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Hmmm, got another reference about issues with Fort, have to wonder what all is going on there. I know the holders have to understand that with Fall, they have to start tithing again more and better as well; but burning a whole orchard seems a little harsh. Family drama, no matter where and when, is always with us; but I actually would like a few more visits....
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Short but really excellent; hard to lose anyone but when they are so young; make it just that much more heartbreaking. Have to wonder if these kids aren't going to end up being the only ones left. Can't wait to see what happens next.
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The first chapter didn't particularly but this one really made me sad; I guess because we know what will happen eventually. Well written though, just felt so somber reading it.
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Holy Shit, don't even know where to start...
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F'drun is an ass and I think he is dangerous; but Kylara is just as much of a bitch as he is an ass, and maybe just as dangerous. Kylara is dangerous because she isn't responsible and she plays way to many games without thinking about the consequences.
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Well written as usual, although the pacing seemed a little off, maybe just me. I hope that the decision on who to send south doesn't effect any of the sending F'drun south might get him out of the way; would that be fair to those that he could put in danger down there? It isn't just this weyr then; the divide between the two groups is going to cause problems the longer it is allowed to grown. Something is going to have to be done about it, the sooner the better.
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Chapter 2: Sweet Start
centexhairysub commented on astone2292's story chapter in Chapter 2: Sweet Start
Some really smoldering feeling coming through in this one; well written again and flowed beautifully. I do worry that with them getting all involved that they might not fully be ready if Stefan were to send someone after Vincent right now. The fact that he walked into Mason and did not even realize that Dave was gone isn't a good thing, needs to be more on his toes. -
Chapter 1: Dark Discoveries
centexhairysub commented on astone2292's story chapter in Chapter 1: Dark Discoveries
Truly an interesting start to this story; well written and the pacing was good. Can't wait to see where you take this. -
Well written, but sort of sad in a couple of different levels.
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Good chapter, flowed really well. I just keep feeling that Prince Havar might know more about the demons issues than we realize. He doesn't seem to consider the demons as much of a threat as the humans, have to wonder why???
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Damn, I almost had to take a shower with all the unresolved sexual tension in this chapter. This flowed wonderfully.
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Your obviously a genius because I swear that same thought popped into my head when Sawyer was talking about this mother having a one night stand. She obviously would not have made Fergus a good mate, way to strong but as a one night stand, maybe...
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I love how honest Granger and Daventry can be with each other; that is truly rare no matter who is involved. I am glad that Granger caught up with Daventry; I think this is going to take both of them to keep British interest aligned in this. Of course, the overthrow ended with death, but Granger correctly surmised, almost nothing else is feasible. The Baron, even though a soldier and a noble, seems so much younger than Granger. I have a worry about him becoming to attached to Granger. Can't wait for the next update and to see what Granger's plan is. Marvelous as always Mark...
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Epilogue - Chapter 10-Final Chapter
centexhairysub commented on Mark Arbour's story chapter in Epilogue - Chapter 10-Final Chapter
So loved that Brad made the plans but Jake jumped the gun and did the proposing as well as asking Darius and Will for their permission. Stef may help but like Will he is going to want to see how this new temple is going to be set up. Mark, you are truly a genius. I can't wait for the next story in the extraordinary saga.- 26 comments
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A Trip to High Reaches
centexhairysub commented on Mawgrim's story chapter in A Trip to High Reaches
Well, F'drun should have been stripped of his dragon then and there; not sure how that would have worked. Obviously, there is something wrong with the man mentally. Well written and the pacing is nearly perfect the last few chapters. -
A lot happened in this chapter; but it came off as flat to me. I think the formatting bothered me but I just could not get into this chapter. It seemed disjointed and desperate.
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So glad that F'drun and his dragon did not win out; hate the dragon got hurt but... I am really starting to worry about M'rell. Just can't understand his attitude, have to think there has been something happen that we are not aware of yet.
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Honestly, Fergus doesn't seem to have anything under control. He isn't willing to get dirty enough to stop the rogue, that will not play well when it comes out and it will. Shayna and the other females don't seem to truly respect him; they may fear him but fear with a lack of respect may be a disaster. I doubt that Fergus is stronger than Jimmie; and not sure that Jimmy will choose the pack over his mate, no matter how much he craves the call of the pack.
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The Young Politician 2
centexhairysub commented on gabz2000's story chapter in The Young Politician 2
Hmm, the fact that he is not remembering what goes on in the dreams after doing so for so long bothers me. I don't like his first choice for a visit, just don't trust Havar at all. Can't wait to see what happens next. -
I really feel that all hell is about to break lose and not in a good way at all. F'drun is nothing but trouble and should have been sent away well before this and forbidden to return.
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I know that it would not be a popular move but I think the wings need to be integrated. Slowly, at first maybe, but you have to be able to bring these groups together. I agree with others that the situation with M'rell needs to be handled quickly or it will get out of hand. Can't wait to see who rides the gold that is about to rise...
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Ah, this explains so much. Now understand so much more about Jimmy. Have to wonder if he will be able to bring Sawyer over; will he even be willing to try? Fergus's unwillingness to face reality is going to make it so much harder to stop this rogue.
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The Young Politician 1
centexhairysub commented on gabz2000's story chapter in The Young Politician 1
I understand the issue about the fact that at least two of the voices are obviously young; but doesn't it say somewhere ; And a child will lead them? LOL. The fact that Chris has also received a mark of some type that represents each of the first four dynasties also ties in in my opinion. Plus if you are going to go with with your representation shouldn't it be Birth instead of Life? Why did you assign the two males to the representations that represent power in some way and the two that are female to those that are in nature? -
The four hundred years without a turn has caused the new riders to not be cautions enough or realize how bad it can get and how quick it can happen.
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The Young Politician 1
centexhairysub commented on gabz2000's story chapter in The Young Politician 1
I definitely believe that the four voices are from the first four dynasties to rule over the Elves. I think they are taking their time letting Chris grow in power and understanding before giving him to great of a burden. Really well written as usual; and the flow as excellent as well.- 12 comments
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