MikeL Posted August 19, 2008 Posted August 19, 2008 C James has released Chapter 4 of Changing Lanes, Islands in the Sea.
Bondwriter Posted August 19, 2008 Posted August 19, 2008 I have the unpleasant feeling the "contact", an "unnamed man" who won't tell his name and who got deaf because of a recent explosion could be some old acquaintance... At first I wondered whether it was Yuri, but could BOTH Yuri and the Scar have survived? As for Eric, he's going through lots of efforts to set up a party he's likely to ruin by drinking too much tequila...
Phantom Posted August 19, 2008 Posted August 19, 2008 Great job CJ! As for Eric, he's going through lots of efforts to set up a party he's likely to ruin by drinking too much tequila... And speaking from experience, I've never ruined a party by drinking too much tequila (i'm standin up for the Eric's lol) Eric
jkeeling Posted August 19, 2008 Posted August 19, 2008 I have to say great chapter. I love the way everything is developing so far. I think the paparazi are gonna get what they deserve.
Drewbie Posted August 19, 2008 Posted August 19, 2008 (edited) Great chapter cj I do think it might be the scar. Maybe some other russian guy but the explosion part, also might be a thug that was with him. Edited August 19, 2008 by Drewbie
Tiger Posted August 19, 2008 Posted August 19, 2008 (edited) I have to agree. It was a good chapter. I do believe that the paparazzo learned a valuable lesson. Edited August 19, 2008 by Tiger
C James Posted August 19, 2008 Posted August 19, 2008 Thanks!! BTW, I just wanted to clear up one small thing.. The contact has a Russian accent. The Scar wasn't russian. Dimitri was, but Dimitri is dead. The Scar, if alive, would also be missing an arm at the very least. The contact isn't. The contact isn't The Scar.
Site Moderator TalonRider Posted August 19, 2008 Site Moderator Posted August 19, 2008 Thanks!! BTW, I just wanted to clear up one small thing.. The contact has a Russian accent. The Scar wasn't russian. Dimitri was, but Dimitri is dead. The Scar, if alive, would also be missing an arm at the very least. The contact isn't. The contact isn't The Scar. You beat me to the punch. I was going to say something about that. There was no mention of a missing arm or an artificial one. Then again, you do like to try and mislead us a bit. It was good to see the paparazzi get something this time round. But I don't think we've quite seen the last of them yet.
Cynical Romantic Posted August 20, 2008 Posted August 20, 2008 Well, the general is either unrealistically naive (unlikely), or has allowed his fear for his son's life to seriously cloud his judgment (much more likely). At first, you set it up so it seemed like he had a solid plan, but now it seems like he's going off half-cocked like some amateur, making stupid mistakes and making himself extremely vulnerable. Why do I get the feeling that Chase and Brandon's bachelor party is going to happen right next door to a clandestine mercenary training facility? "Near Africa", indeed. At least we have a setup for a big showdown...
Former Member Posted August 20, 2008 Posted August 20, 2008 Great chapter CJ! Why do I get the feeling that Chase and Brandon's bachelor party is going to happen right next door to a clandestine mercenary training facility? "Near Africa", indeed. At least we have a setup for a big showdown... That was my first thought when I heard the "location" too. I know this is Eric's story, but I can't help missing Chase and Brandon.
MikeL Posted August 20, 2008 Author Posted August 20, 2008 I noticed the "near Africa" location. If any of the Instinct crew see General Bradson, it could be devastating for someone.
Benji Posted August 20, 2008 Posted August 20, 2008 I noticed the "near Africa" location. If any of the Instinct crew see General Bradson, it could be devastating for someone. ........sigh, can't comment as of yet, will read chapter tomorrow as I e-mailed it back to me at work (SLOW Days)
Drewbie Posted August 20, 2008 Posted August 20, 2008 Great chapter CJ! That was my first thought when I heard the "location" too. I know this is Eric's story, but I can't help missing Chase and Brandon. I know I like brandon a lot Helen might be hurt, somehow I think Brandon would help get the son back if it came to that.
Benji Posted August 21, 2008 Posted August 21, 2008 I have the unpleasant feeling the "contact", an "unnamed man" who won't tell his name and who got deaf because of a recent explosion could be some old acquaintance... At first I wondered whether it was Yuri, but could BOTH Yuri and the Scar have survived? ..............a man in superb physical condition, and whom the General thought altogether incongruously young to be in need of the hearing aid that bedecked his left ear. The General guessed that the aid was some sort of bug detector and in that, he was half-right. The man
AFriendlyFace Posted August 21, 2008 Posted August 21, 2008 As for Eric, he's going through lots of efforts to set up a party he's likely to ruin by drinking too much tequila... And speaking from experience, I've never ruined a party by drinking too much tequila (i'm standin up for the Eric's lol) Well, not that we were under assault, but speaking for the Kevin's, I've made quite a few parties more fun by drinking too much tequila Well, the general is either unrealistically naive (unlikely), or has allowed his fear for his son's life to seriously cloud his judgment (much more likely). At first, you set it up so it seemed like he had a solid plan, but now it seems like he's going off half-cocked like some amateur, making stupid mistakes and making himself extremely vulnerable. Why do I get the feeling that Chase and Brandon's bachelor party is going to happen right next door to a clandestine mercenary training facility? "Near Africa", indeed. At least we have a setup for a big showdown... That's what I was thinking too. I have the unpleasant feeling the "contact", an "unnamed man" who won't tell his name and who got deaf because of a recent explosion could be some old acquaintance... At first I wondered whether it was Yuri, but could BOTH Yuri and the Scar have survived? Thanks!! BTW, I just wanted to clear up one small thing.. The contact has a Russian accent. The Scar wasn't russian. Dimitri was, but Dimitri is dead. The Scar, if alive, would also be missing an arm at the very least. The contact isn't. The contact isn't The Scar. I also noticed that it seemed as though this gentleman was too young. I would suspect then that it was Jerry's contact and not Jerry himself. I can't wait to see what develops next! -Kevin
C James Posted August 22, 2008 Posted August 22, 2008 I have a question regarding the paparazzi. Paparazzi is a plural term, meaning more than one. The singular is Paparazzo. In LTMP, I used "Papparazzi" as both singular and plural, as this is how people in the industry refer to them. "I had a damn paparazzi on my front lawn!" In the dialog, this is quite okay, but in a third-person narration, should I have done this (in the narration)? I did it mainly for simplicity, but it is an inaccurate usage. So, my question is, should I go back and fix in in the posted chapters of Changing Lanes (and maybe LTMP)? If I shift over to using the correct terms in the narration, I'd IMHO need to do so consistently, which would mean changing the posted chapters. I can do this easily with Changing Lanes as there aren't many chapters. Please let me know what you think. CJ
Site Administrator Graeme Posted August 22, 2008 Site Administrator Posted August 22, 2008 While technically paparazzo (I found dictionary references that say paparazzo is the term, with paparazzi being the plural term) may be the singular, in common English usage, you'll probably find that paparazzi is both singular and plural. It's not correct, given the Italian derivation of the term, but it's what people recognise. I wouldn't be concerned. You could change it to be correct, and hence educate we dumb masses that didn't realise there's a different term for the singular, but that's up to you
MikeL Posted August 22, 2008 Author Posted August 22, 2008 (edited) I have a question regarding the paparazzi. Paparazzi is a plural term, meaning more than one. The singular is Paparazzo. In LTMP, I used "Papparazzi" as both singular and plural, as this is how people in the industry refer to them. "I had a damn paparazzi on my front lawn!" In the dialog, this is quite okay, but in a third-person narration, should I have done this (in the narration)? I did it mainly for simplicity, but it is an inaccurate usage. So, my question is, should I go back and fix in in the posted chapters of Changing Lanes (and maybe LTMP)? If I shift over to using the correct terms in the narration, I'd IMHO need to do so consistently, which would mean changing the posted chapters. I can do this easily with Changing Lanes as there aren't many chapters. Please let me know what you think. CJ CJ, I think "paparazzi" is acceptable for singular as well as plural in English. It's not an English word; plurals are not formed in English as they are in Italian. If you start writing in Italian, you would be wrong. Edited August 22, 2008 by MikeL
C James Posted August 22, 2008 Posted August 22, 2008 While technically paparazzo (I found dictionary references that say paparazzo is the term, with paparazzi being the plural term) may be the singular, in common English usage, you'll probably find that paparazzi is both singular and plural. It's not correct, given the Italian derivation of the term, but it's what people recognise. I wouldn't be concerned. You could change it to be correct, and hence educate we dumb masses that didn't realise there's a different term for the singular, but that's up to you It was the regognition issue that made me take that route initially. I already, per necessity, had to do a lot of "educating" in LTMP (such as related to the technology) so I figured enough was probably already too much. LoL! CJ, I think "paparazzi" is acceptable for singular as well as plural in English. It's not an English word; plurals are not formed in English as they are in Italian. If you start writing in Italian, you would be wrong. If I start writing in Italian, there would be far more problems than that. ! LoL! Thanks... Oh, BTW, yes, Senior Frogs is real. And yes, I've been there (to the one in Grand Cayman). To be honest, I didn't find the food that good, but it was a unique name so it found its way into the story (besides, i knew it would catch the eye our you, our resident amphibian!)
Phantom Posted August 23, 2008 Posted August 23, 2008 I know i'm coming in a bit late to the question about the paparazzi, but i've always seen the word used in both the singular form and the plural form (and to reference, see TMZ.com) As always CJ, amazing job with the chapter and can't wait for more
W_L Posted August 25, 2008 Posted August 25, 2008 Good Chapter CJ and love the build up as always, you got an interesting rescue storyline building up.
jfalkon Posted August 26, 2008 Posted August 26, 2008 I liked this chapter and am looking forward to the next one. The paparazzi thing is a small issue if it is one at all. I like paparazo when you meen only one. It is a little clearer to me but I'm the sort of person who gets anoyed when someone calls radii radiuses. Its to bad the contact is not the Scar. I was hoping someone would rebuild him as some sort of bionic Darth Vader type. I'm pretty sure CJ has the technical skill by now. After building an atomic bomb, could building a cyborg really be that hard?
W_L Posted August 26, 2008 Posted August 26, 2008 Actually, it is not impossible with today's prosthetic limbs and plastic surgery to reconstruct scar into anyone. It would be a funny twist if Scar is some one newly introduced into the mix. The manager of the strip club, a contact of the mercs, or some one brand new. We know the guy loves disguises so why not? Beware!
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