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I love this family! Your story continues to be great to read! I realize you are working on other stories too. In fact I'm reading one, and I am enjoying it too. I just hope you will continue with this story and not let it remain unfinished. Thank you.
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Well, I guess I'm getting old, and I just had proof a chapter back. I kept thinking things sounded familiar. Then I get to the end of chapter two and find a comment I wrote some time back. Part of this chapter seems familiar, too. Oh well, this is such a good story whether it is my first or second time reading it! Thank you.
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I think I'm going to enjoy this story! Your set up was great! I already like these characters, and I'm glad they are grown ups. There are lots of teen stories on GA, and I've liked many of them. However, I am an older adult, and sometimes it's nice to read about grown ups. Thanks for This good beginning.
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This was a nicely written story. Aside from whatever Jason did or didn't do for Blake, he didn't ruin his relationship with his sister. That was a wise choice in my opinion. Thank you for sharing this story.
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I am glad Ryder explained his high to Teddy. Even more than getting Nate out of the picture, he needs to build trust with Teddy. Equally important, Teddy did not overreact, as much as he wanted to. Be needs to build trust with Ryder. More good story! Thanks.
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I was worried about the possibility that Ryder would end up staying with Teddy's family. After hearing what Mom (and everone else) had to say, maybe it will turn out to be a good thing for everyone. I wonder how Mike, Blake, and Liz will fit into the mix?
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Where do I go from here?
JeffreyL commented on Timothy M.'s story chapter in Where do I go from here?
Nicely done! I am a fan of fantasy and sci-fi, but I don't know much about this series. I read and enjoyed your other story from this series, and at that time I googled to find out more. It included a long list of Valdemar stories in chronological order. This was another tantalizing peek. I guess I need to go to the library. Thanks for sharing. -
"Bless Me Father" is a brilliantly written short story! Everyone should take the little bit of time needed to read it. It is sad, but there is so much said in these few words. I imagine it would generate a lot of discussion in a book study group. I highly recommend this story!
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I didn't see that ending coming. No wonder Stanley was distracted during mass. This was beautifully written. How sad, but maybe not surprising considering the time in which Jamie and Stanley grew up. I purposely chose not to read the other comments until mine was done. You have left lots of room for possible endings. I can't wait to see what other readers had to say. Thank you.
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Well done! You conveyed so much with so few words! A great example of a well written short story. Thank you.
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As a retired teacher I always get worried when a teacher and a student start a relationship in a story. It seems to me teacher and student relations are still pretty much taboo. They can certainly ruin a teacher's career. To make it worse for Bart, he is not that much colder than Robert, and Robert is mature for his age in many ways. Robert's parents' blessing is in their favor, but the principal is going to be a continuous threat. You have created two great characters that I really like, and I can't wait to see what You have in store for them.
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Robert's parents' pillow talk was amazingly well written. It seemed in keeping with their personalities, to me, and their love for their child was really evident. In my reading experience, the teens in gay fiction don't often have parents as supportive as Monique and Sanjay. Thanks for more good story!
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I am caught up having finished this chapter. This is an interesting world you've created. I especially liked the magic tattoos! I think Game of Thrones has put to rest the idea that an author can't kill off a loveable and/or important character. I look forward to whatever happens next. Thanks for sharing this story.
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A Very Special Boy (Part One)
JeffreyL commented on FlyOnTheWall's story chapter in A Very Special Boy (Part One)
Wow! You packed a lot into this chapter! It has been fun to see events from Charlie's point of view. I am a bit sad it's all coming to an end. You have a great way of creating characters to care about and dialogue that is believable. Thank you! -
Over The Rainbow • Part II
JeffreyL commented on Carlos Hazday's story chapter in Over The Rainbow • Part II
Hey Carlos! Your response to Tim made me think if you did take a short break from CJ, you would give the world a chance to get ahead of his life again. -
Over The Rainbow • Part II
JeffreyL commented on Carlos Hazday's story chapter in Over The Rainbow • Part II
The vicarious thrill of a trip to Australia made this chapter extra enjoyable for me! It's on my bucket list, but won't be happening anytime soon for me. I have said it before, but once again I have to say you would do a bang up job as a travel consultant! -
It's too bad TJ ran into Carter on his way home. What a way to ruin TJ's evening and the end of this chapter. TJ was already counseling himself to be cautious, but Carter took away every bit of hope. TJ has no sense of self-worth, so he swallowed Carter's bile completely. I'll be waiting to see how Randy reacts and what Carter's next move will be. Thanks for this good story!
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I'd say trouble is brewing for Robert and Bart, at least as far as the school environment is concerned. Did you tell us how old Bart is? I'll have to go back and look. Thanks.
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What a great little story!
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I enjoyed this first chapter. Thanks for making the people and place names readable and pronounceable. Nothing ruins fantasy faster, for me, than long names that are next to impossible to say. You have done a good job of setting up your story with this first chapter! There are lots of questions waiting to be answered. Thanks.
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Chapter 22 Matters of the heart
JeffreyL commented on Timothy M.'s story chapter in Chapter 22 Matters of the heart
Thanks for another chapter with this wonderful couple! It was worth the wait. Now my fourth reading has me current. I look forward to more. A question about the P.I. investigating the father abusing his daughters. Didn't that happen in one of the early chapters? Having just re-read the story, I should know. -
I like Robert, and based on what you have told us about the new school so far, I expect he will have much worse that Lance to deal with soon. I worry about Robert becoming friends with Mr. Vaselly. Having any relation besides teacher and student can quickly become a slippery slope. Judging by feelings you've hinted at, but the characters haven't voiced, I worry that an affair about to happen. More good story. Thank you.
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I am enjoying reading about Kohen trying to sort out his life. Thank you.
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Since I haven't commented in awhile it is time to check in. Still loving these characters and this story! It was fun to hear the details of their Christmas celebration! I need to Google for cookie recipes. Thanks for more fun!
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Grant is a most precocious eleven year old. He is unlike most of the eleven year olds (U.S. 5th grade) I taught over the years. But then most of your main characters are similar: hard working, focused, and very bright. I liked him right away. I look forward to reading how he moves forward after losing his parents and sister. It sounds like he will have several kind adults to help him on his way. As usual, your attention to the details astounds and pleases me. Thank you.
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