Timothy M.

In spite of moaning over at the forum I actually think this was a good place to end the chapter. We were feeling down about the Leopards being behind on goals, but Peter's peptalk has raised our hopes back up. I'm confident they will give those dogs a fight till the end. But I'd still like the next chapter early. The Kevin incident was interesting, and I hope Joe can turn it round to Kevin's advantage in relation to the Swans. Quick thinking by Evelyn and Clarissa, I'm impressed. I guess the young generation is quick to use their phones, and good thing too. Violent idiots (whether thugs or police) are not getting away with it anymore. But I'm disappointed the security people let the bigots get away, they should have handed them over to the police for hate crime and for assault. Mary certainly had more eye openers at this game, and hopefully Jessica's points will make Neil's mum reconsider her stance on gay people. I liked the kind but firm way she told Mary that her lack of acceptance paves the way for her boy to be hurt by others. Very clever, Graeme. Is Neil the only runner they have? He seems to be getting all the action or at least the important and complex ones. But I laughed about Steven feeling jealous, nice little revenge and Doug played right along with Liam.

You're right, Gary. Rob is more than just an impulsive jock with a heart of gold. He has a lot of 'social' intelligence, meaning he reads people well and knows how to act to have things going his way. His father has helped him see why and how, but he had the instincts already. However, I think you'll find that so far his real insights are confined to his brother (even though he'd begun to tire of his girlfriend). But this it what Mr. Perry wants to change, he wants Rob to expand his understanding of human dynamics and motives during college. Of the choices as I understand them, I think Rob and Eric's dad prefer the GSA to a Frat Society.

Rob's been thoughtful = considerate during the whole story, so what's the difference? And anyway why do you think Rob is aware of Eric's issues? If he actually is, because this was Nelson's interpretation. But you sort of give the answer in your next comment. I have no idea who Mr. Perry reminds you of, please tell me.

Thanks for the feature, Renee, it's fun to see such a diversity of prompts.

LOL, yeah this has become more about Rob than Nelson and Eric. But luckily Rob will graduate and leave for college soon - although with the pace of this story, I'll have written 100 chapters before we get this far. I don't think Rob could ever resent Eric, it's not in his nature. But being protective is, and his parents approve but would like him to widen his scope. Other motives are there too, and yes, we'll get to know about them. You may come to regret it if Rob joins the GSA, since you'll have to carry me through on a subject I know nothing about. (As you've already found out )

Thanks dugh, I'm partial to Nelson's POV too, and the next chapter will be the same. You hit on an important motive. Rob has become the star of this story, and I think I'll have to do a Rob in college spin-off at some point or be nagged to death by hungry birds - not to mention what JAR might send my way. So having Rob grow as a person and giving him a more complex personality is important, and this slightly serious chapter was me trying to achieve this, but without losing the fun and lightness of the prompt story.

Rob's parents have several motives and they should become clear later. But the one you mention is on the list. Glad you liked the chapter.

Thanks CG, I think you're right. Rob could do the GSA some good, and they would be good for him too, including making him understand some of the challenges Eric and Nelson may face. I like the idea of Rob and Eric teaming up, and in a way they've always done so as Brothers. Or at least Rob has seen them as a team, but Eric needs to see the same. The next chapter is begun, and I hope for some writing time during the weekend.

You're welcome, Victor. I felt bad about not posting for so long, and I'm susceptible to the stick-and-carrot method. LL and Drew provided carrots and you had the stick. As to the GSA insight, all praise goes to my beta (AC), since I have no idea about or experience with this admirable US institution. We'll get some more protective Rob, but hopefully also some fun along the way. And I hope you enjoy the Nelson POV.

“I’m going to give him a piece of my mind! And if that doesn’t work, he can have my fist, again.” All of us stared at Rob, trying to work out whether he was joking or not. Mr. Perry clapped his hand over his eyes and shook his head sadly. Eric’s mom had been the one to ask Rob what he was going to do if Chris or Ryan did anything to Eric and me. Before Mrs. Perry could jump all over him, my mom spoke. “So Rob, have you thought about whether your two teammates meant to insult Eric

I don't know, but he posted a chapter. and said this in the chapter note: And it was a bloody marvelous chapter too ! Answering most of the speculations and with some great Wade, Will and JJ moments. So thanks to all the amusing tinfoil users.

Wade being politely viscious, Will whipping Brad as deserved, and JJ doing a delightful opening gambit of revenge. What more could we ask!

Such wonderful speculations should earn us another early chapter, methinks.

You know we've been waiting forever for the nex chapter. pouts I was so thrilled Gavin and Tate had the all-important talk and that it went well, but now I crave more. There is still lots they need to figure out and hopefully more romantic moments too. Please tell us what happens now.

Nothing beats a Royal Flush and nothing beats Gary the God of Writers when it comes to making his readers smile and cry and squeal with joy. as well as getting all the sappy emoticons in action. A Golden Hand gets a whole new meaning, the golden rings on their hands was another step into the complete heaven of their relationship. They've won each other's hearts, and they've won the battles against the forces opposing them, gaining our respect and admiration, and you have won those too, along with our love and friendship. Of course Michael couldn't wait a moment longer, and of course Kendall thought it was perfect. So do we. PS Kendall's Train of Happiness Next stop

Indeed, the part about how this new discovery was abused was chillingly realistic, and I'm still a bit worried about getting nightmares over this story. And let's not forget there are still plenty of cases where the LGBT are persecuted, including losing their jobs, homes, and lives. To me no state, country, nation or religion may call itself modern or civilised or humane, if they do not do their best to protect their citizens / members from such bigotry and evil. Your story is a great reminder of the dangers of ignorance and intolerance.

Wow, Drew, what a lovely surprise. I'm glad you liked the first chapter, and luckily I can tell you that there will be more descriptions and even better interactions in the next chapters, plus lots about his family and his past. Oh and don't forget to visit the story discussion forum where there are plenty of links to the places they see. I shall now go to bed with a smile on my face due to this review, thanks so much, Drew.

Thanks. No nightmares (yet), only a mild case of natural science OCD.

Getting Zach Hayes to give up the high from football may be as impossible as getting Jeff Hayes to give up drugs was many years ago. Perhaps JP can explain this to Will. At least there a better chance of Zach surviving. Will's decision to hold Zach to his decision to break up may be a gamble, but I don't think Zach should get away with his stupid behavior, even if he was being fed meth. However, I doubt Will can explain this either - but JP and Stef may be able to. So forcing Zach to go to New York was the right thing to do.

Strangely enough I find the consequences a lot more believable than the explanation of the genetic discovery. But that's probably because I know more about natural science than social science. The idea that you can remove recessive genes in existing humans is rather farfetched though, but not that crazy scientists might want to do so. The progression of the increasingly awful consequences was brilliantly done. My first objection on the genetics is one small error: there is a linked pair of genes on each chromosome - I assume you mean 'genes on the relevant chromosome' since there are 23 chromosome pairs, and if each of them were involved, it would be a much more complex situation. My second objection is more complex and took me a while to work out, and I have to admit I'm not sure if I've done it correctly. But here goes: The assumption is that there are two gene pairs, and they can be either dominant (H) or recessive (h). So an individual can be HHHH, ie Heterosexual and only passing on 'straight' genes, or hhhh, ie Homosexual and only passing on 'gay' genes. Of the 14 possible combinations, by your premise, only 5 (36%) will give a het person, 1 (7%) a gay person, and the rest, 8 (57%), will be bi-sexual. In addition, gay kids must have at least one bi parent, since heterosexuals never have more than one recessive gene. If you had chosen to let those with two dominant and two recessive genes also be het and not bi (as would also be logical, since dominant genes usually prevent the recesssive ones from being expressed), then the ration would have been 9 het (64%), 4 bi (29%) and 1 gay (7%). Two het parents could get a gay child. Dad (HHhh) and Mom (hhHH) would have 56% chance of a het child, 38% chance of a bi child, and 6% chance of a gay child (out of 16 possible combinations). To me this seems a much more likely scenario. But my objections have no impact on the main concept of the story, they are simply me being slightly OCD. However, if you ever want to expand this into a novel, getting expert advice from a geneticist might be a good idea. At least, then you won't get this sort of grumbling.

Sounds scary, but worth reading. I'll give it a try. If I get nightmares, I'll blame you.

I've read this story a few times and I always end up growling a bit with frustration over the lack of a sequel. I hope you'll have time to come back to it one day. Tyrell seems quick-witted as his actions at the zoo showed, so I have no doubt he'll do well and be a valuable addition to the shelter.

Well, well, my Swedish friend, that was a brilliant debut. Your shy, cute vampire is the first I've met, as far as I can recall, that was a nice twist. A whole new way of cuddling Welcome to the Scandinavian Writers Club, I'm looking forward to more.

I bet this is the way Nate's empathy is supposed to work. Feeling the emotions and being able to untangle the knots when he is close to people and having it all slide away immediately after, leaving no trace. The regulators in his glamour fucked it up. Please, please let me be right about this. I can still remember Nate throwing a hissy fit over Guy wanting him to go to hospital and for good reason too. It was the moment I knew the wolf was too young, innocent and pushily protective to be any use as a boyfriend. I'm sure some plastic surgery can get rid of the burns. Tentacle sex. awesome... but embarrassing

Ohh, I like this Pyn tentacle mop. Very interesting. And my favorite quote is: No. Abso-fucking-lutely not. I was not ready to get into a big fish tank with a giant squid creature that wanted to cover me with goo and eat my pain. Nope. Not ready. I'd forgotten how much I like Takashi, loved him being all sarcastic about the healers, and banterring with Daffodil-Beard, and bargaining with the Pyn. Sushi, lol. Kitty