with his sister. Thanks.
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This chapter is a great beginning! I think you did an excellent job writing from Noah's point of view. In my opinion you chose just the right vocabulary and voice for Noah. I love these characters, and I look forward to more of Noah's story. Thanks.
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