The Searcher by mikiesboy

[Defiance19]

18 hours ago, Reader1810 said:

 

Never in a million years would I have guessed. Well done keeping that a secret, tim. 

Never in a million years would I have guessed anywhere this story was going. That’s a good thing, and I would make a horrible detective. 

[Mikiesboy]

14 hours ago, Reader1810 said:

And, Hemothracene missed this half-witch who was right under his nose and friends with his Searcher. Maybe Dayson cast a spell on himself to hide his true nature?  

Did he miss him, or just ignore him? Perhaps he thought like Dayson's own people, that since Day wasn't of pure blood, he was nothing to worry about.

[Mikiesboy]

6 minutes ago, Defiance19 said:

Never in a million years would I have guessed anywhere this story was going. That’s a good thing, and I would make a horrible detective. 

Figuring it all out ahead of time makes reading dull ... i like to be taken to interesting places when i read. Thanks Boss xxoxo

[Reader1810]

3 hours ago, Mikiesboy said:

Did he miss him, or just ignore him? Perhaps he thought like Dayson's own people, that since Day wasn't of pure blood, he was nothing to worry about.

Excellent reasoning, tim. I’m going with him being nothing to worry about. 

[Former Member]

2 hours ago, Reader1810 said:

Excellent reasoning, tim. I’m going with him being nothing to worry about. 

Dayson’s mother could have used an obscuring spell on him for protection.
;–)

[rickproehl]

9 minutes ago, droughtquake said:

Dayson’s mother could have used an obscuring spell on him for protection.
;–)

Drought no it was Keter and Dayson and the big plan of the Witches - (or the evil spirits of tim) 😴

[Mikiesboy]

Chapter 8, the Final chapter has been posted.

[Reader1810]

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“Damn my eyes for not seeing it!” Stravor jumped from the wagon.

Excellent way to say he didn’t realize something, tim.

PS: I know there’s a word for this but I can’t think

Metaphor! 

Edited October 4, 2019 by Reader1810

[Reader1810]

Drinking my first coffee, that’s why my comments shall be less, I think. But, oh am I loving this chapter.  

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The Searcher stood quietly for some minutes before he continued. “The cost for failure … do you wish to know it? The cost of failing Him would be the soul of a loved one. My father swore on mine, and I on my mother’s. Had I failed, I would have had to take hers, and father, mine.”

“I remember how proud I was on that day, when I swore the oath. Fool.” Stravor wrapped the blanket around himself and settled once again on the floor. “Do you think I could have? Killed her? My own mother. I know I could not. I would have thrown myself on my sword first.”

That right there should have told him - and his father before him - Hemothracene was not in the slightest benevolent nor to be revered.

 

Edited October 4, 2019 by Reader1810

[Reader1810]

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“Stravor …”

“Hmm?” The big man pulled the blanket tighter. “Leave me … tis too early.”

 Wake up Stravor! 

Edited October 4, 2019 by Reader1810

[Reader1810]

 

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“Master, I feel your need. Shall I …?”

“No, boy. There is time for that later” Stravor kissed his boy again. “Let us just be as we are and sleep.”

Two responses to this I had

‘Oh ho’ and ‘isn’t that sweet?’ 

Yeah, I know the second one is a little weird when one is thinking of Stravor...

Then again, the same can be said here about Dayson. 

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“Nay, no.” Dayson toed the ground. “Tis foolish, but I thought the boy would like to see his pony … when he woke … if—”

Sweet, indeed!  

Edited October 4, 2019 by Reader1810

[Reader1810]

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The two hugged for several moments. Both knew what may have been, but were relieved they’d have a chance to see what would become.

A most excellent ‘read between the lines’ statement. Saying so much with so few words, too. 

[Reader1810]

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Stravor grinned. “Is that all you need for happiness? Your man’s hard cock in the morning?”

Keter nibbled his master’s ear. “That’s all, but twice rather than just once.”

“Is that right?” Stravor flipped them both over. He made sure the boy was doubly happy.

Could have been said otherwise, but this was perfect. Made me smile, because I knew all is good with them. 

and this one, too. 

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Keter grinned. “You have special talents, Sir.” 

“Thank you, lad. But those your grin mean, are not for sale.”

 

Edited October 4, 2019 by Reader1810

[Reader1810]

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“Don’t worry, Day. I can leave Keter and come down to see you. Sample your ale and man-boys there. The boys in the south are a lusty lot.” 

Keter slapped Stravor’s arm. “You forget I am a witch, master.” 

 

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Stravor laughed and met Dayson’s eyes. “Yes, I do. Fine. I will just sample the boys.” 

Dayson laughed, and Keter sighed. 

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Picking up Keter, Stravor kissed him soundly. “Boy, you are the only witch I need.”

Keter hung on tight, wrapped around his man.

You got that right! 

Edited October 4, 2019 by Reader1810

[Reader1810]

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Galeth returned by way of the stable and climbed up on the wagon’s seat. He sat in the centre.

Of course, he did. Where else, eh? 

[Reader1810]

Stravor, Keter, and Shade. Forever joined.

[Former Member]

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The ancient words were more than sound. They flowed from the crone like tiny silver worms that slid into Keter’s mind. The lad squeezed his eyes shut and winced, for the words were old and real. They lay in his young mind, waiting to hatch, but as they did, they sent slim tendrils into his brain.

This paragraph. It’s creepy in a way, but inventive at the same time. ‘Like tiny silver worms.’ Words have power, but I don’t think I’ve ever heard instructions being described like this before. Definitely magical.
;–)

[mollyhousemouse]

2 hours ago, Reader1810 said:

A most excellent ‘read between the lines’ statement. Saying so much with so few words, too. 

tim is, i think, a master at this. gets the point across, sets the scene, but not in an over the top too many words kind of way

[Kitt]

52 minutes ago, droughtquake said:

This paragraph. It’s creepy in a way, but inventive at the same time. ‘Like tiny silver worms.’ Words have power, but I don’t think I’ve ever heard instructions being described like this before. Definitely magical.
;–)

Lays the foundation for bringing the coven back as those hatch-lings grow.

[Former Member]

2 minutes ago, Kitt said:

Lays the foundation for bringing the coven back as those hatch-lings grow.

Thinking about it now, I’m surprised they weren’t silvery blue worms…
;–)

[Reader1810]

1 minute ago, droughtquake said:

Thinking about it now, I’m surprised they weren’t silvery blue worms…
;–)

blue? I think Im missing something...

[mollyhousemouse]

13 minutes ago, Reader1810 said:

blue? I think Im missing something...

Stravor's sword & Keter's Fathril (did i spell it right?) both glowed blue 

[Reader1810]

Just now, mollyhousemouse said:

Stravor's sword & Keter's Fathril (did i spell it right?) both glowed blue 

Duh, of course. Only one of the most important elements in the story. 

[mollyhousemouse]

5 minutes ago, Reader1810 said:

Duh, of course. Only one of the most important elements in the story. 

it's ok Reader there is so much in this story you can't remember every detail

[Mikiesboy]

2 hours ago, droughtquake said:

This paragraph. It’s creepy in a way, but inventive at the same time. ‘Like tiny silver worms.’ Words have power, but I don’t think I’ve ever heard instructions being described like this before. Definitely magical.
;–)

They were real ... like real...maybe i do need to write another book....