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Thank you! This was great! Well written dialogue really gave me a feel for the different layers of friendship and love. It really helped complete the first story for me. I like Tristan and Miguel even more. I wouldn't mind reading more about them.
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Can't A Guy Visit A Friend?
JeffreyL commented on thecalimack's story chapter in Can't A Guy Visit A Friend?
I saw your new story, and in reading the fine print discovered it was a sequel. So here I am having just finished this story. It was beautifully written, and a bit sad. Miguel and Tristan were interesting characters. As much as I enjoyed it, I had some questions that didn't get answered. I will read the comments because often times other readers see things I miss. Then I will be on to the sequel. Thank you for sharing this. Sorry I missed it the first time around. -
Shouldn't Bart have done something to document the sawn brake line? Maybe a statement from Ron. He could notify the police without accusing anyone. By itself it may not be hard evidence, but combined with other facts it might be important.
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I appreciate your opinions on things, that you share them through your characters, and that you do not beat your readers over the head with them. I continue to enjoy Michael and John and their views on life!
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The set up for your story is really interesting! I think I need to go back to chapter one and re-read the accident to get it sorted in my mind. I get the feeling this won't be an open and shut case. I look forward to complications! Thanks for posting this story.
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What wonderful, interesting friends! Bart and, by association, Robert are very lucky!
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I would like to know Michael and John. I would love to see their home! You did a terrific job describing them, the house, and the garden! Thanks.
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I haven't commented lately, but I wanted to jump in and tell you how much I am enjoying this story! I really care about many of your characters, especially Robert and Bart. I have not formulated an explanation for the events involving Lance, yet. I can't wait to see what happens during the holiday. Thanks for sharing this story.
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Brad is rescued from certain death in a snowstorm by Eric. A romance follows. Besides engaging main characters, you have forests in Montana, Native American neighbors, a trip to Texas, and a wolf named Koot. An interesting plot, good dialogue, and a supporting cast of great characters make this a most enjoyable read! I highly recommend this story.
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I remembered reading this story while looking over the list of stories you've posted here and decided to read it again. The characters, dialogue, and place descriptions are all first rate! I enjoyed it just as much the second time around! Thank you.
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The most important moment in this chapter is the last paragraph. I was impressed with how Mom handled the principal, but I was even more impressed with Oliver's pledge to never be a victim knowing how it affected Ryder.
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A Very Special Boy (Part Three & Epilogue)
JeffreyL commented on FlyOnTheWall's story chapter in A Very Special Boy (Part Three & Epilogue)
This was a great ending to this charming story! I hope we will continue to hear about Charlie, Jacob, and Noah in your other stories. I look forward to Vic's story. This whole group of family, extended family, and friends you have created are people I have come to care about. Thanks. -
If Grant is in trouble because of Mr. Darlington, I imagine the nurse will be able to set things right. Couldn't it be the headmaster wants to commend him for his fast thinking. Although he observed the cuts we're shallow, in theory he saved Gremlin's life. Your young characters are almost always plucky, and Grant is no exception. I am excited to hear more about his time in Scotland. Thanks.
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More good story! Maybe Ryder and Oli can heal each other. Thanks.
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All the parts of a good (to me) short story are here. Your characters are well developed, the conversations felt natural, and the ending gave me room to decide how things move forward. Very enjoyable! Actually, it is sweet in the best sense of the word. Thank you
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Whew! You've given us a lot of information quckly! It is exciting, and I can't wait to see what's next!
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Just binged to get this far, and this story and your characters are intriguing. Now I have to keep reading to find out more about Cid. You've given us some hints, but very few facts. Do I sound like Billy? More please.
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I am saddened to think the police would be so indifferent to someone being assaulted in their own home. I fear for Robert and Bart.
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I can't put my finger on why, but I really enjoyed this story. Description, word choice, characters, and conversation were all very satisfying. I wish I could say it better. Thank you.
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Over The Rainbow • Part III
JeffreyL commented on Carlos Hazday's story chapter in Over The Rainbow • Part III
Sweet! I remember the proposal booth from earlier days, but I didn't realize that was where they were sitting. Most enjoyable, Carlos! Thanks. -
I enjoyed your story! I'm sorry I don't have any deep analysis, nor did I find hidden meanings. But I really liked your characters and their dialogue. Thanks for sharing this story.
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Great story! Logan is very brave! For your next short story you could tell us about their date.
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I wonder if Teddy's comment about Nate being gone for good is a hint by the author that he will turn up again before the story ends. Glad to see Ryder Getting out of the hospital. It's another step forward, even if it is a small one. I wonder if Oliver will be the one to get Ryder back to his music.
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I think January will be a good addition to Eli's mates. It will be interesting to see what a mate that is a vampire does to the dynamics of the - (what do you call a werewolf omega and multiple mates? obviously not a couple, trio, or quartet -a den?) - I'll settle for family for now. I am still really loving this family and their story! And the hot sex is pretty hot! Thanks.
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OMG! Hot hand job! Looking forward to whatever is next. Thanks.
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