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    Aditus
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Aditus' prompts and circumstances - 28. Poetry Prompt 17 – Childhood Verse: The Pool/Wild Dreams

The prompt: write two Childhood Verses, one from a kid's point of view, and one from the perspective of an adult. For the first, recall a particular way that you used to like to play, and tell the reader about it. For the grown-up poem, remember those times when you were a child and did not want to go to bed; write the poem from the POV of the adult trying to make you fall asleep.

The Pool

The water surface glitters in the sun,

beckons us over to come and have fun.

Little leaf boats only need a push

Clothes fly behind the elder bush.

 

Naked in a mad dash

Jumping in a big splash

Frozen we shiver

And blue lips quiver

 

Then strong arms grab us

Mom’s making a fuss

And the bathtub becomes soon

A spaceship to the moon.

 

 

 

Wild Dreams

I know you well

Many stories to tell

And so much yet to see

 

No time to sleep.

 

What will happen at night

when I’ve dimmed the light?

What will the adults do?

 

No time to sleep.

 

But in the end

I take your hand

And tell you that dreams

 

only come when you sleep.

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Puppilull

Oh, Adi, these were lovely! I could really relate to the second. So much going on to have time for sleep... Just spot in!

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Aditus
On 01/05/2016 03:48 AM, Puppilull said:

Oh, Adi, these were lovely! I could really relate to the second. So much going on to have time for sleep... Just spot in!

I love sleeping because of the dreams. And I often think of stories I could write and, if I'm really lucky, they become dreams. But when I was a kid I really, really hated having to go to bed. lol Thank you for the review! :)

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Headstall

Both were wonderful, Adi... I couldn't pick a favorite... each provoked a memory and feeling in me... seeing things as a child is wondrous... cheers... Gary...

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Aditus
On 01/05/2016 04:26 AM, Headstall said:

Both were wonderful, Adi... I couldn't pick a favorite... each provoked a memory and feeling in me... seeing things as a child is wondrous... cheers... Gary...

Thank you, Gary! I hope they were good memories. :) I still remember how cold it was...in early November. :D

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AC Benus

A pair of lovely poems, Adi! With the first, the contrast of bathtub and outdoor swimming hole made me wonder. Perhaps memories of the elder bush and the warm summer are being conjured in a colder environment like the bathroom...? It works marvelously well, imo.

 

The second one is just as good; we as kids want to play until we drop, but moms have other ideas. I think we can all relate

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Mikiesboy

Hi Aditus!
Like both of these very much.
The swimming hole and the mom then putting the kids in the tub was so vivid.. I'm sure I have bruises on my arm where she held onto me.
As a kid I didn't like to sleep, but now.. oh it brings rest and peace.

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Defiance19

I loved both of these Adi, but the first one I really related to. I can hear my cousins and myself laughing and screaming like wild beasts, then protesting later to all the mothers spoiling our fun..
The second rings so true also, who wants to go to sleep when there could be so much else going on..

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