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  1. starboardtack

    Chapter 22

    A good, solid chapter in a great story. Doing good!
  2. I did not plan to read this as the story theme did not interest me. I have passed it up each time a chapter has been added. But out of boredom today I started reading it and find I am enjoying it. The quality of the storytelling and the writing skills are keeping me hooked. I am curious to see where you go with this and how you avoid the many cliches that could be used as short cuts. Keep up the good work. I am in for the long haul.
  3. starboardtack

    Chapter 71

    Thank you! I thought I was the only one lost. A cast of characters and a reminders of their roles would be helpful. I do not want to miss out with n the full richness of this story.
  4. starboardtack

    Chapter 71

    Thank you! I thought I was the only one lost. A cast of characters and a reminders of their roles would be helpful. I do not want to miss out with n the full richness of this story.
  5. starboardtack

    Chapter 19

    Thank the gods I did not read this in the break room at work! I went from tears when Jarren told Nash off to laughing out very loudly thanks to Liam. Great great chapter.
  6. starboardtack

    Chapter 18

    This story is so far from being "total shit" you'd need a passport to visit it! (No idea what that means but go with it!) This is such strong, cleanly written, and honest piece of work. And most importantly, you avoid the sticky sweet cliches that so often show up in these stories -- I literally (and yes, it was literally) gasped when you wrote that Nash lost his foot. You are an extraordinary storyteller and a fine craftsman. If you ever need to be reminded of that, please touch base and I will say it again.
  7. starboardtack

    Chapter 1

    Delightful
  8. More sane? I certainly hope not LOL
  9. Great chapter with delicious twists. A fun read!
  10. starboardtack

    Chapter 2

    Love the grounding provided by the mother’s presence.
  11. starboardtack

    Chapter 12

    I read a lot of fiction and the sex scenes have become so predictable and, if truth be told, a bit boring. Not in this story! The scenes with Jarren and Nash totally break the mold and expectations. They are as erotic and sensual as anything I have ever come across. (Well I guess I should say no pun intended and it wasn’t but why waste a good opportunity lol) I really appreciate what you are achieving.
  12. starboardtack

    Chapter 12

    The only downside to this chapter is the very last word "-END-". Thank you for all the work and TLC that you put into your story. I look forward to reading more from you.
  13. starboardtack

    Chapter 11

    Another superb chapter!
  14. starboardtack

    Chapter 10

    Truth be told, I have become rather jaded on sex scenes in stories — that is, until now! The opening paragraphs of this chapter were fantastic!
  15. starboardtack

    Chapter 10

    Stick with you? Like Crazy Glue. You are a fantastic storyteller and you have my trust as a reader!
  16. starboardtack

    Chapter 10

    This is without reservation one of the best stories I have read on any of the sites I frequent. Having said that, I have reread the last scene trying to make sense of it in the context of the rest of the story. IMO, it just is not supported by what preceded it. There is no suggestion that Gianni has had so much to drink that he would forget himself so dangerously nor, despite his feelings for Angelo, is there any real narrative that would support him dropping his defenses in this way. I look forward to see what you do with this just as I look forward to anything else you may write in the future. I really do appreciate your craftsmanship.
  17. Did not realize how tense I got while reading this -- yes, lancing the boil is a good title. Superb chapter.
  18. starboardtack

    Chapter 6

    This just gets better and better.
  19. starboardtack

    Chapter 4

    This story continues to be a delight.
  20. starboardtack

    Chapter 3

    Letters to Mom and Dad -- a smart device. And your powers of description are excellent. I am enjoying this!
  21. starboardtack

    Chapter 6

    Just started reading this today — so far, a delight. Please keep the story coming.
  22. starboardtack

    Chapter 1

    I really liked the underlying story (especially the "problems" paragraph) but your use of dialect came across as inauthentic. It seemed inconsistent with the vocabulary you attributed to your main character. I would love to reread this without the dialect.
  23. Glad to hear Mark is okay and to restart this saga. Any chance of getting a synopsis or a cast of characters and an update on the important ones so that we can fully appreciate what is happening now?
  24. starboardtack

    Chapter 18

    Good to have you back and to catch up with “old friends.”
  25. Or are you relying on J ames. ro BER t as gever?
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