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If only it wasn't fiction.... The ending is superb.
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This is a finely written story. I have a bias, because the first part makes me recall similar experiences from my childhood at my grandparent's farm. Chickens, horses, cows, the garden, ...No local boy however! Damn! Thanks for the lovely prose, like Grandma's 'papery kiss'. It was a different world, -and here we are. Thanks for the trip back though. It was nice.
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That was a busy chapter, and it's all good. Then the ending, and the blonde stranger is known. Why was he being so furtive earlier? We have some mysteries to solve, don't we? I'm enjoying this story a lot.
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I've read this story before elsewhere, but enjoyed it again here. Actually, the timing now was more appropriate, given all the recent fuss over the end of the world & all last month. North Korea just reminded everybody again that they're still a live and real sociopathically insane country. This tale grips you right away and doesn't let go 'till the end. There's also an amazing amount of detail about military and weapons, -I can't guess how much time was spent researching it all. The result is impressive, expertly written, and totally enjoyable. Thank you!
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An engaging story, with a gentle nod to Riding Lessons. I'm curious to know where it goes from here, but have no doubt that it'll be entertaining. It's nice to meet Mattie's brother, but sad to see him left all alone.
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They finally did it! About time too. And a brilliant bedroom scene, -so hot.
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I love the hyper negativity of Siggi's character. He's such a curmudgeon,-absurdly so, that he makes me laugh. I can see why his chapters are more fun to write. Anyway, it was a nice surprise to see a new chapter, and especially as written from Siggi's viewpoint. I just want to get a stick and poke at him to see him react, kind of like messing with an anthill.
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This was a fine ending to a great story, with plenty to interest me from the outset. The whole thing could have taken a different turn and ended up full of angst and disappointment, broken hearts and suffering, but it was a very positive story. Thanks, I enjoyed it.
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Nice, really nice! I know the story's not over, but it does seem that a lot of Dale's burdens have been lifted. What a surprise, and it's all done in a seamless way that I didn't see coming. I like nice surprises.
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Dale has a plan. He hasn't been writing his own script lately, so this has definitely got my curiosity going.
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Things are really beginning to snowball for Dale. The comment about lying says it all. I worry about whether or not he's capable of lying to the whole world. As the pressure to bolster the lie about his relationship with Cole grows, will he be able to keep his own self-respect? Coach Miller's comment about his father's shortcomings and character have to enter into the equasion. It's going to be difficult for a person like Dale.
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It's nice to see that Dale and Cole are becoming real friends, if not real boyfriends, or maybe Cole is actually having feelings he hasn't planned on? I suspect Dale will find himself on the football team eventually. And then there's Jeremy...hmmm. I'm not sure about him.
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Hmm, foul play. The more we find out, the less we know. I like this story. The description of the hotel bathroom is priceless.
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Chapter 6 - Fear and Humiliation
Stephen commented on Enpassant's story chapter in Chapter 6 - Fear and Humiliation
it was her! What a nasty betrayal.There isn't anything worse than getting stabbed in the back by a friend. I feel so bad for Mark. At least it wasn't his brother Eric, as I'd thought, so maybe there's hope for him. What a fiasco. -
Trevor's plan worked, and I can say that I'm just a little sorry about Julie, -but only a little. HA! I'm sure Bridget'll love the kangaroos. Love them madly, keyword being mad. Mad enough to make mistakes, because she'll really need to get that tape before Panama, seeing that it's lousy with the cartel's vermin who'd love to get ahold of it first when they find out about it, which they likely will. At least I hope they will.
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So the boys have a plan...I hope it works. I have also been wondering about Julie in Tahiti. They are on the right side of the Earth to pay a little visit. I'd like to think she's not involved with Bridget anymore, but we know that escaping that woman is not easy, and usually means death.
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I never knew jodpers were named after a place. The pictures of the city show a unique and beautiful place. I'm curious to see how Sean goes abot rebuilding the wreckage of the relationship he destroyed. It sounds like there's a mystery out there as well. This is a good beginning chapter.
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This is an interesting situation, one that I haven't seen before, and written so well. I'll have to keep up with it to satisfy my curiosity, but more than that, it sounds like fun.
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Chapter 5 - Pent Up Feelings and Sudden Outbursts
Stephen commented on Enpassant's story chapter in Chapter 5 - Pent Up Feelings and Sudden Outbursts
Oh. The word's out. Probably Mark's nasty little brother opened his big mouth. At least he had a good weekend to bolster his confidence by spending time with a normal family. That's probably helped him more than anything by showing how disfuntional his own people are, and he can start to see that he isn't the one with the real problem: it's them. That knowledge may not help him at school too much though. Poor kid! -
Intriguing story, tense and tight. I like the plot and the style. I have to say that I hate the modern corporate world also, so I'm all for the harlequins. I'm sad about Jon though, losing his mother and his life with her. She seemed like a good person, just trying to make it. I'll keep an eye open to see what comes next.
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Chapter 4 - Confessing the Secrets You've Nurtured
Stephen commented on Enpassant's story chapter in Chapter 4 - Confessing the Secrets You've Nurtured
Whew! What a relief it is for Mark to be able to open up to his friends. Now I'm worried about him falling for Adam, -who may not feel the same way. It would seem to be too easy if he did. It's all so much so fast, so I worry about any new setback in Mark's life at the moment. I loved the little diary scene. Did I say I liked this guy or what?
