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    Chapter 4

    pvtguy commented on C. Henderson's story chapter in Chapter 4

    You've captured quite well the "logic" of teens but also have created the intrigue to know what was really going on.
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    Chapter 2

    pvtguy commented on C. Henderson's story chapter in Chapter 2

    This chapter reminds me of Jean Paul Sartre's short story "No Exit" in that Noelle is cognizant of her state because she is still in the memory of someone. Well done.
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    I loved the entire chapter and all you accomplished therein. I especially loved the moment with Brett: Ritch's connection with him is confirmed. Thank you, Carlos. Your excellent writing and story telling are much appreciated!
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    Chapter 14

    pvtguy commented on RichEisbrouch's story chapter in Chapter 14

    Ok...Ben is slowly building the scene before he starts parcing it for inconsistencies. I know it's slow, but I find it a more accurate approach than the quick "I gotcha!". Would enjoy more frequent postings....hint!
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    Oh, the mystery of it all! What is this organization of which G, Zeke and Corey are involved? Curiouser and curiouser...
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    Subito Forte

    pvtguy commented on Parker Owens's story chapter in Subito Forte

    Ah! At last - Rick's testicles have descended! And it's due to his finding out from Rita her true nature. Wonderfully well written chapter - and the title is, like every chapter name so far, most appropriate!
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    He wasn’t the only one; I doubt if Nostradamus could have predicted it. A laugh-out-loud line if ever there was one! Robbie's life has been full of challenges - so why not now too? Very intriguing twist!
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    Seamus and Friends

    pvtguy commented on Mrsgnomie's story chapter in Seamus and Friends

    The relaxed atmosphere allows for each of them to just be themselves. It gives Matt a fuller view of Seamus both as an individual but as a person loved much by his friends.
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    Oh Matt! You're showing your youth! Seamus is going to have to be direct once again. Great chapter!
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    Chapter 13

    pvtguy commented on RichEisbrouch's story chapter in Chapter 13

    Setting the stage carefully...I'm waiting for the "Aha-Gotcha!" moment, knowing full well it is a way off. So far, Ben is starting to create the perimeter.
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    Wonderful chapter, Carlos! So full of family, maturing, and, above all, powered by love! A great way to start Friday. May this tradition keep on for a long time!! Tony F
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    Furioso

    pvtguy commented on Parker Owens's story chapter in Furioso

    Regarding Rick, this was both a difficult yet hopeful chapter to read: he keeps playing the "not worthy" script, but seems to be possibly changing it at the end. I do not believe it a coincidence that he met Lawyers...now off to the school board meeting to find out what grand plans will be presented and what becomes of them. Great chapter!
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    I hope Matt can change the script with which he views himself soon and allow Seamus' view of him lift his self-image! They're good together!
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    The "duh" moment. Seamus should have realized Matt needed direct language long before as he did not pick up on the hints. Matt perhaps was too close to the situation to see it for what it was ... they finally stopped "shoulding" on themselves and we now have a whole new situation! Love it!
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    I would agree that there's a leak of information, and I have a feeling we'll be most surprised who the "leak" is.
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    Looks like there's going to be a split with Sue and Don. It's about time. Great chapter for sure! Can't wait for the next one, hint hint!
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    Chapter 12

    pvtguy commented on RichEisbrouch's story chapter in Chapter 12

    The scene is unrolling slowly, but building the foundation on which the case will be built. I was interested in the psychologist's report - very detailed - maybe even too much when she was describing the frequency of sexual activity.
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    Time sure is flying, pun intended. Ritch is coming into his own and the values he has learned from his family shine forth for sure! And, not only living them, he teaches them in both word and deed! I love "the Wing"... great adventures to be had going forward. Thanks, Carlos!
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    I love Matt's naivete. Perhaps the weekend alone together without Aiden will open Matt's eyes (and perhaps another place or two...)
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    Dissonance

    pvtguy commented on Parker Owens's story chapter in Dissonance

    The action cranks up now! I am looking forward to Rick's testicles dropping and his confrontation with his father first, and then his standing up for himself and who he is to all without shame! Great chapter.
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    Turning Twenty-One

    pvtguy commented on Mrsgnomie's story chapter in Turning Twenty-One

    Well done! Matt is finally speaking to Seamus more freely, even though he is totally missing Seamus' unspoken conversation. You are weaving a wonderful story!
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    Trust and Lies

    pvtguy commented on Littlelovestories's story chapter in Trust and Lies

    So much of Zeke is shrouded in mystery. No wonder Tyler is so confused and feels used. Zeke, I'm sure, feels attracted to Tyler, but he has jeopardized his job (whatever organization he's actually working for!) already and is trying to prove that he's still able to function properly.
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    Finding a balance

    pvtguy commented on Mrsgnomie's story chapter in Finding a balance

    I agree that Matt is overwhelmed with all the aspects of his life at the moment - and that keeps him from fully grasping Seamus' interest. Then again, Seamus is taking his time to verbalize his feelings too! Great chapter.
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    Chapter 11

    pvtguy commented on RichEisbrouch's story chapter in Chapter 11

    Prosecution has done her best to paint him as non-compliant and possibly resisting arrest and/or lying. Interesting ... we'll just have to wait until the next installment to see what more is produced.
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    Ritch certainly leads a "rich" life - in experiences, with the people he meets, and the opportunities he has. Great chapter!
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