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Another good chapter! I'm glad to see Connor relax a bit and enjoy the time with Joel. Figuring out kids can be tricky. It looks like Leon will be OK with Joel being around. Thanks.
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It is nice to spend some time with Peter and Eric! Thank you.
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Nice dodge on the dragon part! 😄
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A new mystery, and me thinks a dragon.
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Self-Fulfilling Prophecy
JeffreyL commented on Aceinthehole's story chapter in Self-Fulfilling Prophecy
I'm not certain Artie made the best choice. He has had enough upheaval in his life recently and could use some stability. I think Dizzy is the fun choice, but is he good boyfriend material? I am glad Charlotte is a "neutral" sounding board for Artie. I wonder if Ky will be able to get past his anger and rejoin the group. So many questions make me anxious for the next chapter! Thank you. -
This was the best ending to a most enjoyable story! I grew to really care about Jackson and Carter. From the title I presumed the boys would be together by the end of the story, but you kept me guessing until the end! The dialogue and supporting characters really added to This well written story! Thanks for sharing this.
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This was sadly realistic, but great to read. Even the hard parts. It was interesting to see the comments about Jeff and his attitude toward gays. I think you helped educate a few younger readers who didn't know about commonly held beliefs about gays in the 70s. Although things are not perfect for gays in 2018, there has been a lot of positive change in attitudes in the last 50 years. Thanks for sharing this really good story.
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I want to reiterate what the other reviewers have said. Tim has written an amazing, enchanting tale! Interesting characters, good dialogue, and a clever plot all add up to a must read story. Don't be put off by the touch of fantasy. There is an important message for anyone that cares about our world.
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Wow, Tim! I this I this may be your best story so far! Appealing characters, good dialogue, and a clever plot all add up to a wondefully enchanting tale! I am sorry to see it end, and yet, it is just right on so many levels. I wish I was an artist. I can picture lovely watercolor illustrations to match your words, or maybe woodcuts. Thanks so much for sharing this story. You should feel very proud!
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This has been an excellent story, although hard to read at times. I am sorry for the loss of Simon. I am pleased that Jeff has a chance to get himself back on track, and a second chance to make things better for his family. I look forward to the epilogue and to see how you wrap things up. Thanks.
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I am still loving this story, although I do have a bunch of questions. I am rooting for things to get better for Diego. Thanks.
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This was a pretty light hearted chapter! Lots of fun, friendship, and love, and no drama! I'm glad you are sharing this! Even without an invitation I'll have a front row seat at the wedding of the year! It even trumps Harry and Meghan for me. Oh, can I say trumps?
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If only they could have a calm, civilized conversation about their past and present, then they could fuck like rabbits and live happily ever after! Oh well, for the reader part of the fun is the drama. Thanks for more of this good story.
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Another great chapter! I really like your dialogue! The discussions between the friends and the teasing between Artie and Adam all seem so natural. At this point Dizzy seems like the likely winner of Artie's affection. However, your writing is keeping me guessing. Part of me hopes Ky's mellowness will win out over Dizzy's exuberance, but the craziness would be fun and exciting. I'll guess I'll just be patient and keep reading. Thanks.
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To say this is not like your usual stories (at least the ones I've read) is an understatement. I enjoyed the short story these characters came from. I reread it before I started this and enjoyed it the second time as well. I like Tligg and Craagen, and this new story is amusing. I look forward to seeing how the reunion goes. Thanks.
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It is interesting to see how both Eric and Andy have grown as a result of their interactions. After a rough start, Andy is getting good at reading Eric and knowing how to respond to what Eric is feeling. Thanks for more of this good story!
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And there is where my experience is lacking. I am older, and on my best day I was not part of any club scene. When I asked, my daughter agreed with you. A lot of the potential danger depends on how you use it. Anyway, thanks for helping me to understand. By the way, vanilla is just fine. I think it is my favorite flavor! 😄
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I enjoyed this chapter. It surprises me a bit that there was a lot of reaction to the after club activities, but no one commented on CJ and Owen using ecstasy. I was a little disappointed. I don't use recreational drugs, except a little pot. I don't know much about ecstasy, but I thought is was unsafe. Anyway, a fictional character's choices should not impact readers in a big way. I think it is a testament to your writing that I care so much about these characters. Thank you.
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What an outpouring of caring and love in the comments! Although I don't really know you, I enjoy our online friendship, and the back and forth of thinking about and commenting on writing. I add my caring and concern to that of your other friends and readers. I hope Michael will give you a hug on my behalf.
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Death: A Poet's Perception
JeffreyL commented on Mikiesboy's story chapter in Death: A Poet's Perception
Yours was an interesting look at what can be an unnerving topic. I chuckled at death in pink tulle, and I liked the comment about Brad Pitt. Maybe pi k would make death less fearsome. -
This is an interesting type of poetry. I haven't heard of it. You have created some interesting visuals in this collection of poems. I would be curious to know the rules/directions for writing this type of poem. Thanks.
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I have enjoyed your writing style on this and several of your other stories! This is my second time reading this story, and I am enjoying it as much as I did the first time! Thanks.
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This was an interesting twist to this wonderful story! Good writing! And I hate to sound repetitive, but wonderful characters! Thank you.
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This story is a must read! It is well written, with an intriguing plot and interesting characters. A dominant/submissive relation is one of the main elements of the plot and provides some unexpected twists to the story. A rich older man rescues a young man and trains him to be his butler/companion. As his death the oldest son takes exception to the butler. An unusual clause in the will adds to the animosity between the two main characters. The plot peels away layers to reveal more and more about the butler and the oldest son. I thoroughly enjoyed this story and highly recommend it!
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Oh Tim, don't say short. No "s" words! 😉
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