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    Aditus
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Aditus' prompts and circumstances - 14. Poetry Prompt 5 – Rhymes and Couplets

The prompt: write your own set of five Couplets using the music provided here. You have a choice of being serious or silly, it's up to you. If serious, write about how you hope to meet your goals and ambitions for the coming new year. If you are feeling silly and irrelevant, write about how lame this challenge is, or anything else you like.

Done

 

He was a boy about two,

and he thought it was true

what his mother him told,

in this tale of old:

if they were around,

No nightmares him found.

And then he was ten,

and there were those men,

Around him was none,

and that was when his dreams were entirely done.

 

 

 

 

The numbers game

 

One small step for a man,

So move it baby, while you can.

Two peas in a pot,

One for you, one to rot.

Three strikes and you are out,

So watch it boy, don’t be too loud.

Four corners of the Earth,

So keep on walking for what it’s worth.

The last, not least is ‘Give me five’

and maybe a smile - if you’re still alive.

This time of the year I'm always in a weird mood. I tried to make it up with the second one.
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AC Benus

I've re-read both of them several times, and I have to say the rhymes never seem forced, so you have selected them in a good and convincing way. That's pretty impressive ;)

 

I like both of them! Thanks for taking the challenge.

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Irritable1

Interesting! the first one is really neatly arranged till you get to the last line and then just kick the whole structure apart. :) Is that to emphasize the descent into reality? I really like the second, too, it sounds like a nursery rhyme but not knowing the context I can't tell if it's derived from something traditional?

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On 01/05/2015 05:58 PM, Irritable1 said:
Interesting! the first one is really neatly arranged till you get to the last line and then just kick the whole structure apart. :) Is that to emphasize the descent into reality? I really like the second, too, it sounds like a nursery rhyme but not knowing the context I can't tell if it's derived from something traditional?
You're spot on, the descent to reality kicked his world apart too.

Well the prayer was a nursery rhyme for me. My great, great aunt let me say it every night. Which also refers to the first poem btw. So I searched the internet for sayings English speaking people know, some I did had already like 'two peas in a pot' and voilà!

Thank you for your comment, Irri. I'm glad you like them.

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