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A Land of Drought and Flooding Rains
VBlew commented on Wombat Bill's story chapter in A Land of Drought and Flooding Rains
It actually ended up good that these people took over the house or they would have found a mess when they got there. Also interesting line of questions from Thomas about which attracted Dante first the bike or the rider?? -
Is Patrick upset with his brother over the Honda rider that came on to him at the bar thinking they had hooked up? When it must have been Dante… They need to talk about that. Dante and Thomas may have an open relationship, but by Thomas’ comment about commitment, maybe not from his perspective.
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Chapter 30: Tricky Tussle
VBlew commented on astone2292's story chapter in Chapter 30: Tricky Tussle
Another amazing chapter.. Lighting from the eyes!, Vincent learning to use his own power and not use the bracelet as a crutch.. I think this will give him more control over his magic and better able to tap into the extra stores when he really needs it.. and having it on an ankle shields it from others knowing he has extra available. Dirk and Ingle -- Wow, great first side of their bonding.. now they need to flip and do it the other way to be complete. Right?- 40 comments
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To Sleep in a Bed of Deer
VBlew commented on Yeoldebard's story chapter in To Sleep in a Bed of Deer
Great short story. Glad to have you back. I really enjoy the worlds you have created. And Faros that you write about seem very interesting. -
I was not sure what this would be at first, but it is an interesting store, mixed with history that is unfamiliar to someone from the west. The mix of The various mythology is good to have a background as a framework too.
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Wow, love and forgiveness are powerful. This was a great ending to a very dramatic story. I would love to see a sequel to where they take their lives.
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George, thanks for the nice ending. It does appear that they needed to be apart for a while to be able to follow their dreams, and now they can be together and share their passions.
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15. Parting and Fare-ye-wells
VBlew commented on Georgie DHainaut's story chapter in 15. Parting and Fare-ye-wells
This was a very sad chapter. It’s strange that they made the assumptions that they could not find the work that they both could do in Inverness…. But that was what they thought. The enlightenment of Father Lighthouse, was very interesting too. -
Matt and Brody finally are moving on in their relationship. Is Matt getting out of the hospital soon?
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I had a thought about Tyler after this chapter. Wondering if he is going to be a mate to one of the wolves? That could make things interesting 🤔
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Responding to your question of pacing, is seems appropriate to me. You’re inviting us into this world you have created and it does take som time to explain that, as well as move the story plot along. This is a very interesting story, and with the investigating going on regarding the suspicious death of Charlie, it is moving along nicely.
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This was a great story to read. I like the way you revised it from the first version. The Epilogue, while short gives a glimpse into the future they all have, and it seems with much less drama than in the middle of the story. Looking forward to more of your stories.
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That was intense having Timmy open up and discuss all of that about himself. And being strong about what he didn’t want to talk openly about. So maybe that’s what he wants to talk about alone with Pate.
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So my angry emoji on this chapter was about Brody’s violent reaction to what Nathan said. I get that he is emotional and in love with Matt, but being violent instead of having a conversation about his feelings is not a good thing. There is a lot of dysfunction in this story to begin with, and that doesn’t seem to be a way to possibly build a healthy relationship with the people around your loved one.
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Chapter 10 Spring Fever
VBlew commented on Georgie DHainaut's story chapter in Chapter 10 Spring Fever
I’m wondering why Kyle didn’t speak up and say what he was feeling about leaving the work he loved with the horses? -
Wow, that was so raw and open. The feelings, feeling all alone. You managed through, good for you. And yes I do imagine there are other people with similar experiences.
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Fairies do have interesting was of working. This was a very enjoyable tale.
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Quick ending to book one, which has been an interesting adventure. Looking forward to book 2.
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Chapter 33 - Coming Through The Otherside
VBlew commented on James Matthews's story chapter in Chapter 33 - Coming Through The Otherside
I like the way you wrapped this story up. Some could say it was a quick sprint to the finish. I found the whole thing very insightful to the mental health issues and the way you dealt with a very dysfunctional family. Excellent job. Looking forward to more stories from you. -
Good decision to keep the dialog about what happened on earth with the children, as they too need to learn from the mistakes made on their home planet. Fun having Robot, and plans for robotic pets. That will be good for morale.
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This is an interesting twist. Kyle needs to be honest about his needs to his two companions. I’m also wondering if he may be an ideal jockey for racing horses with his ability to communicate with them so well.
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Very nice chapter, it’s nice to have someone be forthcoming about how they feel and what they want. Makes the sex so much better.
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This is a great story, loving the use of Robbie. Interesting that there are not advanced androids, or maybe they don exist in this worldview. Seems like Athena could be sentient, given enough time. Great seeing that sexuality is a non issue on the Ark, at least in these families.
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Chapter 30 - More Fate: Leander's Secret
VBlew commented on James Matthews's story chapter in Chapter 30 - More Fate: Leander's Secret
That was a crazy end of this chapter. So did anyone else at the fair know? Could it be that is why the fair woman who we thought was his mother had him beaten? Mystery inside of a mystery…. Your writing is so captivating. Can hardly wait for more. -
Sad thing to happen to such a good lad. The boys justice was not as strong as would have been liked, but the did get caught and had some punishment.
