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    A history lesson

    JeffreyL commented on Mrsgnomie's story chapter in A history lesson

    Well my, my, my... This explains so much. I think/hope this is the breakthrough Loren and Jay both need. I feel like this will give Jay the understanding he needs to help Loren move on. With him! And maybe talking about it will let Loren dump some of the burden he has carried so long. I am curious about what happened to the twin? And also, what is up with Seamus? Looking forward to what's next! Thanks.
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    Maybe a little sappy and emotional, but you have engaging characters and an interesting beginning. I think this story will be fun to read! Write on; waiting for chapter two.
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    Stones and Blood

    JeffreyL commented on Mikiesboy's story chapter in Stones and Blood

    The second poem is a bit dark, but no less true. I'll repeat what others have commented. It makes me think. Number one is almost a shout for joy! If it's possible to shout quietly. I know the peace in silence, and your poem beautifully captures that feeling. Thanks for sharing, Tim. 🧡
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    This is a great chapter! The romance is flowing in both directions. Absence makes the heart grow fonder, and it really affected Loren! I went back and reread the previous chapter. I don't know why I was so down on Loren. He was mostly being himself. This chapter has them both headed in the right direction! Thanks.
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    Stratego

    JeffreyL commented on Mrsgnomie's story chapter in Stratego

    Jay is certainly in love. At this point I am not certain why. Maybe Jay needs to time out until Loren can get his shit together. Or maybe he needs to move on. I don't see Loren meeting him half way. Their relationship doesn't make me think of true love. Keep up the good writing. I am still hanging around to see how you make this all work out.
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    Loren's Portfolio

    JeffreyL commented on Mrsgnomie's story chapter in Loren's Portfolio

    I haven't commented in a while, so I thought I'd just say how much I continue to love these characters and their story! Your writing is so readable! The love dance of sexual desire in this chapter perfectly shows your talent with dialogue! Thanks.
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    You have created a rather convoluted romance! I love the give and take that is going nowhere quickly. Your story continues to be easy to read and a real pleasure! I love these characters, their dialogue, and the pacing. I am having fun watching Jay turn the tables on Loren! And it seems to be working!! Thanks.
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    Getting Physical

    JeffreyL commented on Mrsgnomie's story chapter in Getting Physical

    Having grown up in Everett (about 30 miles north of Seattle) any story located in the greater Seattle metro area has an extra layer of enjoyment for me! I love Loren and Jay! I laughed at Jay's description of himself and his friends/teammates as Great Dane puppy dogs that want to take over your couch and drool all over you. I think Jay figured out how to "play the game" with Loren, and it seems to be working. Your writing is very readable, the dialogue seems real, and your characters are appealing! I am impatient for Loren to let down his guard some more, and for Jay to jump Loren's bones! Looks like you have another successful story going! I can tell I am going to enjoy it! Thanks.
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    Fallout

    JeffreyL commented on northie's story chapter in Fallout

    What a well written chapter! You did a great job portraying everyone's feelings! The conversation between Rob and the guys, between Adam and Andy, and between Andy and Eric were pretty spot on! The party was a step back for Eric, but only a small one. And God bless Brian! He always seems empathetic with Eric, and talks to him like you would a skittish horse or a shy dog. I think that helped Eric get over some of his anger and embarrassment from the party. Thanks. I really enjoyed this chapter!
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    Evening Out

    JeffreyL commented on northie's story chapter in Evening Out

    I feel badly for my favorite curmudgeon. I know he is uncomfortable in social situations, and his friends rather ignored him, but he fell back on his "old" beliefs and helped ruin the party for himself. I hope he will be able to rebound, and I am curious to see what you have planned next. Thanks.
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    Chapter 26

    JeffreyL commented on kbois's story chapter in Chapter 26

    There may be a shifters handbook, but authors seem to enjoy tweaking the "rules" of shifter life. It's one of the things I enjoy most about shifter stories! Besides once again creating likeable characters (mostly) and realistic dialogue, you have put your own little spin on shifter life. Thanks. I really enjoyed this story!
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    I have been rereading some of my favorite stories lately. It has been about two and a half years since I read Jarren's story. I had forgotten parts, but the story was just as wonderful the second time around! I will paraphrase one of my comments from the first read. This story has engaging characters, realistic dialogue, and enough description to enhance the story without taking over! I wanted to say hello and thank you! I'm glad I chose this story to reread.
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    I enjoyed both poems. The revised one seemed more finished and complete to me. As a person getting on in life (I turned 70 in December) I have to say I liked the way you captured those changes and how they feel. Thanks.
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    Choices

    JeffreyL commented on northie's story chapter in Choices

    I don't know if I will be able to think of Eric as my loveable curmudgeon much longer. Andy and Adam have really done a lot to change him for the better. If you add how Rob is interacting with him, we may end up with a Cinderella story of sorts! I liked and agreed with Doha's comment about self-induced old age. There is a certain truth to the idea that "you are only as old as you feel." I must say once again, "I love these characters and their story!" Thanks.
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    Chapter 9

    JeffreyL commented on Sasha Distan's story chapter in Chapter 9

    Hello again Sasha! I saw a series of drawings a while ago on some blog or other. They showed a young boy and a red demon, and I immediately thought of Su Yin and Zhihao. I wish I had saved it. I came across one of the pictures the other day and decided I was supposed to read "Innocent Sacrifice" again. So I did. I had forgotten a few things, but I enjoyed it as much as the first time! This was the story that got me to read or reread the other BCoH stories. Anyway thanks for another pleasant trip down memory lane! Jeff
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    Here it is five years later, and I just reread this story today. I loved it just as much as I did the first time! I think Clem and Ashlee are probably my favorite of the many wonderful characters you've created! Thanks.
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    Romance Languages

    JeffreyL commented on QuinnDK's story chapter in Romance Languages

    Hello Quinn. I was thinking about this story the other day, and I decided to look it up and reread it. I could have copied and pasted my last comment (see above) and it would work. Great characters and dialogue, a very readable writing style, and a wonderful beginning romance all make this a good story! I hope this finds you well, and I fervently hope you will pick up this story and finish it one day. I'll check back from time to time. Jeff
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    Hello again Tim. It is a bit past my bedtime, but I couldn't stop until I got to the end. This is my second reading, and I enjoyed as much as I did the first time! Once again your characters and dialog made the story so real! These are people I would like to know. I think I may need to read "Changes" tomorrow. Thanks for sharing this wonderful story!
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    The Party

    JeffreyL commented on Mikiesboy's story chapter in The Party

    Hey Tim! I was looking for a story on GA and came across your story list. I remembered this tale number two of Don and Louis, but I couldn't remember details. So I decided to read it again. Chapter one opened a window in my head, and I thought about how much I had enjoyed these characters! I'm looking forward to reading the rest of this story! Thanks.
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    Family Portraits

    JeffreyL commented on northie's story chapter in Family Portraits

    I am guardedly optimistic that Felicity has taken her first step toward independence. Maybe she can confide in Andy and Adam and get their assistance. Oliver has gone way past any chance at redemption. Maybe CincyKris and drsawzall have the right idea. There are lots of chances for an untimely accident in an English home. Just saying... Thanks.
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    CDMX • XIII

    JeffreyL commented on Carlos Hazday's story chapter in CDMX • XIII

    This latest segment of CJ's life is as entertaining as the rest! Your hallmark interesting characters and great dialog make each chapter a pleasure to read! Thanks.
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    CDMX • VII

    JeffreyL commented on Carlos Hazday's story chapter in CDMX • VII

    Another good chapter! A big dose of your amazing dialog with a little history lesson thrown in. I especially enjoy the camaraderie when CJ and Owen get together with their friends! I think that's one of the reasons they are such appealing characters! Thanks.
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    Nice idea, taking the lords a leaping to a charity horse event! I have two cousins who are horse women and often ride in horse shows. That brought it a little closer to home for me! Thanks.
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    This short was a lot of fun! You created a great visual! It made me think of "Hey, Big Spender" from Sweet Charity, for no specific reason. In spite of the many people who have sung/interpreted this Christmas classic, you came up with a very clever, original take on the lyrics! The bonus was the lyrics shared by drsawzall! I had never heard them, and they made me laugh some more! Thanks.
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    What a wonderful story! It had so many elements I enjoy: magic creatures, timid lovers, swans, snow. I was not expecting the plot to go in a fairy tale direction, but I loved it and the surprise reveal! Thanks and Merry Christmas!
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