Ron

How do you do this thing you do so well. That's rhetorical, but you do it so well!

You know what . . . glad to have ya back! My partners luggage went missing once and showed up days afterward. When it finally showed up . . . His underwear was missing!

Good thing you started a forum thread because I missed this originally. Carringtonrj states the facts very well. I can't disagree. I feel it also adds to the larger story, it's not just a little something extra, it's an important moment.

A deeply moving story that makes a strong appeal to the heart. I like your use of the two kangaroos as talismans of faith and protection and love. That these ideals can be passed on makes the story compelling. You've written a fine story DynoReads.

K.C. - what you did to me: I sensed it coming and was sucked in anyway. I could almost grieve for them both. Stop that!! Well done, sir.

Big Moshe likes to touch and quick Lisco likes to be forward and invalid Miah really wants to be the filling in the middle even while making excuses. What to do; what to do? You had me chuckling with the back and forth banter and the nurse's shenanigans--and again a few times throughout--but the beginning also helped to define their personalities well. I did not go back and re-read the first story and I felt that this let me settle into the tale nicely. The electronic gadgetry was neat and did not overtax the imagination - basically, an extension of what we have now. There is a lot going on this getting to know each other chapter of their lives. We learn bits and pieces about all of them and it holds a person's interest. Good descriptive elements - I especially like the flower that smells like everyone's favorite scent. I'd like one of those. I'd also like to know just what that scent is? - There are so many. I get the sense that Moshe and Lisco truly are alien in the way you capture their disconnection from the human condition while at the same time capturing what may be the best part of it. It makes them just odd enough (aside from their true likeness) to be from someplace else. Miah, on the other hand, is very human indeed. I like your story very much Cia. I look forward to its continuation.

You've done a fine thing with this fourth perspective Aditus. The single line thoughts were inspired background to the further narrative behind them. Maya's bombardment of ideas are very much an over-thinking person's agitation personified - you do it yourself or let someone else do it for you; either way, it feels right. The uncertainty about anything and everything between Paul and Sam felt honest, and their dialogue followed through on those feelings. That little voice of doubt that you let creep in - here and there - reflected good reason for it. I was very glad that Paul found the strength to do what he knew was best and that Sam realized it was also right for him. Soft humor at the end was a nice touch. Well done!

Welcome. A blank page is where you begin. You're right, there is much to enjoy on GA.

From Z to A, I'm reading in reverse order this time around. Shake things up a bit. Edit: Whoever designed the anthology story banner did a great job!

Dave, you've really done yourself proud up to this point. I am looking forward to the continuation of your tale. I think you passed the no incest for tittilation clause in the first couple of chapters, so I'm not going to touch on it anymore. You have passed that hurdle with flying colors. Bravo! I've said it before . . . Keep 'em coming!

Nice story Wayne.

Thanks for the review Andrew. I'm glad you were able to make a connection.

Hi Miggy, welcome. The more you participate the more you will get out of GA.

Well, hello Allie from Texas. Welcome to GA. You may enjoy the Friday Prompts from Comicfan. Erin, welcome, and you have found just the right place to read. There are so many good authors.

That's it? I'm caught up? Crap! I join Cole in saying I'm addicted. Wonderful story Sasha.

I enjoyed this chapter very much. Erin's confession does explain his more confident moments but it's good that Luke doesn't see it as a game changer in their budding relationship. I say I enjoyed this chapter but I should say that I have enjoyed each and every one. The story has a warmhearted tone overall at this point and there is a tenderness that doesn't fall into sentimentality. Really, quite excellent writing.

The person that chomps their gum open-mouthed is likely to chew their food the same way. Eww! On topic: Probably not a good time to chomp gum when in front of an authority figure. Such as the police officer pointing his gun at you for gross behavior in public. Chewing sugarless gum (with mouth closed) does have dental benefits.

Welcome to GA, Onefitzall.

Yes, Irritable1 is right, that's intense. I wish you well in making your decisions.

Ha-ha-ha-ha-ha!!! You sure went over-the-top with this post, hh5. Did you leave anything out?

It's like they say . . . He doth protest too much, therefore, he must resemble the thing he doth protest! Jeremy could have played that off as a joke, but then we'd have a different story. No, sir!

Sasha, you have done that thing you do so well . . . captured my attention, yet again.

I can see where that telepathy would come in real handy like, and so does Abel III. At least, he is using his ability in a reasoned way, and good thing. I liked the analogy between silencing and being made sightless; after discovering the ability, that is exactly what it must seem like, I'm sure. Keep em coming, Dave!

It doesn't seem that Abel III is bored, bored, bored anymore. He has plenty to occupy his mind. You've made a good case for him being a responsible young man and one might presume the data-dump and the subsequent mind links would have a way of reinforcing responsibility. After that shower scene and that kind of sexual adventure . . . Well, he's awake now, isn't he? Explaining the processing of the data-dump was well thought out and the linking, at least the human part, was highly plausible. The explanation of how a mental link with the computer was made and how, needed more polish in the reasoning or technicality of it. On the other hand, how Able III brought in his Grandfather and partner to the link once it was established was accomplished well. Perhaps the telekinesis is part of the reasoning, although that hasn't been noted as such--still this part of his ability is exciting. Another fine chapter, DDK.

It could be argued that the discussion concerning same sex relationships between consenting adults who happen to be related is moot, that is, if the issues of power, control, force or obligation have been disproved. Since none of these issues seem to be a defining factor, I can't see any reason to be repulsed by it. You have created a solid, believable foundation for your story, DDK. I look forward to reading the rest of it.