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Happy Birthday!

Happy birthday Gary

So far, Clem's love life seems to be following the chorus of Lookin' for Love by Johnny Lee. This says a lot, because I don't care for country music, so if I can compare his love life to a country music song, it's in a bad place. As to looking and seeing signs of love in a glance, boots leaning against each other, or the trucks parked side-by-side ... Well, we all do that. It is because Clem is looking for signs in others and making comparisons that doesn't bode well. That, and we have a narrative. Meanwhile, Nathan is getting some grief because as far as he knows, everything is copacetic.

There are enough men, straight or gay, that don't go for flamboyant attire, behavior or public displays of affection in men that Nathan's dislike of these things doesn't come across as too strange. Boston is also odd like that; don't go dressing too pretty. Nathan's most egregious action seems to be a lack of respect, and particularly for Clem at this point.

Happy Birthday!

Let me get this point straight away: I liked it and there are no bones about it. I'd be interested to know if you were you writing based on some word constriction? Or was it time? There are two things that could have used more seasoning. The development of the relationship between Barron and Revi needed fleshing out, and the story needed more science in the fiction. The addition of both of these things would have added greater depth to the story, but of the two hard science may have made the bigger difference. The addition of either or both would not have hurt the otherwise quick pacing of the story, I feel. All in, I'd have to say Cataclysmic Evolution was a good read. Thank you for writing it.

I had wondered back in chapter three if the dried out and crumbling rose was a portent of something more dire in the making. It seems that it may have been what with the discovery of the ozone having been depleted. Barron is shaping up to being a young man with some depth to him. That's a nice progression to see.

I was reading this on the Kindle app just now and I was going to send you a note about this chapter before I thought to check if the story was posted. The sense of growing fear is palpable. Good job with that very believable panic; just moments away from all out hysteria before reeling back from the tipping point. It's not an easy feat to accomplish.

Happy Birthday Lisa I wish you the bestest day ever!

Dang, you've written this family as a bunch of nincompoops. Dangerous one's, at that. The saving grace is that they remain distinct individuals with each having their own degree of idiocy. So, was the bad man finding A/S chance? It didn't seem like it. Then again, he didn't know who James was and that doesn't strike of planning either. Hmm.

That was quite an entertaining look at an isolated event. Nicely done.

I'm guessing that I'm going to need to suspend my practical thinking a bit. People know the bad man. The police allowed that the bad man 'had pull' when A/S got in trouble, and that means he was either well known or some higher up officer is complicit. A/S has already identified the man, told them where the farmhouse was and where the children were. Now the bad man has abduction, arson, illegal explosives, narcotics and murder charges (possibly more) to be laid against him. It really doesn't seem logical that any case against the bad man hinges on testimony from A/S alone, anymore. There is good delineation of the characters; everyone has a distinct personality and place in the family hierarchy. It's easy to imagine that the family cart will soon become upset and all of them will find their lives topsy-turvy. Among other things that have been done well to this point, I wanted to comment specifically on how nicely you've captured the family dynamic.

I'm with Irri in regarding Robin's penchant of teasing Kieran by playing with his emotions as being not especially flattering. My dislike of the incidents has been simmering in the background until this chapter and now I see a small resemblance to his sister in the behavior.

Happy Birthday Aditus I hope your day is as great as you are.

This may be the best chapter yet. It is as if this is where things finally begin, where Kieran really starts coming together. Everything has been leading up to it but here when he owns up to Shastan and takes the hit and in his personal thoughts, backing his interaction with Robin, here is where he starts being somebody you can really root for. The dialogue was spot on and entertaining, Sasha.

Well, hot damn! This is one hell of a great beginning, Nephylim. Yes, yes, I'm late to the party but it's not over yet ... I checked. You've set an excellent tone in this chapter and it compliments the action well.

Very nice!

There wasn't any kissing going on between the men in my family, air kiss or otherwise. Aside from my one Iranian friend in Toronto, no straight man has ever kissed me on the cheek. Nor have any of my straight friends every exhibited this behavior. I've witnessed displays of close affection between men outside of the US and certainly no one is shamed by the behavior... or even finds it remarkable, excepting maybe me the first time. I mean, I knew people behaved that way, but up until I actually saw the casualness of it... There is no substitution for experience!

I'm inclined to agree but the issue with this is, women, and for the longest time, have kissed their friends on the cheek casually in public without a care. It is something no one bats an eye at. I'm pretty sure that lesbianism isn't the first thing most people think of when seeing this behavior. On the other hand, when two guys do the same thing, gay is the first thing they think of. To add to the discussion: I moved to Boston, and to the South End, during the trailing days of the gay neighborhood. Since moving here the neighborhood has lost so many (mostly to the high cost of living in the area) gay men and lesbians. Yet, among the multitudes of baby carriages that now choke the sidewalks (and cafés), it is still possible to see men walking down the sidewalk holding hands. The odd peck on the lips between couples and the hug and air kiss prevalent among gay male friends, are both still seen. Non-sexual signs of affection should be the least of things that people should be worrying about. A quote from the lyrics of the band The Temper Trap - Sweet disposition Never too soon Oh, reckless abandon Like no one's watching you A moment of love.....

Was that walk just for a tease? Poor Marshall, getting all hot and bothered.

It's hard to argue with this. I'm sorry to hear it, too. You have a big following here on GA. All anyone has to do is look at the likes for your stories to know that, not to mention the other proofs. Have you considered going the GA Premium Content route with some stories? Or occasionally posting a preview chapter and then selling the full story as an e-book here? I don't know what would benefit you the most (not just here but anywhere) but the current situation doesn't seem tenable to you and I can certainly understand you wanting to benefit from your abilities. You should. Love you right back.

Happy Birthday Louis. Many happy returns.

That was an awful thing to have experienced. I, too, am sorry you were a witness to a horror that you had no choice in. Something like that is hard to imagine and because of that, it can be hard to come to terms with. Please, if you find at some point that you cannot cope with these feelings, seek help, as Irri suggests.

As you know, I've two of your books on my bookshelves (available here for free), and I'm not opposed to spending a few green backs for a good book, you most definitely know that, too. Also, I've purchased two anthologies in kindle format just because they contained short stories written by you. I'm enthusiastic of your writing. Because of the aforementioned, I find your remark about interest declining when money is mentioned slightly disturbing. It implies that all is well and good as long as it's free but from the forum thread pertaining to the crowd source idea, if we take people at their word, we learn that isn't the whole reason. Some weren't interested in the subject matter and some others were simply unable financially to participate despite having an interest. So, I'm thinking the remark was made out of frustration, and I hope that you don't actually feel this way.

Oh heck, what's a holiday without a modicum of confusion? You did a great job of keeping this upbeat even when the MC wasn't feeling it. Nice.