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This was a pretty powerful monologue! Thank you for writing and sharing.
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You've piqued my curiosity, and generated lots of questions. I'll try to wait patiently for the next chapter. Thanks.
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From chapter two right on to chapter three, and now I am caught up. I am enjoying your characters and the plot, and the hints you give about what's to come. If this story wants to go to novel length, I say let it! Thanks.
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From chapter one right on to chapter two. Good character development, good reading, and lots of possibilities for what comes next. Most enjoyable! Thank you.
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I am a bit behind, but this is a most promising start. Your writing style is easy to read, and your character introductions are very interesting. I look forward to more. Thank you.
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I just binged chapters one through seven. Let's see... a main character who is a smart, clever, young man, but who is not like most of his peers. Several supporting characters who help, or sometimes hinder, our "hero." Sometimes related, often not, and always with a clever name. Several characters expound on their philosophies of contemporary life as the story progresses. Hmmm. Must be a Rigby Taylor story. Hooray! Frankie is a great character in the tradition of many if your other main characters! I am enjoying his adventures, and can't wait to see where he goes from here! Thank you
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I look forward to it. And I am enjoying "MySon." Thanks again.
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This story was well written. The characters are interesting and appealing. As a short story it was great until the ending, which just kind of stopped. As the start if a longer story, it was great. From the comments I'm not certain if there is more or not. If you decide to write more, I will gladly read it. Thanks.
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A Phonecall From Jonathan
JeffreyL commented on SpyroRyder's story chapter in A Phonecall From Jonathan
A most enjoyable short story! Two interesting characters and a lot of possibilities for what happens next. Thanks. -
A Healthy Mind in a Healthy Body
JeffreyL commented on Rigby Taylor's story chapter in A Healthy Mind in a Healthy Body
I really liked Asa, and I thought you created an interesting bunch of supporting characters. I enjoy your writing style, especially when the story is not too dark. This was fun, but ended too soon. Maybe you'll consider revisiting Asa and Mario sometime. Thanks for sharing this story. -
Great chapter! Great characters! Great story! Thank you.
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Wow! A happy ending after all! This story was hard to read in spots, but I quickly grew to care about these characters. That made it necessary to continue reading to find out how they were doing. Thank you for sharing this story. Part of me is sad it had to end.
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What a moving chapter. I should be angry because you made me cry, but the dialogue was so well written and there seems to be a bit of hope for the boys, so I can't be mad. Thank you.
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You have created two very special characters. I am really enjoying reading about how their relationship is growing and changing. Thank you.
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I enjoyed the dialogue and the mix of characters in this chapter. I am glad to see November is loosening up a bit when it comes to Brady. I thought Pix (Pix? a self-chosen name?) was great! I agreed with the comment about someone being confident with who they are, as he seems to be. Thanks.
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This story is a twist on the usual supernatural being stories. Elias is an omega werewolf who is cared for and sheltered from most of life. He is not happy being sheltered. During a ceremony involving "magical" crystals, Elias discovers he may have more than one mate. The story is about Elias finding his mates and being out from under the thumb of his family. The plot is clever. The characters are well developed and likeable. The dialogue is right on, and the sex is hot!! This is a fun read, and I hated to see it end. I recommend this most enjoyable story.
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Jackson is a terrific character! Your dialogue makes it easy to understand his joy and frustration. I am really enjoying this story! Thanks.
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Reading several chapters back to back was a pleasure! I've been gone, but am back and caught up. Just wanted to say again how much I enjoy this story! Even more now that Everett and Kohen have really connected. Thanks.
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I care a great deal for these characters you have created. I am so sad for Amar's death. I hope there can be some sort of happy ending whatever that may look like. Thank you.
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I am really liking your characters and their story! I can't wait to see what happens next. Thanks.
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The Importance of Discipline
JeffreyL commented on Dodger's story chapter in The Importance of Discipline
Based upon a comment on disco music in an earlier chapter, i'm guessing this story takes place in the mid to late 70s. It would explain Jeff's attitude toward homosexuality. Add to that the PTSD and the alcoholism and you can see why he reacts the way he does. If my guess about the time of the story is correct, I wonder what recourse David and Simon may have. I doubt gay teens had places to go for help at this time. This story is pretty upsetting, but I can't quit reading. Thanks. -
Drake has plans to go to a family wedding. When his ex-boyfriend backs out at the last minute, a frIend from work agrees to pretend to be the ex. Headstall has created two great characters and an interesting supporting cast. His writing makes the dialogue and plot most enjoyable. Will Drake and Jimmy survive pretending to be a couple? I recommend you read this story and find out.
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This was a most satisfying epilogue! Thank you. And if some time in the future you decide to revisit Jimmy, Drake, Jack and company, say for a short story about a wedding or an adoption, I'll be right there to read it. Thanks again.
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Chapter 11 Missing Pieces
JeffreyL commented on Headstall's story chapter in Chapter 11 Missing Pieces
Nice ending. Great writing! You got me to like Drake again. Unlike Jimmy, I was ready to toss him to the curb. Good job with the dialogue, too. It sounded real and in keeping with their characters. I look forward to reading the epilogue! Thanks for this most enjoyable story! -
The "8 years later" was a nice conclusion, but like many of your other readers, I look forward to reading more about the Haners and Ryder in the future. Thank you.
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