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Part XIV. Cold Insultation
VBlew commented on sumtimesIwrite's story chapter in Part XIV. Cold Insultation
Robert is running away and it’s not working. He is in better shape, but still not willing to get back into his Mechaman suit… Chad is miserable too…. -
The sister was interesting, not really wanting anything of her deceased brothers. Basically got rid of everything. But was certain it was not suicide.
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Part 13: First Official Date
VBlew commented on StoriesByTroy's story chapter in Part 13: First Official Date
This seemed like a really nice date. Bowling can be fun. -
Love this chapter, mix of coming of age and angst teen rom-com vibe. Throw in the supernatural vampire mix and this world is forming.
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The smoldering from the earlier chapters turned into fire in this one. Looking forward to what they get up to after the next session.
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Great chapter? Violet was getting into the script. I thought they had a party to be at? The physical things happening seem like a prelude to an earthquake.
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It seems Roger got hit by a car, damn bad luck all around tonight.
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Loved the ending, seemed to have more personality in this chapter.
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Part XII. Residual Heat
VBlew commented on sumtimesIwrite's story chapter in Part XII. Residual Heat
The taking care of each other’s wounds was exactly what they needed. -
Another awesome chapter. There are supportive people all around, even letting the negative people exist and taking less offense of their comments. Catching Tim and Guy being intimate was an eye opener. He is gradually getting used to his new home.
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Chapter Twelve: : Holloway
VBlew commented on Topher Lydon's story chapter in Chapter Twelve: : Holloway
So Webb knew when he brought the information to Archer about Tyler, that they were half brothers. But didn’t say anything to Tyler about that. Did he think Tyler already knew? Diana is more despicable than previously known. Caleb now knows for sure about his biological father, and that he has money for his education. We also learn why the counselor was so interested in talking to Caleb about Vicki… -
Chapter 3: MY FUZZY ALPHA
VBlew commented on Topher Lydon's story chapter in Chapter 3: MY FUZZY ALPHA
They have an interesting dynamic to their relationship. Kind of playful. Not nearly as angsty as some of the other couples in this town. -
This seems to be the first time they got to know about each other.
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What a shock for Jasper going to the bar to tell Harley about his song, and finding he is in a relationship with Damian…
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Part XI. Horizon on Fire
VBlew commented on sumtimesIwrite's story chapter in Part XI. Horizon on Fire
Excellent ending to this book. -
Skarg was instrumental in saving Jack and Vince from getting hurt in the fall after getting the noose off of Jack. He is a funny character. Theo learns his family and pack are not dead, it’s an illusion. Now to find the real wisdom tree and restore them, and reunite the trio.
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When Ryder was late and not responding to his phone something felt really wrong, glad it turned out well. They each got their own moments with their special people. Aunt Beth was an absolute blessing for going to Owen and supporting him. She had seen the struggle. What’s going to happen next? Will Eric be an ally? What about the parents, losing control of their son? Can’t wait for the next chapter. This story is really working with the shorter length chapters. Leaving me anticipating the next one.
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@Philippebeat me to it. Rebecca mentioned something that another firm had about if something happened to Taggert before the trust finalized. This may affect other trusts that Zane has control of, or more of Yoder Ranch itself. Tag did what he needed to reassure an uncertain Ash about his intentions with the cowboy. Not going anywhere without you. Money doesn’t matter, you do. That’s very strong.
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Chapter Eleven : Miguels Big Day Out
VBlew commented on Topher Lydon's story chapter in Chapter Eleven : Miguels Big Day Out
Miguel was awesome. Caleb is lucid, which is likely very bad for some people, like his mother… the fact he remembered getting a boner, and Tyler riding him was something too. Glad it was before Billy was official. Is he going to remember who his real father is? That’s going to be disturbing. -
Chapter 2: MY SISTER'S HUSBAND
VBlew commented on Topher Lydon's story chapter in Chapter 2: MY SISTER'S HUSBAND
Warren had a realization that he loves Tom, and Chet gave him the motivation to tell everyone. Chet was a mess, his sister was a mess. They got pregnant trying to avoid their lives and are trapped in a marriage that may or may not last, but is definitely not built on a good foundation. -
Part X. Static and Steel
VBlew commented on sumtimesIwrite's story chapter in Part X. Static and Steel
Nice cliffhanger. Invisigal’s deception in this seems duplicitous. Nobody has really spoken to her after Chase was injured. What is her motivation for what she has done? She was helping Robert with the Mecha suit when it failed, did she sabotage it? Chad and Robert need another sit down conversation to work out how they are feeling and if they can apologize and move forward. -
I agree this AI is telling a story from the outside looking in, it’s not really a first person perspective. Curious if that could be added to the prompt and know if it makes the tone any better?
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Those stores do tend to have hunks in them, the guys got a little distracted, and that nearly destroyed the porch. They make a great team. Barnaby saving them as usual.
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You brought these guy back to life for me. Glad you are picking this up to finish of the story.
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Kent now has someone to hold the space his brother had in their room at home. Not the same but still someone there.
