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I think that's probably the case. I have not had a trick or treater in a few years. Part of it is that I live close to the top of a steep hill but even the flat part of my neighborhood has not been as busy as it used to be.
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I love the sacrifice scene it kept me on edge the whole time and you managed to make a simple pine needle scary! Impressive!
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I love the dream! The image of the old man eating candy is priceless. It embodied the idea of old people ruining the fun perfectly. There are plenty of kids who go trick or treating well into their teens now but I do remember a time when eleven was considered a little old. I was quite tall for an 11 year old and I remember getting a few comments about my age. Almost twenty years later I was in a silly mood so I decided to dress up and go to those same houses just to see what people would say. To my surprise my neighbors gave me lots of candy and didn't seem to care that I was obviosly middle-aged. Clearly times have changed! Maybe next year they will have a party at the b&b.
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I've always found it interesting when people try yot figure out what was going on inside of a murderes head. This story painted a great picture of someone who was clearly obsessed. I enjoyed the happy ending but I can't help wondring if this is realy a new beginig or if a few months down the road Jody will be plotting against someon again.
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That was my thought also. The kids seem to always get the worst of it when parents split up.
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I love the way this story had elements of horror but also taped into a whole spectrum of emotions. The ending was great too. The ghosts usualy don't sit around the campfire listening to the story.
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I haven't thought about this story in a while. I usualy don't write sequels but it might be fun to revisit these characters at some point. In the meantime I have been letting the couples in my stories have some fun but it still feel a little bit like looking into my neighbors' windows.
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Great to have you back! I can completely relate. There have been times when I would barely look at the site for months because there was just too much to do in the real world and I do like to get at least a few hours of sleep every night. I don't think you have anything to apologize for.
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I love the characters you created. They were both believable and fascinating. I hope there will be a sequel.
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Can't A Guy Visit A Friend?
jfalkon commented on thecalimack's story chapter in Can't A Guy Visit A Friend?
This is the best stroy I have read in a while. I love the way you describe the roon in disaray and especialy the notebook. -
I just want to thank every one who commented. Thanks for pointing out the transition. I was experimenting a little with changing from one character's point of view to another. After writing and then reading the story several times it is hard to judge how weill certain things worked. After writing about a third of this story I gave up on the idea of making the ending a complete surprise. It seemed unlikely that the two characters would not start to suspect each other. Maybe I should have stuck to "plan A." I have played a few pranks in my life but I am no where neer the level of my characters. I notice oportunities to mess with people but usualy decide against it.
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Maybe that is their true calling. They do seem like two guys who have (had?) too much time on their hands.
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People who are born on Hollidays usualy compain about it but it is understandable. I would hate it if my birth entitled me to be the butt of everyone's jokes every year. I was very happy for Conrad when his most recent birthday turned out to be fun without pranks.
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This was hilarious! I love Oliver. He was just what I would expect from a great Math teacher. His anxiety was completely relatable. It would be awesome if Oliver got a job in the Bay Area eventually. The ending was cute. I guess the students will get their homework back after all.
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I'm a little on the fence about the joke. If the two had a habbit of joking, teasing, etc., online maybe this is acceptable. On the other hand, to spring this on someone who had no idea about your crazy sense of humor is cruel. Considering the nature of online relationships I could imagine this ending in a nasty fight. Despite this I could not help liking the story. It was fun to read.
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This story had the feel of a comic strip to me. The little details you threw in were priceless like the part about grabbing two cups of coffee while fleeing the coffee shop. Great job!
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I did not expect half of the things that happend in this story! It was interesting to me how I liked the character less and less as the story progressed. Usually it goes the other way. Like some of the other readers, I found it hard to follow at times but that seemed consistent with the chaotic life this story describes.
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I really enjoyed this story. I love that you wrote it from the point ov view of someone with Downs Syndrome. I have never met anyone with the condition so it was fascinating to imagine how the world looks through their eyes.
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I loved the mystery about the small object in the backpack. At first I thought he was taking a manuscript to a publisher but it seemed like a low tech way of doing things. Then when I found out where he was going I thought it was a bomb but it seemed out of character. The legal papers made perfect sense. It was a perfect ending!
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Monique walked into the conference room with several stacks of copies. The meeting was about to begin and she started to pass the stacks of documents around. As the three piles began to circulate she sat down next to her manager. Looking around the room she noticed a few strange expressions crossing people's faces. She only had a moment to wonder what they were thinking before her manager began to speak. "Alright, I guess we better get started. First let me just say that we have had a grea
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Everyone wants to know who is playing jokes on people at work. The joker's identity remains a secret until April Fools Day.
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It took me a few seconds to get this. Like many others, I resolved to make no resolutions a few years ago. It works for me.
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I love the ending. It was mostly happy but not unrealisticaly so. Having Lee and Martin break up made it seem more like something that had actualy happened.
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The way you created an original mythology is impressive. The gods reminded me of the ancient Greek and Roman gods and other dieties people worshiped in those times. They were all terribly flaud and sometimes in worse ways than the humans they ruled over. The separation of Cay and Oak also had the feel of ancient mythology. It makes me wonder what would happen to the seasons if the two ever got to spend time together. Maybe that could be a mythological explanation of some of the shifts in weater patters we experience from time to time like unusualy warm winters of extreamy rainy springs.
