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Great chapter! I love Jenny. I want her to drag Rachel across the campus. Caveman style. It also wouldn't hurt to bury her body. I don't think she would be missed. Good for TJ, starting the GSA. It will help to take care of gutter trash like Rachel. More importantly, support student's who are gay or questioning. I think theirs a fight coming for Josh. I hope he won't get hurt too bad by his mothers actions. At least he will have a good support system.

I am really enjoying the progress of this story. Who doesn't love the scenery of Hawaii! After reading the first chapter, it makes sense... This poor guy lacks any self esteem. Hopefully, his outlook will change!

I bet the thing Billy loses in chapter 1 of Retaliation... His braces! @jkwsquirrel

Oh, Hell Yes!!

I just love how you captured those sweet moments of a new and blossoming relationship. The moments where it's so overwhelming to be with them or without them. When your heart feels like its going to explode from your chest. Awesome chapter Comicality!

How about Ash! A nod to the android science officer in Alien.

Wow Gary!! This was an excellent chapter. Kellar has a connection to the pack. The earth mother works in mysterious ways. Such a sad situation for those who knew Gigi. I see the relationship between Eleanor and Kellar become even stronger. Its quite clear, Eleanor still mourns the loss of her friend. Kellar is Fendral's grandson. I wonder if he was tracking him at his cabin. I never realized there were so many sexual innuendos to fishing lingo. Hilarious! Doesn't everything come down to size? LOL! It was nice to see Arthur have memories of his old pack. The bonding with Sybil has definitely increased her visions... I can't help thinking, the pack is going to need her. Something tells me there's danger ahead.

I've been thinking the story with Riley's father might take a completely different twist. Instead of having anything to do with the death of his mother. What if bio dad is the reason for Carter's sister dying?

I truly love this story... Its about love, unity and dreams of the future. This story has shown happiness, pain, hurdles to overcome. Yet, when united... You pull through any situation. I love that these characters put others first. They are selfless and just want to better the lives of those around them. Who doesn't love a chapter that includes Benny!!

I just love the relationship between Riley and Nancy. That was a very mature act on Riley's part. Letting her know that he isn't going anywhere. More importantly, what he wants out of visiting his father. I wonder if theirs going to be trouble ahead for Riley and Aaron. Aaron is most certainly showing jealousy over Riley and Carter's relationship. I don't think Riley being gay is the issue... Just feeling abandoned. Carter is just the perfect boyfriend. He wants Riley to experience things he's never had. Takes the time to learn about what makes his boyfriend tick. He is like a sponge, remembers everything he has learned. I just love Carter saying "You do You"!

Good first chapter... I think I'm going to enjoy Ava. Definitely a girl with spunk!!

Sweet, simple chapter! Cam is a little OCD, 5 minutes late.

While the talk may not have been extensive. It definitely was a start in understanding where each is coming from. Corey might not be able to be friends now. However, he shouldn't completely close that door. At least, not until he has sorted through his feelings. Corey obviously has support. Whether he sees it or not. His father has very clearly shown he is their to help pick up the pieces. Charlie and Adrian have also shown they want to be their. The coach is a good support as well. With a remark he made. I'm wondering if he understands more than Corey may realize. Letting Corey know about his scouting prospects, may help him focus and get back on track. There is an obvious attraction between Adrian and Corey. I sure hope that Corey proceeds with caution. He needs to deal with his emotions with Brett before anything happens. Adrian doesn't have the same support system if he gets hurt. He also has a lot more to lose. With his father being a preacher.

I really liked this chapter. It was nice to get the backstory on these two characters. I find it funny, Danny wanting to take it slow... He had the man's tool down his throat.

I think there might have been a wrong chapter posting. Chapter 10 was awhile ago.

I am happy to see Riley get a chance at a better life. While I understand wanting to see your birth father. Will he really get answers from a father who has never been their. I love the date scene with Carter. You captured the feeling of beginning love very well. Carter's sentiment about HOPe was beautiful. Good things will happen... When you have hope. The fact that Riley allowed the kiss with Carter just shows he's all in on this relationship. I hope these two won't find themselves with too many hurdles. However, I think Carter's father will be one big hurdle to overcome.

OMG, the story of Bailey just gets more and more depressing. It seems he's self -harming, has anorexic tendencies. Might be dealing with anxiety issues, it seems. He puts on a brave face at home... Then has to deal with a verbally abusive and alcoholic mother. While trying to deal with fathers death. How absolutely heartbreaking. While Justin is trying to penetrate Bailey's walls. Its clear that absolutely no one is getting through at this time. With Bailey's feelings for Declan, he might be his only saving grace. If only Declan can decode his own feelings towards Bailey. Great practice routine description. You captured Bailey's pain perfectly in this chapter @craftingmom

You're looking for a little Brokeback Mountain... Huh! ?

For such a church preaching woman... biggest Hypocrite. Needs to go back and read her bible!

I'm actually waiting for the chapter Cindy gets beat down by her own best friend... Jackson's mom! *grin*

Yeah... if Joey messes with Billy. Watch out. The only thing that matters to Brett... is Billy! Joey will get a replay of Brett's temper at Billy's party... when he punched Billy. However, Joey will be the target.

OMG! Luke's mother has that stick so far up her ass. The nerve to tell Jackson "Stay away from my son ". I think Luke will end up making a decision. It will be to take Jackson's side. Telling his mother to back off or lose me. Ally and Heather need to mind their own damn business. Jackson doesn't answer to them. Neither one is dating him anymore. I think the boys should come out... I think they will find themselves with more support than they think. Other than Cindy, who is just a lost cause anyways. She is enough to make any child want to slit their wrists. No matter how much good she thinks she does! Thanks @Kristaa I was going through story withdrawal!

You are correct... According to the first book. However, I wouldn't put anything past Brett either. He might have gone on his own search in the past. This saga could take so many different roads in Retaliation!!

I was thinking Brett and Joey were cousins too! Whether they know it or not. However, seems like something Brett would tell Billy. If he knew. If this is true, things might get rough. With Brett's own issues.

I like the way you ended this chapter of Billy and Brett. The boys showed a maturity that has been lacking. Billy finally expresses his feelings. Not only love, but his anger and fears. Brett finally didn't sound like a whiny little bitch. He really tried to take in what Billy was saying. His feelings in needing to help Dustin. Thank God the beginning was only a dream. That would have just been a huge mistake. Adding to an already large mountain of issues. Besides, Dustin needs friendship. Not sex. Joey has become quite a prick. I really hope karma has her eye on him. Especially after Billy knows about the drugs. Joey introducing Brett to them. All while Joey sells himself as the perfect little alter boy. Hopefully Billy's father being home will help. Relieving some of Billy's stress. Allowing him to resolve other issues he has going on.