Feel free
to edit me,
to change my tense verbs,
rearrange my prepositions
and nouns;
but let
us now connect by conjunction
superlatively joined,
a bond none can
delete.
Three incredibly powerful lines in this:
you know to whom you belong...
...your strength a source of pride...
...your place is here, always.
I can see and feel the power of the connection between you and your beloved.
You loved, and were loved. And I think you are right; we cannot help but fight. Is it that we love, too? I only know that it hurts to watch, as you have done. Hugs and thanks.
Your point in this poem is well taken. The untouched life is a dry, withered, stunted thing. This is a critical point to make in our digital and virtual age.
Thank you, tim. You have no idea how encouraging your comments are. Choosing words so carefully inevitably leads me to doubt whether I made the right decisions sometimes. Many thanks, again.
Your words are immensely kind. If you see the wonder and passion in this, then perhaps this succeeded. Many, many thanks for your kindness in reading these.
In some ways, this poem started the whole collection. It is amazing how so few words can say so much. I really appreciate your generous and thoughtful comments.
Anoint
my warm body
with your finest essence,
heated, exciting, redolent
of you;
come to
my deepest and most sacred space
I invite your bold touch,
make me into
your own.
You write an enormously powerful poem here. Taste your words before you spit them out. What a perfect line. It should be posted on every classroom door, but then we'd miss the next line - consider the impact of their flavor. This is the marvelous core to this poem. Digital screens turned into masks...more awesome images. This poem is a must read.
Agree with Dugh. Bryce has more weight and depth now. And it shows Liam at his best, recovered from so much of what has hurt him that he can be a help to his friends. Thank you for this scene; it was worth the detour.
You make me blush. That is high praise, and I am grateful to you for it. There were many good metaphors to play with here, though. I hope this one helped the Spice Rack live up to its name.