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  1. FormerMember4

    Chapter 10

    I’m glad you introduced my bite theory. Physical and DNA evidence can’t be explained away. Det. Diamond is like Barney Fife... not your brightest law enforcement officer. I look forward to the inspection of evidence.
  2. This was a great 2.0 papi. All authors I enjoy immensely. Very different in approach with very individual voices. @Dodger story is a refreshing new style from him. The writing is clever and witty. The pop star is complicated, leaving a different perception every chapter. The description of The Church reminds me of nights at the now defunct Limelight in NYC. A great read. @Cynus and @Dabeagle are two of my faves. Cynus does epic and thought provoking stories with fully developed characters. Dabeagle does wonderful character studies. Stories often quite emotional. The List was well written and enjoyable. He kept the integrity of Cynus’s characters intact. The poems I’ve read by @MythOfHappiness are thoughtful and quite expressive. Very enjoyable reads.
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    Plan B

    He’s far from reformed, but I give Billy some credit. The constant thorn in Carl’s ass. He didn’t continue to sell his soul to the devil by taking bribe. He even tried to help Joey. While sweet, not sure why he chose Mary to be his beard. I don’t see it as a nice gesture. At least he doesn’t have to worry about what base he’ll be sliding into.
  4. FormerMember4

    Chapter 20

    I can’t help but think of the philosopher Johann Fichte. He was known for an idea of thesis, antithesis, synthesis. The triad idea on explaining balance and change. That could be what Max, Styx, and Kirra also represent.
  5. I was thinking 1st person writing.
  6. Sending you good vibes.
  7. Welcome to GA Napoleon. It’s a great community. I’m jp.
  8. FormerMember4

    The Barn

    This one had me crying. Just perfect. The moment all the puzzle pieces fit together... that’s this moment.
  9. FormerMember4

    Chapter 20

    I can also see Kirra, Max, and Styx as a trio for another reason. In mythology 3 holds great significance. In this case, one could represent the upper world, one represents lower world, and one represents the underworld.
  10. FormerMember4

    Chapter 20

    I was also thinking that. I see the strengths in a relationship with Kirra, Max, and Styx.
  11. FormerMember4

    Chapter 20

    There is more to Prism’s intuition. Is he foreseeing outcome and death? His observations of Neredos and Veil I fear to be truth. Much has changed. The reasons are concerning. Is it complacency? Power? Prism put words to what I’ve been feeling. This battle is going to rely heavily on Styx and Max. Max for his knowledge, Styx for his ability and quickness. Prism’s remark on death was important to this story. Take what you’ve learned from those that have died. Mourning is a dangerous luxury for what they will be facing.
  12. For me, I’d love that. I grew up in NYC region and love theatre. I think many of us would enjoy it.
  13. Good chapter. While i agree with Drought on procedure, I like the characters. After show tunes were introduced, I started the random *insert* throughout chapter. Look forward to more.
  14. That quote holds truth. Especially in music. There’s The 27 Club, musicians dying at 27... Jimi Hendrix, Jim Morrison, Janis Joplin, and Amy Winehouse to name a few.
  15. This was a fantastic chapter. It was a beautiful moment with Oli and Mrs. Haner. She acknowledged some faults and showed she needs him too. It’s a strong boy who can say he needs his mom. That studio was Oli’s playground. Any stage is where he’ll shine. The confidence can’t be more clear. The moment he put the school on blast was momentous. It showed that he wasn’t broken by them. The Phoenix rising from the ashes.
  16. I’m sorry tim. Ripley was more than a dog. Ripley was friend and family. I wish you peace. It’s ok to honor him. Doesn’t matter how long you do it. memories ensure he will always be with you. xo
  17. Kasey, I hope you’re investing wisely. The mouths will keep you in the life of luxury. Everyone should have a kilt at the ready. Easy access. 😇 Hopefully there’s a long life ahead for Blu’s mom. She has a lot of grandbabies to watch growing up. Keep @Wesley8890 in tears. I’m buying stock in Kleenex and cosmetics.
  18. FormerMember4

    Chapter 7

    The fathers anger in beginning of story was a red herring. It greatly pleases me that the father ripped Devon a new asshole. Devon has some nerve. Considering his exploration with Paul. Those who live in glass houses... The mother is a huge disappointment. There is certainly adjusting time involved. Giving your gay child stipulations that you don’t give straight one is clearly a homophobic gesture. Don’t pretend it’s anything else. I think we’re going to have a house divided... Kevin/Dad and Devon/Mom. I’m happy that Kevin and Cameron have the coach. Way too often gay teens don’t have positive gay role models close to them. It really helps with confidence and self-acceptance.
  19. This one was quite different and enjoyable. Be careful what you wish for. Well written!
  20. Happy to see the move was a success. Pace yourself. There will be order and a sense of being settled eventually. Just remember to breathe. Change is never easy. However, it can prove to be just what we need. Wishing you all the best on this new chapter.
  21. Good chapter. I’m glad people lost jobs. Now to tie down no good Hasnocock. Force feed him ex-lax cookies and pizza. Let him stew in his juices. 💩
  22. FormerMember4

    The Scoop!

    Great chapter. They are smart to get ahead of story. Guide the narrative. I agree with Oli. It’s awkward talking hotness of someone with your mother. Doesn’t matter how supportive. It was sweet when Teddy told Ryder he loves Oli almost as much. They are very good role models. Setting boundaries that Oli never had. While having open and honest communication with him.
  23. Beautifully done Mac Sir and tim. Your shared thoughts blended so naturally. A single line from this collaboration speaks to the feeling of the piece as a whole. Like notes strung together to form a musical composition
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    Oliver Who?

    This was a wonderful chapter. Of course you had the release. That’s amazing. The most powerful thing... Oli had very deep conversations with the ones who mean the most. Ryder and Teddy who are his idols. Mark who is the boyfriend, best friend and confidant. His proud father and most enthusiastic fan. Bonds are being carefully strengthened.
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    Unity

    I love this chapter. Unity is a great name. It’s positive and screams togetherness. Which merges all the genres. Oli will be loved. He has emo mastered. Boys and girls will be throwing their panties, or what’s worn 30 years in the future. Keep it independent and own your musical choices. By then you should be able to self publish on Amazon...LOL!
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