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Chapter 40 Into the New Year
CincyKris commented on Parker Owens's story chapter in Chapter 40 Into the New Year
I noticed you didn't answer the reader's comments regarding Zander coming out to his closest friends. We have only been told he has come out to his parents. I'm assuming he is not out to his casual friends, resulting in the bingo going after him. I'm not loving his behavior right now. It's just as easy to get up from the couch as it was to remain sitting with her in his lap. -
I went home early from work with a pinched nerve and watched the weather channel. I'm so glad you are safe! Good luck in the morning.
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Chapter 37 Awake to Warmth
CincyKris commented on Parker Owens's story chapter in Chapter 37 Awake to Warmth
I'm hoping that Andy has a dreamless sleep in the first real bed he's slept in since fleeing. -
I'm a little disappointed in Andy's friends, though it seems realistic of teenagers to act this way. I'm guessing that Andy got locked out of the school and caught up in the storm. Maybe this is the beginning of him getting the outside help he needs.
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This poor kid can't go out without horrible things happening to him! I'm hoping his new friends don't abandon him out of awkwardness.
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Chapter 34: Keeping Up
CincyKris commented on Parker Owens's story chapter in Chapter 34: Keeping Up
I'm seriously concerned about the next chapter title, after so many positive chapters -- "Disaster"! -
I'm glad he skipped the party! He does much better with one on one or small groups. I hope he makes good friends with Kaz, he needs some more allies!
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I'm leery of this party, just like I was with the 4th party. I don't think I like Alyssa and her "beverages" ! It's been so long since I graduated university, I forgot about mailing report cards. A lawyer might come in handy.
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It was not mentioned that their race is now extinct, that would be an awkward conversation! If they can escape the time loop, they will be the last of their kind in the universe.
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Zander!!! The title makes perfect sense now!
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This was a very upbeat chapter, hopeful for the future! Not to be a downer, but you took some criticism in earlier chapters for being unrealistically cruel to our sad hero. There was a story on the news this morning regarding a five year old homicide investigation of an 8 year old boy. At the time the father and step mom were investigated, but nothing was proven and family moved to another state. The other children are now adults and went to the police. The parents starved the child for 5 weeks prior to his death. They are now under arrest waiting extradition back to Ohio. This kind of abuse does occur and is often undetected.
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Great chapter! Now our rebels have to figure out the best way to stay free and uncover the treachery of the Kardoval. Ases and his mech are going to be the key, how will they use them? Will Bouncer get to eat anymore soldiers?
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Chapter 27: Hard to Believe
CincyKris commented on Parker Owens's story chapter in Chapter 27: Hard to Believe
We finally meet the lifeguard, sort of. Andy is certainly more self-assured than Stefan was, I think he would be surprised by himself, if he could look at his life objectively. -
Will Andy meet his lifeguard at Blackburn High? Where will be find his new temporary home? Will Eustace and Marjorie ever meet? I could see them finding an easy companionship, if Marjorie isn't too bossy for Eustace. She can't be any more bossy than Ambrose! Hmmm, I'm guessing that business card for the lawyer will come up again. I am not a read ahead kind of person, but I peeked at the chapter titles. I'm not going to give out any spoilers, but I think Blackburn might be a turning point.
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I'm sad that Eric had to leave his home, the farm, and Eustace. But, he hasn't met his lifeguard yet, so I knew he would be leaving at some point. I still hold out hope that Ambrose will be the key to clearing Eric. I'm so glad you started the story with the 2nd narrator, so we know it turns out ok in the end.
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Eric eventually needs to get adult help to get out of hiding, even though he is not ready for that. I don't think he is actually "wanted for murder". That idea came from the local yokel cop and the lousy principal. They may have questioned him, but I don't think he would have been arrested. The real problem is Uncle Ray, he likely would have been given temporary custody, unless he was in prison for sexual abuse of a minor. Maybe Ambrose can help him.
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I'm not sure why, but I'm more nervous about Eric going to this gathering than I am about Ambrose being a cop. What if the real Andersons are there!
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I think this will be the start of Eric rebuilding himself. He finally can focus on more than just surviving, hopefully, with Eustace's help he can start thriving.
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Chapter 34: Hazardous Hope
CincyKris commented on astone2292's story chapter in Chapter 34: Hazardous Hope
Hey now, I'll slap that smile right off your face! -
I'm so happy Eric finally got some good luck. Great writing, I could smell the bacon and taste the sugarsnaps!
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Chapter 34: Hazardous Hope
CincyKris commented on astone2292's story chapter in Chapter 34: Hazardous Hope
The last time I was sure the author wouldn't kill off one of the mains, @kboismurdered Kage, but you're not that cruel, are you???? -
That was some super awesome magic splerm!
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Eric's conversation with the cow shows he is trying to make connections with others, even though he is telling himself not to trust anyone. He hasn't had a positive connection with anyone since his mother, 8 years ago! His instincts are good, I hope he finds at least one person who earns his trust, and doesn't abuse it.
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My 2nd chapter first instincts: Kavan is our hero, caring, helpful, smart. Konstantin is old, strong, rebellious, principled, well-liked. Mother is an evil bitch. She is the enemy. She holds a grudge. Simone is a power hungry sycophant, she is cruel, dangerous, sadistic. Doc is secretly on team Konstantin, but is unable to show it. I'm loving this! Great tension and drama!
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Unlike some of the other readers, I didn't get a bad feeling about Ozzie. I wouldn't trust anything that Colin says. The reading to the little girl was nice. Eric could use a lot more nice.
