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    Chapter 44

    Daddydavek commented on Mark Arbour's story chapter in Chapter 44

    Will keeps having these amazing quasi-adult moments and thoughts. What a birthday experience. The story has taken an interesting turn now that it looks like the moms are in fact about to break up.
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    Justice prevailed. As for as Jordan's perspective, it is a hard truth, but he has no idea of what he has gotten himself into. His life in jail will not just be hard, but brutalizing and monotonous. What a waste. Great job Andy. I look forward to the epilogue from Jason's POV!
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    For your first posted story, I'd say you hit a homerun!
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    Chapter 4

    Daddydavek commented on Nephylim's story chapter in Chapter 4

    Well it didn't advance the story much, but it did titillate to no end. Glory is a cat and Sar is captivated by him.
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    The plot convolutions are seemingly employed merely to make the poor characters suffer and thus the readers with them. I saw damn few answers, lots of hints and still have many questions because most of my assumptions seem to have been false. Lead astray by either a master or a charlatan. Perhaps the next few chapters will prove one or the other....
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    Well now, some answers, but still so many questions......
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    Chapter 43

    Daddydavek commented on Mark Arbour's story chapter in Chapter 43

    Gathan was a guy who mostly had his shit together. Now he is floundering in a long distance relationship and hasn't realized his life is important and he needs to deal with it or move on. Will is Will, but will he get into the big hunk at the Mission pants?
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    I suppose he was trying to be tongue-in-cheek, but it did come off as being 'round the bend'. I know writers are supposed to enjoy their work, but I think the goat is getting a bit snarky about trying to set his readers up while his poor characters are suffering, like almost right out of the "Perils of Pauline".
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    Chapter 3

    Daddydavek commented on Nephylim's story chapter in Chapter 3

    Rover bonded? Poor Felix, he has to go through all the dislocation and confusion surrounded by a big dog and vampires and perhaps a multi-genus cat like Glory.
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    Looks like you worked hard on that closing Andy! Good Job! Of course, I'd convict in a heartbeat. Getting twelve jurors to agree on anything is like herding cats. But I think your prosecutor did a good job of refuting the spin put on by the defense. Still, I wouldn't be surprised if it was a split decision with our wiley defendent found guilty of some but not all counts. I guess I'll just have to wait for the verdict.
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    The lack of paragraphs, like Nephy said is distracting. Unlike her, I never did get used to it and had to work to plow through it. When you get a moment, go back and edit it. It will certainly help. Glad to see the 'dumb jock' isn't so unaware and uncaring as perceived.
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    Dead Hour

    Daddydavek commented on Young Sage's story chapter in Dead Hour

    I was surprised but not shocked. This is GA afterall.... Nice intro chapter.
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    Being a strong believer in karma and that in the end all things balance out, I think it's time for lady luck to smile on Trevor and friends rather than the evil ones. I'm not saying that everything is going to be smooth sailing, but a little bad luck on the part of B'stroke & Co. seems in order. As for as George goes, if he is going to bail on Bridget, the best way would be to set her up in such a way that he could avoid being taken down as well. I can think of several ways that could happen and even a couple that could backfire on him. The next few chapters promise to be very interesting.
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    When you live in a nice quiet, normal sort of place, murder is always shocking. I'm sure it does feel like you were violated to have such a vile action done so close to home. Being tied to a lamp post and set afire is a horrible thing. It does sound like a hate crime of some sort. No matter the motive, no one truly deserves that fate. I hope the perpetrators are brought to a swift and certain justice by the authorities.
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    Good job summarizing the possibilities about Rachel. I think Lisa is in for a big letdown regarding the witch Bridget. I agree our esteemed Capricorn will be up to his ugly tail in cliffies because he fancies himself a mountain goat!
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    Unexpected

    Daddydavek commented on Cia's story chapter in Unexpected

    Hey Cia! I liked it too.
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    Marty & Benji, you guys are good. With the glacial pace of this vast opus, I must admit I am a casual reader that was hooked at the beginning. However, I do let the timeline get away from me and really just take too much at face value. The Goat is canny and I daresay cagey about what he says and maybe just as importantly, doesn't say. Good catch and discussion!
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    Chapter 2

    Daddydavek commented on Nephylim's story chapter in Chapter 2

    So the little minx is jealous too! Poor Rover, his interspecies attractions keep mounting! Down boy! Pixie remains flighty and Sar is out of the picture still taking care of other business. Hopefully, Felix will have an easier time than poor Glory. But somehow, I doubt it as our fiendish author delights in torment!
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    Chapter 4

    Daddydavek commented on LJH's story chapter in Chapter 4

    Interesting! It's almost like you are trying to paint with words a ballet, with the changes in focus and the dancing from point to point. I had to read it three times to really see what you were attempting. So that is the reason for the delay in the review. An intriguing but difficult task and it may leave some readers cold. Just as some people do not appreciate ballet or dance.
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    Another interesting chapter. I was struck with your choice of the word "emplaced" when describing attaching the GPS to the windshield with a suction cup. To me the connotation is of someone being very carefully specific about placing something and we are after all talking about the windscreen of an old but serviceable off road vehicle. So it seemed a little odd. But then again you do throw out these little tidbits some innocuous, some not.
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    I may be getting ahead of the story, but it seems to me the story is getting close to the time of the Cape St. Vincent near debacle. Wiki has an interesting article: http://en.wikipedia....t_Vincent_(1797) If you get a Did you mean querry and it provides a link to the battle of Cape St. Vincent 1797, click on it to get to the full article.
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    Judas

    Daddydavek commented on C James's story chapter in Judas

    Bridget is a cold conniving witch and her dirty cop George is no better. A Cessna was flying by as they went to cross the river. How inconvenient. It seems it was a good thing they went to the station and away from the "K". Joel and Lisa are starting to figure out Bridget, but will it be too late? The buildup to 97 & 98 continues.
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    Chapter 22

    Daddydavek commented on Mark Arbour's story chapter in Chapter 22

    "This is just a transitional chapter, but hopefully it's a fix for you all!" Worked well for me! Thanks, I really enjoyed it!
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    Chapter 6

    Daddydavek commented on Cia's story chapter in Chapter 6

    Like our poor battered hero, I was surprised that Benny wasn't dead. Nice chapter!
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    The transition into the new school is in progress. I just wonder if the preppy little kid who called Will a Neanderthal gets a recurring role? I kind of thought he was cool and maybe a potential good friend for JJ. As for Ryan, I think we will see more of him and his companion.
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