Benji Posted May 7, 2009 Posted May 7, 2009 (edited) Posted this morning are the first two chapters, on Dewey's site http://www.deweywriter.com/ ......A glimpse at survival in the face of the dawn of WWIII. James introduces us to teens who are very prepared, at least they think so....... Edited May 11, 2009 by Benji
Site Moderator TalonRider Posted May 7, 2009 Site Moderator Posted May 7, 2009 From my point of view, it's going to be interesting to see some of the comments from people as this story moves a long.
Mark Arbour Posted May 7, 2009 Posted May 7, 2009 Well so far, I like it. And that's saying something, since there's no sex yet.
Benji Posted May 7, 2009 Author Posted May 7, 2009 Well so far, I like it. And that's saying something, since there's no sex yet. ........Humm, end of the world, and we have 4-5 (horny, maybe) teenagers locked up in a cabin with lots of provisions. Time will tell!!
Drewbie Posted May 7, 2009 Posted May 7, 2009 I like it a lot, Tommy is a strong guy, smart, I doubt there will be sex mark
Benji Posted May 8, 2009 Author Posted May 8, 2009 I like it a lot, Tommy is a strong guy, smart, I doubt there will be sex mark .........Never know!! Besides Mark is anxious!!
Zeoanne Posted May 8, 2009 Posted May 8, 2009 Well so far, I like it. And that's saying something, since there's no sex yet. You DAWG!!! teeheehee!!! I agree though, It started quite good. I'm also anxious to see where it goes. And no Mark, not in your pants!!! LOL
Site Moderator TalonRider Posted May 8, 2009 Site Moderator Posted May 8, 2009 James isn't known for writing sex into his stories. And currently, we don 't even know if any of the guy's are gay. And no, I'm not giving any spoilers.
David McLeod Posted May 8, 2009 Posted May 8, 2009 Just read Chapter 1. It's so intense, I'm going to have to let my heart rate and blood pressure drop a bit before reading Chapter 2. Using contemporary themes and images certainly makes solid realism. I'm not sure at this point in the story that a sex scene could be more exciting or satisfying than the story already is. I mean this in a good way and, after all, it's very early in the story (and in this part of the world).
David McLeod Posted May 10, 2009 Posted May 10, 2009 Chapter 2 read, sir! Even after 24 hours, my time, it was easy to slip back into the story. The intensity of the first chapter was on a personal level; in Chapter 2, it's much broader without, however, being diluted. Please be sure to post notice of future chapters here. Thanks!
JamesSavik Posted May 10, 2009 Posted May 10, 2009 Twilight at Awesomedude Thanks for the warm recpetion! I hope you ahaving as much fun with this story as I am. Here's a teaser for the faithful... Guam, Andersen Air Force Base On his way to his duty station Lt. Morrow was astonished to see no aircraft. After all the noise that he had heard the night before he expected to see half of the Air Force lined up wing-tip to wing-tip on the tarmac but nothing indicated that anything was going on other than business as usual. When he arrived at his duty station at Hanger 31-b, the illusion was completely dispelled. Once he was inside the huge hanger there was row after row of the sleek B-1b bombers with palettes of ordinance neatly stacked beside each one. He stopped by the hanger shop to see what was going on and ran into one of the members of his crew. Morrow asked,
Emulated Posted May 11, 2009 Posted May 11, 2009 +1 Very happy reader here too! I'm really, really enjoying this story. It's brilliantly written and perfectly executed with precision and skill. But what I enjoy most are the technical/strategic qualities. Not only does it add depth to the story, it shows that you know what you're talking about. Good work. I hope you keep the updates coming steadily, I can't wait to see what happens next!
old bob Posted May 12, 2009 Posted May 12, 2009 Twilight at AwesomedudeThanks for the warm reception! I hope you ahaving as much fun with this story as I am. Hi James, It's 2 am here, I couldnt sleep and came to Twilight. Wow it's a "dream" story, a new version of "Robinson Crusoe". Your writing style, dry, short, direct, is amazing and Twilight is a good follow-up story after your post about WWIII . Be kind, dont let us wait too long for the next chapters .
LongGone Posted May 12, 2009 Posted May 12, 2009 Well I must state that I am reading over at Dude's site and I like all the sentences that have vowels. The ones without vowels need work.
JamesSavik Posted May 12, 2009 Posted May 12, 2009 Well I must state that I am reading over at Dude's site and I like all the sentences that have vowels. The ones without vowels need work. Sorry about those vowels. I tried to stretch them but I ran out. :wacko: I promise to have more before next weeks chapter.
Phantom Posted May 14, 2009 Posted May 14, 2009 James! This is an amazing story so far... the descriptive nature of this feels like i'm right there with them... keep up the amazing work and I look foreward to reading more Btw - Meals Wretched to Eat... I couldn't help but laugh... I heard my dad (Army Lt Colonel) call them that a few times...
Benji Posted May 16, 2009 Author Posted May 16, 2009 Twilight Chapter 3 is posted here .............Great chapter!! Sounds like things are progressing just like I thought it would. I'm afraid the kids are going to have to use those weapons after all. I wonder if Tom will take precautions when the guard comes up to visit, like keeping most of the group out of sight. It wouldn't be good if the guard unit knew that Eagle Rock was being guarded by teens only. Should the outbreak reach the guard, some may try to break into the compound and take over. Looking forward to more James!!
Drewbie Posted May 16, 2009 Posted May 16, 2009 Great chapter again James, It seems Tom and Jimmy are the ones that have to protect the compound, other two will need to be taught.
Site Moderator TalonRider Posted May 16, 2009 Site Moderator Posted May 16, 2009 .............Great chapter!! Sounds like things are progressing just like I thought it would. I'm afraid the kids are going to have to use those weapons after all. I wonder if Tom will take precautions when the guard comes up to visit, like keeping most of the group out of sight. It wouldn't be good if the guard unit knew that Eagle Rock was being guarded by teens only. Should the outbreak reach the guard, some may try to break into the compound and take over. Looking forward to more James!! My first thought/comment when I read that the boys were going to have company was, Oh shit. Here comes trouble.
Phantom Posted May 17, 2009 Posted May 17, 2009 Yet another good chapter! Wonder what the national guard is gonna think when they come across four teens who can set up technology that even their specialists are having an issue with... Can't wait for more!
JamesSavik Posted May 23, 2009 Posted May 23, 2009 Chapter 4 of Twilight is posted. There will be some delay posting at Deweywriter. Their webmaster is having technical difficulties.
Benji Posted May 23, 2009 Author Posted May 23, 2009 (edited) Chapter 4 of Twilight is posted. There will be some delay posting at Deweywriter. Their webmaster is having technical difficulties. .............Nice chapter, looking forward to more James!! Edited May 23, 2009 by Benji
old bob Posted May 23, 2009 Posted May 23, 2009 .............Nice chapter, looking forward to more James!! These boys are genious ! But everything is going too well .... As usual, each nice story has its bad side. Tom, the hero, should be prepared to fight the evil... I wonder what will come. I agree with Benji, nice chapter, springtime between two storms. Ready to read more, but take your time
David McLeod Posted May 24, 2009 Posted May 24, 2009 Just finished Chapter 3 (and looking forward to 4). There was a lot of "housekeeping" in Chapter 3...filling in the blanks (and speculation) created in the first two chapters...I say this in a good way. The story continues to incorporate contemporaty themes to ground it and to make suspension of disbelief easy.
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