JeffreyL

If the story ends with this chapter it will have been an exciting adventure, and I am well satisfied. You took the shifter genre, which I enjoy, and reworked it in a wonderful way! The colors, the healing, the silver and copper, and the malaise were inspired additions to this genre! And your characters were well drawn, believable, and (mostly) loveable. I worried with their set backs and rejoiced in their successes. All that being said, if the percolating in your brain gets to be too much, jot down a few words and share them. There are so many great stories that could be told. I would love to read more, and I know many others feel the same! So kudos, Gary, for a job well done. Enjoy your time, and if someday you're ready to visit Morningstar again, I'd like to come along for the ride. Thanks. Jeff

As much as I don't care for spiders, this was cleverly written. Thank you. Jeff

How nice to hear from Aiden and Logan again. I have been hoping you hadn't given up on their story. You have given Aiden a delightful voice! Logan too, but I especially like Aiden's touch of sarcasm as he narrates his story. I look forward to reading about the firehouse dinner. Thanks for continuing this story. Jeff

I agree with BlindAmbition. Emancipation is in order. Thses characters have blended into this big family, and it's great to see how they love and care for each other! Each one has the rest for a mega-support group. Can't wait to get them moved into the new house! And Will's mom is based on a real person? Seriously? That makes me shudder.

Eric is clearly more evil than I thought. Just from this brief exchange, manipulative doesn't begin to describe him. Can this story ever segue into HEA? Or at least end up with fewer kicks to the head? More good writing. Thanks. Jef

The birthday trip was a grand event, and I envy CJ and his big, close group of friends and how much they enjoy each other's company. You are in a bit of trouble Carlos. You hinted at Harley's date in the last chapter and didn't even mention it in this chapter. So spill. I want all the juicy details! Once again I'm putting on my broken record: thanks for this great group of characters and your wonderful storytelling. Jeff

Your story just keeps getting better and better! Thank you. Jeff

OMG! Please write faster! I'm dying to see what happens next with "the confession," and what happens with the lawyer. I am wishing Bailey would reach out for some help from someone. Thanks for more good story. Jeff

Liam is lucky to have several loving people in his life. Corey gave him some good advice. I'm curious to see what Liam decides to do.

Looking forward to seeing what happens to Chris. I am liking this journal writing style of story telling. Thanks. Jeff

It is so great to learn more about the history behind Kellar and the pack.! I am glad Fendral has been able to shift back and share information with Kellar and Tobyn. Thanks. Jeff

Oooo! Raymond and Daniel are smokin'! It's amazing how fast Adams Inc. can put a plan together get the ball rolling. And is there a touch of the supernatural in Miss Julie? She seems perceptive beyond the powers of mere mortals. Now I know you said this chapter has important stuff, and you were right. But quit stalling ? and let's get on with Christmas!

Carlos, I need to say I am really disappointed in this chapter. It is no where close to your usual standards... ? Actually, I just thought you were probably bored with the kudos you usually get and decided to stir up a little conflict. Besides your usual cast of great characters and your good ear for dialogue, you included several memorable moments: CJ's connections for setting up the World AIDS Day event at Walls. The information about the AIDS Memorial Quilt. CJ's chat with Mr. Obama. Thiago dumps the bitch. Did she ever actually have a name? HARLEY HAS A DATE?!!! REALLY?!! Lunch at Forbes Grille (a real place?). And my perennial favorite, the pillow talk between Cesar and Brett at the end of most chapters. Thanks for all of it. Jeff

My heart goes out to Bailey once again. The idea of writing from two points of view is especially effective for this story. It is amazing how differently people see the same event. It just goes to show how much our past experiences and perceptions play a part. I want to feel bad for Declan, but he needs to get his feelings sorted. Looking forward to more. Thanks. Jeff

You just gotta love Liam! Glad his life is moving forward, and he's been accepted to college. Now, let's work on team Marty. ?

Just one more example of why I love Joel and his mostly calm and gentle nature. I'm glad they finally got things sorted. And I'm glad Joel and Lucas are willing and should be able to help Tommy. Thanks. Jeff

I am excited to make a return visit to the world of Ethan and Aiden! Like Imoline I often wondered how Michael and company turned out so different from the other young pack members. It will be interesting seeing things through Chris's eyes. Your story is off to a good start, and I'm hooked already! Thanks. Jeff

Kellar just keeps getting more interesting and complex! And this shifter world you've created never fails to amaze me. I can't wait to see what happens next for Fendral. Thanks. Jeff

You must be an amazing parent, or you know some. Your dialogue between Paul and Maria is great! First is Maria's dialogue. You must have a child's point of view hat you put on because Maria talks like little kids do. And Paul's responses are classic keep it simple, tell what they need to know, but don't tell too much. Bonus points to you for your good dialogue. I'm glad to finally know the story of the Adams family (snap, snap). Looking forward to Christmas, and wondering what's going to happen to the "marked" money being donated. Thanks for more of this good story. Jeff

Looking forward to The Squad's trip to Colorado. What a great idea for a birthday celebration! So many other readers' comments were things I thought, I'll just say thanks, once again, for this very enjoyable story. Jeff

I want to take bubby1234's comment one step further. I mentioned in an earlier comment, couldn't Marty be straight but gay for Liam? It has certainly happened in other gay fiction I've read. Maybe that wasn't bubby's intent, but that's what I read into it. And I like Eileen even more. Some fun and several tender moments in this chapter. Thanks. Jeff

Well Mac, it looks like you're not going to make it easy for these two. It only took me 23 installments to make that statement. ? And you've just added to the Curtis mystery. We need some more history regarding Curtis, Mom, and Travis. Maybe Dad, too. Can't wait to see what happens when Ben goes home. Thanks. Jeff

Things with Bailey seem to go from bad to worse. I assume he was assaulted and possibly raped by his football teammates. Hence the dislike of being touched. At this point you have us all caring about Bailey and sad about how life has been treating him. I keep looking for some ray of hope that there is a light at the end of the tunnel, but I'm not finding one. There doesn't seem to be much positive in his life, and I worry that he's heading in the direction of suicide.

I really enjoyed this story! I was a little confused about the gods arguing over Lihai and Katanga. It might help if you told more about which God is protecting which people. That being said, I loved your characters, especially Vekare. I think it would be easy to expand this into several chapters. You could tell more about their new home under the sea. I guess that's a hint that I would like to read more. ? Thanks for this most enjoyable story. Jeff

The first day of school was great! Some drama and some fun. TJ is lucky to be gathering such a good group of friends! I think it must make coming out and being accepted as gay so much easier with that kind of support. I do want to grumble and gripe. No fair skipping over Mel and whatever devious plans she's up to. A whole chapter and not a hint is not nice to your readers. Waiting impatiently for more. Thanks. Jeff