Nephylim Posted May 4, 2011 Author Posted May 4, 2011 Oooookay... got a big ahead of myself. The Green Eyed Monster appears in the next chapter and not this one This one gives you what some of you have said you needed... the afterglow... and fallout Sorry, did I forget to mention I've posted another chapter
Ara Posted May 4, 2011 Posted May 4, 2011 Ooooh I loved this one, hehe it made me smile and I totally love Hazes family his mum more so than the others but they are all up there Aces mum still has me very much in the meh leaning towards not liking corner but theres time for redemption. I dont like talk of green eyed monsters tho Nephy this makes me sad
Nephylim Posted May 4, 2011 Author Posted May 4, 2011 You know me Things never go smoothly for too long But I wouldn't be sad, not yet.
Agaith Posted May 4, 2011 Posted May 4, 2011 No, no things never go smoothly much with you Nephy Really enjoyed the chapter, I wish we could just make Logan disappear Thanks Nephy
Nephylim Posted May 4, 2011 Author Posted May 4, 2011 Logan has bothered me a little and at some point in the future I might think of a rewrite with some consequences for him. However there are some things that mitigate against it. 1. Ace doesn't want it. There are lots of reasons for this. Firstly he's become reconciled to the fact that this is 'just the way it is'. Seond he doesn't want to rock the boat now that things are looking up, Third, Logan is his brother and despite everything he's done to him he is still his brother. 2. It will complicate the story 3. It might spoil what's coming up.... although, on the other hand it might not hmmmmmm.... I need to think about that one.
Benji Posted May 5, 2011 Posted May 5, 2011 (edited) Logan has bothered me a little and at some point in the future I might think of a rewrite with some consequences for him. However there are some things that mitigate against it. 1. Ace doesn't want it. There are lots of reasons for this. Firstly he's become reconciled to the fact that this is 'just the way it is'. Seond he doesn't want to rock the boat now that things are looking up, Third, Logan is his brother and despite everything he's done to him he is still his brother. 2. It will complicate the story 3. It might spoil what's coming up.... although, on the other hand it might not hmmmmmm.... I need to think about that one. ........... First off great chapter Nephy! 2nd I really think Haze needs to confide to Ace's mother on what he has observed. Keeping silent will only allow this to escalate, Haze has to realize there is a real danger here, and he needs not to explode his fury. Such as what if before Ace came home, his mom happened upon the shoes and the note. She would know right off it wasn't Nick, Haze or Ace leaving only...... Edited May 5, 2011 by Benji
Nephylim Posted May 5, 2011 Author Posted May 5, 2011 But then there wouldn't a rest of the story. Logan is a catalyst for a lot of things that need to happen, so as much as you may want to see him punished it doesnt happen... yet.
Nephylim Posted May 9, 2011 Author Posted May 9, 2011 I'm off on holiday for the week and I don't know if I will have proper internet access. So, just in case I can't post on Wednesday I'm posting today. Hope you enjoy it. 1
Ara Posted May 16, 2011 Posted May 16, 2011 Lol Jealous haze was Jealous although it was understandableish jealousy. Ace was most certainly quite naive with that call. Plus its good to see that its not sweet an happy the bad times make the good ones that much more enjoyable. I totally love this story tho Neph it really is cool and I like where your takin it
Nephylim Posted May 17, 2011 Author Posted May 17, 2011 I am so glad you like the story. There is a lot of playfulness coming up but a darker time ahead... of course
Nephylim Posted May 18, 2011 Author Posted May 18, 2011 New chapter up in which Ace becomes a ninja assassin and Nick has a lot of surprises.
Nephylim Posted May 18, 2011 Author Posted May 18, 2011 Ace is just amazing. Next couple of chapters are pure fun,
Benji Posted May 18, 2011 Posted May 18, 2011 Ace is just amazing. Next couple of chapters are pure fun, ............. I agree, Nick was full of surprises as well as being surprised himself, Ninja Ace, haha I like that! Looks like Ace's mother is going to take a lot of time to 'adjust' her thinking. I love how Nick basically told her off. Haze did good in telling Nick to not get so angry over the whispers and stares, he knew Ace could feel tension. Great chapter Nephy, looking forward to the next 'fun' chapters.
Nephylim Posted May 19, 2011 Author Posted May 19, 2011 thank you. This is the part where i was really trying to make the whole thing light and fun. The party is just goddamn hilarious. At least I think it is. I've been told that one joke is in bad taste and might get me hung drawn and quartered but we'll see soon enough
Ara Posted May 19, 2011 Posted May 19, 2011 Another fun day out for Ace Haze still showing signs of overprotectiveness which he really needs to work on and lose. Ace isnt a China doll and wont break if you hold him funny. Best part though was Nock, He put mum in her place and really stood up for Ace where it mattered. Hes turning into a good ally for Ace to turn to. Keep it goin Nephy
Nephylim Posted May 19, 2011 Author Posted May 19, 2011 Question is...... am I lulling you all into a false sense of security? Now would I do a thing like that
Agaith Posted May 19, 2011 Posted May 19, 2011 Question is...... am I lulling you all into a false sense of security? Now would I do a thing like that If anyone is ineligble to wear a halo it's you Nephy fallen angel or no lol I bet you are, lulling us into a false sense of security is a very Nephylike thing to do hehehe Loving the story Nephy and I just love Ace and Haze to bits
Nephylim Posted May 19, 2011 Author Posted May 19, 2011 Haha... I guess you're right. So you'd better enjoy the fun while you're getting it.
Nephylim Posted May 25, 2011 Author Posted May 25, 2011 Part 1 of The Party is up. I have experienced simiar parties... and similar Uncles as I am sure have at least some of you. This part I think it quite funny in its own way but wait until you read Part 2. I was really trying hard for humour in that one.
Frostina Posted May 25, 2011 Posted May 25, 2011 Part 1 of The Party is up. I have experienced simiar parties... and similar Uncles as I am sure have at least some of you. This part I think it quite funny in its own way but wait until you read Part 2. I was really trying hard for humour in that one. :o The second bit of the second sentence has me chewing nails!
comicfan Posted May 25, 2011 Posted May 25, 2011 Well Ace was too far gone to enjoy anything. Once he is over the shock we still have the rest of the family to meet and interact with. This should be a fun read Nephy.
Nephylim Posted May 25, 2011 Author Posted May 25, 2011 I really hope that it will because I really let my hair down in the writing of it. There is one bit that might get me into awful trouble but, know what, don't care
Ara Posted May 26, 2011 Posted May 26, 2011 I really hope that it will because I really let my hair down in the writing of it. There is one bit that might get me into awful trouble but, know what, don't care Hehe why does that not suprise me The uncle was a tad eccentric but he did have an important message for Haze in that Ace isnt made of china and a few scrapes wont hurt him, Seems Ace got a touch of that lesson as well but who knows. Its all good if you ask me and I am lookin forward to see what you have in store for the party itself Gogo Haze n Ace party like you mean it hehe
Nephylim Posted May 26, 2011 Author Posted May 26, 2011 Gogo Haze n Ace party like you mean it hehe Knowing what comes in the next chapter this really makes me laugh
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