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  1. JeffreyL

    Developments

    More crazy fun! I enjoyed your comments at the end about loving sex between partners. I was saddened by Violet's death because I had a friend who died in a similar manner. Seems like an awful way to go, even for Violet. Can't wait to see Who finds her letter and what it stirs up. Thanks.
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    Sebastian.

    When Sebastian was mentioned earlier in the story as being Grandma's friend and neighbor, I wondered if it was Sebastian from "Sebastian Sanspere ." I dismissed that idea and enjoyed the story. What a dolt am I?!😣 It is our Sebastian! 😍 Thanks for explaining to your slow readers how that happened.
  3. Thanks! That tidbit went right over my head. And the rest was fun!
  4. JeffreyL

    Renegades

    Your last paragraph says it all. We all need a friend, or friends, who likes us for us and family who loves and supports us. Lucky Oliver to realize he has that. Thanks.
  5. JeffreyL

    Chapter 23

    You got me on why Brad was driving. I never saw that coming. More good story. Thanks.
  6. OK this was fun to read about Victor and Shael a bit, but let's not get distracted from our mates for too long. They are the reason I am reading this story. I miss their playfulness, support of each other, and the very erotic part of their relation.
  7. Thanks for our first good look at Grandma and Sebastian. In an earlier comment I wondered what they would add to the mix. After meeting them I think it will be a lot! I don't think Violet and Irma realize what they are up against. Thanks.
  8. JeffreyL

    The Barn

    Time to check in. Even though it is nothing new. I continue to read and enjoy this story, and I love these characters a bunch! Thank you.
  9. Violet and Irma may have avoided the police so far, but it was just dumb luck. I can't wait to see what happens when they catch up with Jarek, Zeno, and Stephen. The guys are much more clever than the girls would ever give them credit for. And we really haven't met Grandma and Sebastian yet. Who knows what they might add to the mix. I love your characters and continue to chuckle at their crazy adventures! Thanks.
  10. JeffreyL

    Chapter 5

    Maybe now Samir has a chance to get away. It seems like an uncertain future, but it is possible the "take a chance" unknown will be better. Thanks.
  11. JeffreyL

    My Name is Nick

    I am a bit like Nick. It seems too good to be true. However you have this ability to create characters your audience quickly comes to care about. They tend to support each other and reach out to help other people. Nick and Noah are cut from the same cloth. I imagine this story will be no different. I will be following this story and look forward to the next chapter. Thanks.
  12. JeffreyL

    A Proposal

    Thanks for the information. I don't know the percentages here in the states, but I am sure you would find similar statistics about our minorities. A sad fact of life.
  13. It is good to see Oliver grow as a person. As a thirteen year old (almost fourteen 😜) he still has lots of changes coming. I think this new sense of self-worth will really help him. Thanks for more of this really good story.
  14. Aaaaaaaaaarrgh!!! There, I got that off my chest. So many other comments reflect my feelings. Drake is becominy less and less of a sympathetic character. Jimmy must really love him to put up with the way he is being treated. In fact, I find it a little hard to believe Jimmy hasn't given up. I think I would have by now. Looking forward to the confrontation with Richard. Thanks.
  15. JeffreyL

    A Proposal

    It surprises me a bit that racism is a problem in Australia. It seems a bit stupid for me to admit that. I am reasonably intelligent, and I know racism is a reality. But it kind of caught me off guard when it showed up in this story. Your story continues to entertain me and also provides food for thought. Thank you.
  16. JeffreyL

    Chapter 22

    I am still unhappy with the judge appearing to play favorites. I know judges are human too, but it just doesn't seem right. Maybe that is only because as the reader I am privileged to information the other characters don't have. Anyway, great chapter! It was nice to see Cowboy get a bit of his own back.
  17. JeffreyL

    Chapter 7

    I am more than a little surprised at Dad and Mom. You misled me 😊 into thinking their reaction to Kevin being gay would be reversed. Very clever!
  18. Another successful week in camp. Although it might have been enjoyable to get to know the week two boys individually, you did a good job letting us have a feel for what the week was like. And I think your comment about the week one boys being special when others are forgotten is spot on. The first week was new for everyone and had a unique mix of boys. Wish I could shed a tear about Annie, but no such luck. Tha is for more good story.
  19. JeffreyL

    Chapter 1

    With a name like VampireMystic are you certain? 😉 And thanks for the offer to answer questions. I'll read more and see how I do.
  20. JeffreyL

    Chapter 1

    I confess to feeling simple and slow. There seems to be a lot of information about your characters I am not quite grasping. I will try chapter two to see if things clear up a bit for me. Thank you.
  21. Sadly, the loss of species is happening everywhere. I sometimes wonder if the planet will render us extinct so it can heal itself. Or if we will be the cause of our own extinction.
  22. I am envious of the boy's wilderness experience. I hope we will get to experience the next group of boys in camp, at least a little, and how the first group settle in when they get back to school. It is interesting to read the extreme bias against women. The female characters you have created absolutely fit the mold you have described. In my experience the women like your characters are fewer in number. I do like the idea of solidarity and camraderie among males, but it seems to me women have an easier time of it. Maybe they are more programmed that way. I also like the message of deciding for yourself what is what. Too often other people way to control what we think or feel. Your story has been entertaining and thought provoking. I look forward to reading more. An odd thought: it seems to me Australia has more than its fair share of "icky," poisonous things. I have wondered why, or if that's just my perception.
  23. JeffreyL

    Chapter 21

    What a great "human interest side story!" It isn't necessary to move the trial part of the story forward, but Cowboy and Britt are both great characters! Thanks.
  24. I am liking Jamie more and more! Thanks.
  25. JeffreyL

    Chapter 2

    Incest is generally a turn off for me. This story is one of the exceptions. Your characters are well developed and their conversations are realistic to me. The premise of the "lost" uncle is an interesting idea. I can't wait to see how their families react. Thanks.
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