Ozymandias

Good story, W-L. I think it is hard to develop a well-rounded picture of a character in a short story but I think I got a good idea of what makes Ben tick. That's good writing. I look forward to reading more of your work.

What a hoot! I loved every snarky word of this chapter. I hope Demented can sustain the atmosphere for a whole story because after this first chapter I'm hooked but good!

Anal Sex + NO Condoms = too stupid to live! What a shame. They survive cancer only to die from venereal disease. --The Old Microbiologist

I can understand why you had to take a break from the weekly time and effort necessary to produce a new chapter. What I can not understand is how you could simply abandon your readers, who after 34 chapters obviously had some personal investment in the story and deserved better from you. In lieu of chapter 35, could you not have published something like the explanation you just provided? I think your readers would have been supportive and wished you well and waited for the story to resume (well, I guess waiting faithfully for three years is a bit much to expect).

Some days it just doesn't pay to get out of bed.

I'm enjoying how the author has kept us in the dark about whether Gil is a man or a woman. Given that the story is in Gay Authors, i'd bet male.

How about putting a map of the entire station (if that's what it's called) in a future chapter. There have been so many buildings, paddocks, roads, etc. described by now that I have no mental image any more and feel like head is going to explode if you put in so much as a single fence post in a future chapter. Thanks in advance.

This chapter seems to be a good start for a story about two boys' adventures on the high (probably several meanings could apply to this word in this context) seas. That said, I am becoming increasing irritated by stories with word choice errors all over the place. The very first sentence of your story contains one! I nearly stopped reading right there. I assume that these idiocies are a result of your computer helpfully supplying a word it thinks you might want and you carelessly accepting it and moving on. You must proofread your chapters slowly and carefully so you can catch and correct all these errors. Your readers will thank you. -Oz

I wish I had been a fly on the wall to witness George at his aristocratic best play that old fart for a fool with every sentence! What a gem you wrote in that exchange!

It's great to see that you are well enough to resume writing new chapters of Black Widow. I'm always anxious to read more about my favorite completely dysfunctional family.

I like the story but I was appalled that a supposedly smart guy like Davey would have unprotected sex with a man who just got out of prison. Even fictional people should not be shown as that dumb.

Where can I find the listing of new chapters to existing stories that was on the right-hand side of the old format? Or is it no longer available?

Great timing, Mark You gave me something that I could actually be thankful for today. I wonder who has the sword to cut through the horrific Gordian knot your plot has created. Welcome back to my favorite GS author!.

I've complimented you on your writing in the past, but what the hell happened to proofreading your writing before submitting it for publication? This chapter is a disgrace.

I'm relieved that Andy has finally been able to tell his horrible story to sympathetic and loving hearers. You write so well that I could just hear Andy's soft, matter-of-fact voice telling each ghastly detail of his life to people who probably can not even imagine how horrific it would be to endure such treatment. I hope they were as impressed as I am with Andy' ability to find ways to survive and surmount every difficulty thrown in his path without becoming bitter or self-pitying. You have created a Mahatma, a "Great Soul" in Andy. And Mr. Stevenson better be a damn good "junk-yard dog" of a lawyer!