Timmy's Journal - 11. Autumn in the City Out

Both lovely Tim. Well expressed with or without the colors

I especially loved Out. In so few words, I could feel the love and concern for your friend. It was very heartfelt.

On 11/07/2015 08:39 AM, skinnydragon said:

Both lovely Tim. Well expressed with or without the colors

 

I especially loved Out. In so few words, I could feel the love and concern for your friend. It was very heartfelt.

Hi SD.. thank you so much for reading. I wish he'd come out. He's a lovely man, but alone, even though he's with family. I hope he'll decide his life is worth living on his terms.

thanks again my friend,

tim

I was just marveling in the fact that temp wise it doesn't feel like Nov. But it is grey and drizzling..
If your friend never finds the strength to come out, at least he knows he has you in his corner!
As always, Tim very articulate...

Tim:
I felt the breeze in Autumn; saw the clouds race across the sky. You painted that perfectly. But Out - oh, man, you outdid yourself. You made me want to reach out and let you take my hand. The invitation and care and concern in your words conveyed compassion and love for your friend.
Beautiful, beautiful. Want to hear that one at your retrospective.
Thank you.

A lot of poetry is about painting pictures, and capturing moments in time, preserving them through words... you do this beautifully with Autumn in the City. There is a visual strength foremost, but there is also the feeling of huddling against what is imminent... I loved it. Other poetry involves the heart... in oh so many ways... our hurts, our love, our feelings, our regrets, and our concern for what we see around us. This is what 'Out' is for me... it is someone's heart reaching out to another, in concern for them, letting them know you'll be there... even if it comes to naught, the message is what is important... and it's a beautiful message. Needless to say, I loved it as well. It is thought provoking, and wonderfully expressed... definitely a 'tim' poem... well done, my friend... cheers... Gary...

On 11/07/2015 09:15 AM, Defiance19 said:

I was just marveling in the fact that temp wise it doesn't feel like Nov. But it is grey and drizzling..

If your friend never finds the strength to come out, at least he knows he has you in his corner!

As always, Tim very articulate...

Def!! Hi and thank you. I know the temp has been super for November. I hope my friend decides to come out too. He's a sweetheart and I just want him to be happy. I'm there, no matter what.

Thanks for reading and for your comments.

tim

I loved the final line in Out, knowing that support is there can help enormously

On 11/07/2015 09:35 AM, Parker Owens said:

Tim:

I felt the breeze in Autumn; saw the clouds race across the sky. You painted that perfectly. But Out - oh, man, you outdid yourself. You made me want to reach out and let you take my hand. The invitation and care and concern in your words conveyed compassion and love for your friend.

Beautiful, beautiful. Want to hear that one at your retrospective.

Thank you.

Parker thanks. I find it interesting what people prefer. Autumn was written with purpose and out with zero thought again it was simply born that way.

Thanks for your support.

tim

On 11/07/2015 09:49 AM, Headstall said:

A lot of poetry is about painting pictures, and capturing moments in time, preserving them through words... you do this beautifully with Autumn in the City. There is a visual strength foremost, but there is also the feeling of huddling against what is imminent... I loved it. Other poetry involves the heart... in oh so many ways... our hurts, our love, our feelings, our regrets, and our concern for what we see around us. This is what 'Out' is for me... it is someone's heart reaching out to another, in concern for them, letting them know you'll be there... even if it comes to naught, the message is what is important... and it's a beautiful message. Needless to say, I loved it as well. It is thought provoking, and wonderfully expressed... definitely a 'tim' poem... well done, my friend... cheers... Gary...

Gary, thanks so much. Your comments are great. I love to read people's interpretation of poems, it makes the words so much more than they are. Thanks for reading these.

tim

On 11/07/2015 09:50 AM, Reader1810 said:

Hey Tim

 

First, let me say, I liked the addition of colour. It reminds of the changes going on outside. As for the rest, the seasonal changes are very well described.

 

The second poem is really disheartening. That someone has those fears in our society today...well it's just not right.

 

As always, your ability to create poetry from your thoughts is appreciated very much.

Ty Reader. Glad you liked the colour! Bit of fun never hurt!

You just need to see the forums on GA, so many people not out, for so many reasons. It is sad, and unfair, and wrong. I see them behind closed doors, clawing at them, wanting to just be.

It makes me sad. Thanks for reading and your thoughts.

tim

On 11/07/2015 09:51 PM, Bucket1 said:

I loved the final line in Out, knowing that support is there can help enormously

Thanks Bucket1! No matter what, and no matter the reason we should be there to catch each other. He ain't heavy ... he's my brother.

Thanks for reading and your thoughts, B.

tim