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Little minds and little faith; some get what they deserve while others are left to suffer.

Hmmmmmm......

Well, we know who took a bite out of the princess and at least partially why; strange that no one knows about the bite out of the castle. Good auxiliary characters already; some we like and some like Zane, we don't care for already.

Good start to this story; well done on the early character development, already care about a couple of them. Good writing and flow to this first chapter. Never sure it is a good idea to threaten a truly great wizard...

What the Hell, so Travis has been missing for five years and decides to reappear just as Cash and Ben are getting busy in the woods next to the haunted mansion??? I don't know whether to be pissed or gob smacked.

Since the mental institution had already been mentioned; that is where I figured Claudia was. So the preacher and his son but are trying to help Benjamin, that could be interesting. This chapter flowed really well, the writing is first rate.

I can't decide about Cash; why is he so sure that Benjamin was guilty if the police could not find any evidence back when it happened; is it just that no one ever solved the crime; and exactly what was the crime? The side plot with the stolen condoms and it being the preachers son was really funny. Humor, especially sly humor isn't always easy to pull off; but well done.

Well, that was certainly an interesting start to this story; throwing up in a cop's car usually isn't the wisest of things to do. A lot of questions; but I assume we will get some answers about some of them in the coming chapters. Good flow and character development already, can't wait to see where this one goes.

Love this; can't believe Anthony was dumb enough to try that. Phuong is hot and powerful; what a combination. So well written, the chapter just flowed seamlessly. Can't wait to see what comes next. I think we all know, who we hope is behind this; can't wait to see some ass kicking in the future.

This is the first major mistake that Alex has made; he should never have opened the door. I actually can't believe that whomever built this would have even placed something like that there; at least without a whole lot more camouflage. What if there is a pathogen in the atmosphere and being locked in was protecting them from it; this was just so totally irresponsible. Mac is right; Alex cannot win every argument with Larry; but with a bully every time you don't stand up to them it just gives them a license to get worse. Well, can't wait for the next chapter.

The interaction with the American base was too funny. The rigidness of the American reaction to start with; then a little softening toward the end. Have to wonder what the event will be that will bring the conflict between Alex and Larry to a head; will brute force win or will brains and training triumph. I can't decide about Tom. He seems to follow Larry at times and other times appears to be just tolerating him and letting Larry make a fool out of himself.

Well, I agree that they need to fully explore and map out this location. They need to make sure that they know everything that is there and what they have and don't have. It isn't like they yare going to be able to call out for take out or anything. Alex has proven great so far; but why not have someone older there? Even if not one of the parents; why not an adult to be in charge and explain what is going on?

So aliens not zombies but still; I wonder if they are responsible for the meteors that had the whatever that was causing people to act crazy. Now I am really worried about Kobe; and all the parents. I am sort of annoyed at these adults; no matter what was going on, Alex or someone should have been better informed. I actually can't believe the kids have reacted as well as they have, wonder how long that will last. This facility does seem to be very self contained. But still think if at least one of them; Alex being the obvious choice, should not have been more informed. Maybe when he gets to the command center and can access some more info he and we will learn a little more about what is going on. Have to wonder if this is the only facility????

Well, the shit has certainly hit the fan. The tension level and excitement both jumped exponentially in this chapter. I hope that Kobe got on another bus and he is his siblings are safe as well; but don't really think so. I can tell that Larry is going to be an ongoing problem. I don't think that anyone there can physically slap him down but Alex or someone is going to have to do something to control him or he will be nothing but problems. Don't know how much martial arts training Alex has but he may need more facing Larry than he did against the whatever it really was.

Really liked this chapter as well; got a little deeper into the characters and how they mesh. I do find Alex's total lack of understanding that Tobi has a major crush on him baffling for someone as smart as he is and gay to boot. One minor quibble, why does the first police office always turn out to be such an idiot??? Why was such a high ranking military officer in the area; and what are the odds that he was so closely tied to Alex's family? Why was he trying to keep such a lid on what happened, murder/suicide? Have to wonder why Larry is at this camp? Most of the campers seem to be really intelligent or have a lot of knowledge in certain areas; but Larry only seems to be a bully? Is he going to end up being the foil for Alex throughout the story, brains versus brawn?

Really like this first chapter, seemed a little funny to me; almost the feel of one of those horror flicks from the 50's or 60's. Mentions of meteorites and the military; got an instant flash back to the original The Thing with Steve McQueen. Good early character development, although the age groups seem to be really spread out. Who has a camp in November, especially in the United Kingdom, would be crappy weather all around.

This was so good. I can't tell quite which way it is going to turn but there will be one soon. I have to wonder if we haven't already meet the Earth dragon that will help? Great writing and the story just flowed so well in this chapter. Keep up the great work and can't wait to see where you take this next...

This was truly a delight. The chapter just flowed so well; the writing and pacing were just perfect. I think the fact that this story has so much humor in it; that it balances out and compliments the other parts just perfectly.

Truly worth the wait; although I wish the next update would be in say 48 hours??? I really do like how the last few chapter are broken up and those involved are listed before each break in the chapter starts. I think this helps the flow of the story and provides a quick reminder for who is in each group. I am so happy that Saslara is alive and some of the students are still with her trying to get out of Bloody Rock. I hope the find their way out or run into a group that will help them find their way out; would have thought with as many groups as the Garn and Alphar sent in that most of those within would have been found by now; but I don't guess we ever got a true idea of exactly how large this geological formation really was. Love the action and the writing and everything about this story. Please keep this story going; can't wait for the next update already.

Does anyone know if the sequel is ever going to be reposted? I never understood why it was taken down. I don't think the third part was ever finished but I know it was started. Is there anywhere else that it has been posted???

A true delight from start to finish; but would not mind visiting this group again in the future. Maybe a Maria and DJ sequel down the line? Keep up the great work.

Truly adored this chapter; the writing just flowed as if on a sweet summer breeze. The complexity and scope of this story has proven to be very well thought out and the writing as allowed it to be easily understood and enjoyed. Can't wait for the next update. Keep up the great work.

Just loved this chapter; found out quite a bit more than I thought we would. Did love the revelation about family, to delicious. Can't wait to see what happens next. The issue with Phuong will prove thorny to deal with, but have to hope that it will work out for the best. I have a feeling that the level of power the three of them could generate will silence a lot of critics; but open them up to others.

Another excellent chapter, the writing just flowed as did the emotions behind it. Love how this is progressing; although I have to admit that I see trouble ahead; but can't quite decide for who... Keep up the great work.

A lovely glimpse of what will be... Great job.