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Something that is always noticeable, and didn't seem to affect the story in an adverse way, is the voice that Abel III uses when telling his tale. In these last few chapters though, his matter-of-fact and somewhat dry tone is interfering with my ability to maintain empathy with him. It works when he is describing or analyzing things but when it comes to personal interaction . . . I hope that when he actually becomes truly emotionally invested in someone, Dennis or ?, the tone (voice) of his story telling will evolve along with him.

I for sure enjoyed the story and Joann did a fine review of it.

Welcome to GA zaf89. It's great to have another author on board.

I'm on the page with you. I just finished watching this and what you say is pretty much spot on. One thing that impresses me is that the love between the brothers is believable, although one would think that after all that time the kissing scenes would have come across a bit more polished. Still, the older brother Francisco - Joao Gabriel Vasconellos, and Thomas - Rafael Cordoso, are both beautiful men and lovely to watch in their movements. I do not get the whole bit with the woman either. It was almost like they created the relationship to be purposefully contrary, but for no good legitimate reason -- an attempt to be clever run afoul of itself. The incest aspect was handled remarkably well; it was almost a non-thing, if that can be imagined.

Ultimately this ended up being 'cute', and enjoyable, and I very much enjoyed your use of the word luxurious in the description on behalf of a part of the Colonel's rather hirsute anatomy. Well said.

Oh, I don't know . . . I think there's a lot to forgive on both sides. Sneaking, secret plans, jumping to conclusions and . . . ugly recliners - a lot of forgiving is needed!

Um . . . yeah! Dude, Demoncrest, ha-ha - welcome to GA!

Speculation. Pure speculation. I've never been able to figure out cats. Though I must say, I think you may have got it somewhat right.

Hello Bryce, welcome to GA. Yea, another author joins the site!

Hello Shahmaran, welcome to GA, it's nice to have you with us.

I'm pretty sure this is the first story I read when I purchased the Premium Access. I'm glad to see this up there. I have been considering reading it again, it's that good, along with the two companion books.

Hey, Billy Martin Happy Birthday!

What an enjoyable representation of your trip. Thanks for sharing.

Art has no definition, yet it can be defined. Art is subjective and expressive, beautiful and debase, literal and figurative, and still yet elusive. Conception can be the plan or intention and yet be the act, and communication and expression are not all that different. Art is a word that is expansive, in that it incompasses many forms, and it evolves over time. You cannot define it, truly, because it also changes with time and fashion--what is hot today, may not be hot tomorrow-- and yet again, there is junk-art and fine-art. Come on, enjoy, and be done with it.

And arguing for the sake of argument has been elevated to an art form in this thread, and nothing is gained by it. Yet still, it is pursued, and is amusing.

The shortest chapter yet but it captured a big event well. Some of the crew's thinking is understandable, on the one hand and on the other, pretty misguided considering its a stable crew having been with the ownership for many years. I do understand that the turbulence is basically unheard of in the transits but folks know, at least intellectually, that the ship is sound. Ah well, I guess it's just human nature to worry, even In the future, and even when worrying has no benefit. But this too is captured well in the writing Dave, kudos for that.

A.A.R. welcome to G.A. Glad that you found us. Kitt's right, there are a lot of ways to participate on site.

You know I'm in your cheering section. I'm liking it!

Since I've read all of your prompts . . . Oh well, it's not the destination, it's the journey, they say. Nice intro to the tale, Valkyrie.

I feel you, I really do. What you say has a relevance to more than just writing. We do this sort of thing because the new and shiny always seems to draw attention. The new is less complicated somehow and therefore, easier to deal with. Although it could be, it isn't necessarily so and could be just as hard, or harder, to work on/with as something older. Remember, L&G and Nemesis are old friends and deserving of attention and just as it is when you make new friends, you can't neglect the old ones and expect them to still like you when you find the time for them. Having now been neglected, it's going to take some work to get back those relationships. Believe me, they are worth it and you know it. That's why you're thinking about them, because you know they are still good friends and deserving of your attention. Now you just have to work on rebuilding the relationships and if they begin in starts and fits, that's okay. As long as you continue to work on them, you will come together eventually.

Hello there to you too. Welcome to GA.

The yummy boys comment had me thinking things might go bad. This was inventive and fun, Kitt.

Such good writing Dave. Am I engaged? Hell, yes! Am I intrigued? Absolutely! Go, do your thing, and continue to bring on the 'quality gay fiction.'

Hello Lans. Welcome to a great community of writers and readers. Cheers!

Happy Birthday Slytherin!! and many happy returns