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AC Benus

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...for a special someone...

 

 

Sonnet

 

… no rights have I to feel a certain way,

… no claim not pleading in pentameter,

… no earthly grip or hope my words will sway,

or trace the scope of their parameter.

Like a lawyer, skirting nine tenths of the law

to avoid thoughts of what I don’t possess,

my sad voice still reaches out to draw

belief in your heart for the love I confess.

… although no claim I have to your control,

… although no rights I assert to your mind,

… although mere trace publicly may extol,

no loud statements can anyone find.

     But in my way, I possess you all the same,

     And no judge or jury would ever lay blame. 

 

 

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Such a beautiful sonnet. I love the way you play with legal metaphors in this, yet for all the legal vocabulary, the end result is neither dry nor dull. It is is exquisite.

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1 hour ago, Parker Owens said:

Such a beautiful sonnet. I love the way you play with legal metaphors in this, yet for all the legal vocabulary, the end result is neither dry nor dull. It is is exquisite.

Thank you for your support and kind comments, my dear friend :yes: 

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1 hour ago, Lyssa said:

AC you wrote something wonderful! Thanks for sharing this! :hug:

Thanks again, Sis. You're wonderful to read my work and leave encouragement :yes: 

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AC .. lovely. That someone is very lucky to receive this .. it's wonderful as are all your sonnets.

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2 minutes ago, Mikiesboy said:

AC .. lovely. That someone is very lucky to receive this .. it's wonderful as are all your sonnets.

As always, thanks for everything, Tim. <3 

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10 minutes ago, AC Benus said:

Thanks again, Sis. You're wonderful to read my work and leave encouragement :yes: 

First, your work is magnificent!

Second, that is what family is for. Hugs.

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The mature grown up version of the schoolboy love note ... it's lovely in it's purity.

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1 hour ago, MichaelS36 said:

I enjoyed that AC. You're a very talented man.

Thank you, Mike. You brought a smile to my face - a big one that's still there  :boy:

 

 

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31 minutes ago, dughlas said:

The mature grown up version of the schoolboy love note ... it's lovely in it's purity.

Ah, thanks, Dugh. You're great...thought for a second your last word was going to be 'puerility' lol. Phew, dodged a bullet on that one ;) 

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I really enjoyed reading it. The ending two lines is wat I liked the best. U are such a talented guy AC esp ur sonnets...ur writings r such that I like reading n savouring it slowly!! Once again beautiful!!

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your poetry leaves me speechless or muttering wow over and over. 

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On 7/16/2017 at 0:03 PM, asamvav111 said:

Beautiful sonnet and most architectonic form. Worthy of your plume.

Thanks, Sas. I like that you singled out the form for comment :) 

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On 7/16/2017 at 0:24 PM, Caz Pedroso said:

Beautiful :heart: 

Thanks, Caz. I appreciate it 

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On 7/16/2017 at 0:31 PM, Aviana said:

I really enjoyed reading it. The ending two lines is wat I liked the best. U are such a talented guy AC esp ur sonnets...ur writings r such that I like reading n savouring it slowly!! Once again beautiful!!

Thanks, Aviana. I like to hear your comments, and savoring it slowly is wonderful feedback 

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On 7/16/2017 at 0:33 PM, mogwhy said:

your poetry leaves me speechless or muttering wow over and over. 

Thanks, Moggy. True confession time - I do aim for those wow moments. Nice to know I can get there sometimes ;) 

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