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Aditus' prompts and circumstances - 16. Poetry Prompt 8 - Quatrains: Spring Words/Strong Words

Write two Quatrains. One inspired by the sights of spring around you right now (or autumn, if you are below the Equator). And a second one telling us how you feel inside about it. It can be happy or sad, or indifferent – it's all up to you! Keep the Quatrains to four lines, rhyming a-b-a-b, and 10 syllables per line.

Spring words

Tulip, daffodil, daisy, and snowdrop,

All flowers are words when nature speaks spring.

Thrushes and blackbirds nest in the treetop,

The morning starts early, now that they sing.

 

Strong words

With you I can hear the colors tumult,

and you help me to see the blackbird’s song.

With you this will never be difficult,

you just take my hand and I'm staying strong.

No. 7 and 8 of my NaPoWriMo adventure.
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Adi, I'm really pleased with this as an answer to the Poetry Prompt 8 challenge. You approached it in a way I hadn't anticipated, but it works great. I would say your first Quatrain is more lyric (song-like, for sure) than storytelling, but then the second one achieves the contrast I was looking for by being very narrative. Well done! You've created the 'turning point' moment I was hoping to see in the replies. I'm happy

 

I hope you can practice more in this two quatrain set-up.

On 04/09/2015 05:47 AM, AC Benus said:
Adi, I'm really pleased with this as an answer to the Poetry Prompt 8 challenge. You approached it in a way I hadn't anticipated, but it works great. I would say your first Quatrain is more lyric (song-like, for sure) than storytelling, but then the second one achieves the contrast I was looking for by being very narrative. Well done! You've created the 'turning point' moment I was hoping to see in the replies. I'm happy

 

I hope you can practice more in this two quatrain set-up.

Ah, yes you pointed out one of my weak spots: I can't help but try to get a melody into my poems. It's something I have to work at. I'm glad you liked it anyway and I'm definitely to finished with the two Quatrain set-up. Thank you, AC: :)
On 04/09/2015 11:26 AM, Lisa said:
Love 'em both, Addy! :)

 

In the first poem, I like the birds singing early in the morning because now it's spring and they can sing! lol

 

The second poem was just beautiful: one person knowing he will always be strong as long as his partner is by his side. :)

Lisa! Ha! Yes birds can be noise, bad, bad noise. LOL. The second was for Mike. I'm happy you liked them. :)
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