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Some of this stuff was worthy of the Air Force one movie.I have to believe there's a traitor among them how else would the bad guys know what to do?

I bet you don't know what's going to happen until you actually type it LOL.

OK I apologize if this review is not written well for I am very limited. We have a debut story by this author but you would never know it because it reads like the best seasoned authors GA has to offerThe story is loosely set in the world of author's Ronyx's Dancing On A Star. If you're expecting a Ronyx clone(although that would not be bad thing)you would be mistaken.This author has a unique and effective style and imagination all his own. The story starts and centers around high school teenager named TJ.On the surface everything looks great loving parents two younger brothers who are very close and a lifelong friend who is pretty much like another brother. TJ is also a very talented dancer good enough to get a scholarship at the acclaimed school Julliard .Two event happen that would be tough on any teenager TJ's father who's in the military dies while doing an assignment and his boyfriend does the ultimate betrayal.While this is terrible on its own it leads to a chain of event where a lot of stuff previously unknown to TJ and his brothers come to light.One incident leads to another involving among other things rape,death,crooked police and up til then unknown relatives.TJ doesn't know who to trust what was up is now down it gets to the point where TJ just has remove himself from this situation including his scholarship at Julliard and goes underground. What does TJ do from there? well you will have to read the story.Like every good story the author is very good at having the characters express emotion and you as a reader get involved with these emotions.A lot of readers can guess what will happen next in a story that won't be the case with this author and that's what makes this story so fun

Awesome story,Awesome ending.looking forward to next story.We're praying if you have to have your surgery that all goes well.Just a minor suggestion if you don't mind could you let us know how Jack's sisters are doing? A random thought do they have to get Little Tristan a cell phone?The way I see it he doesn't need it.

Well it's a good thing they have a CIA sniper then.

Good chapter. While I was reading this I thought it was going to be the final chapter. Still more to go 😀

Oh wait let me check something first.OK @Wesley8890 commented so its OK for me to go ahead. Great chapter.I have only one nagging thing on my mind based on previous events.Mark just happens to work at a company that BHO uses and its in nearby Oakland where TJ is.I'm really thinking nothing is going to happen but it should be enough to raise a red flag don't you think?Maybe you just corrupted my thinking. You just have keep little Tristian in your stories

Good chapter.Are there universities like this one?

Carlo is worried that they don't offer the classes he needs. But I got to believe Tony could make that happen

Then he would see Rony's link to this story.I was thinking what if JC reads this one

Wow 100 acres in Hawaii?To buy that you got to be stinking rich.I love the interrogation techniques.The wig with the blood pack awesome.

The first thing TJ should do now that he's going to run things is hire a new personnel director and improve background checks they have had so many traitors.But I guess you can say it's improving Dora was evil where as Evelyn is just a ditz. Wow Grandpa Ron.It explains something a lot of Rony's characters have forgiving hearts and forgave people and TJ did the same for Rusty.It shows he was influenced by Rony's stories.Did you tell Rony you were going to do this?If it was a surprise that would be just Like you LOL.

Please stay with the story you won't regret it.I do understand how you feel this part is rough.It gets better

I just knew I was going to hear an Dora the explorer comment🙄 Excellent chapter except CC made what I thought was a rookie mistake which was fatal I have a tough time thinking she would overlook that.I wonder if this is the first time a character died while they were narrating a story. Now who takes over CC's job?Everybody who's connected has to be extra cautious now.Let me guess the next incident will be at the wedding.

Anywhere really.There are a few I haven't read yet out of the ones I have read my favorites are A Mourning Storm,It's Not Easy Being A Tree and Scott's Story. It's subjective as you know but I would start there. Scott's Story is a sequel to Mark's Revenge also very very good.Warning A Mourning Storm has some sad part that are tough to read.Apple Of Her Eye was his very first story and that was very good if you want to do it that way.

Wow you binged read all that?Cool.If you're not familiar with the rest of his stories I would put this one in the middle of the pack believe or not he has some better ones IMHO so check those out sometime.Don't get me wrong they are all good I think this one is good also.

Chet and Nick got involved if it were me I'm not sure I would want to hang with these guys

I'm sure everything will be OK but it is a little unnerving that there maybe people around that mean you harm

It's funny you should mention that.I made a chapter comment in Dancing where I compared Jack to Gary from Apple.

If you read my comment before I edited it I totally F it up.I guess the mind is the first thing to go.

It would be somebody who CC had trusted but we know you can't fool for her for too long I just hope it's not someone we like.If it was say Jack I would stop reading the story(BTW I don't think that) I got an idea for another story.When JC starts reading other @Ronyx stories and then reads Dancing he's going to ask TJ "Hey what's this about?".Is Ronyx part of BHO?LOL

Now the parents have met.I think the cookie dough crust vanilla ice cream dessert was the clincher.Lucky they are distance runners

They are both no longer with us so I has to be someone else.I'm not going to try to figure this one out I'll just let myself be shocked

I was typing my comment while you typed yours we have the same though so you're just as disturbed as I am LOL

I agree with @Thomas Haworth speculation.But since you asked "Any ideas as to what Emily is about to tell TJ? " I'll give a possibility.Amazingly I guessed the Emily and Tristian one. So how about this Emily had a kid out of wedlock when Tristan Sr. was on one of his trips.She secretly made arrangements for the baby to be taken care of and that baby was TRISTAN!!!! TJ really is his brudder. Before any of you think I'm crazy @AquariusGuy just might top this.