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Return to The Underground
jaysalmn commented on Aceinthehole's story chapter in Return to The Underground
I've been really getting into this story, but if ur going back to the whole underground racing thing I'm out. All the ridiculousness with the racing and the guns is why I quit reading the last one. -
Chapter 14 - A little piece of heaven
jaysalmn commented on Avangelion's story chapter in Chapter 14 - A little piece of heaven
So happy to see a new chapter! Anikin is pulling out all the stops, isn't he? I still don't believe him as far as the hotel subject goes. If I were Dominic, I would confirm the story with Tamaki before getting too comfortable. At least Anikin knows he has A LOT of work to do to regain Dominic's trust, and I'm happy that Dominic isn't the type to just forgive and forget at the drop of a hat. Great chapter and, as always, looking forward to reading more! -
99.9% of the chapter was great! Then Zac had to turn into a grade A prick! I hope to hell Adrian fucks him over again, because he more than deserves it! If I were Austin, I'd never speak to the asshole again!
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Well, that definitely wasn't the chapter that I had expected. I find myself asking more questions and disliking just about every character besides Tracy. I don't blame him one bit for leaving. His so-called friends treated him like shit and turned their backs on him...AND HE DIDN'T EVEN DO ANYTHING WRONG!! The biggest disappointment was Callen. I hate to sound heartless, but what goes around comes around and Callen got his dose of karma. Wtf with Alex all of a sudden having a toddler??? Its like I'm reading a totally different story. I hope to hell Tracy is EXTREMELY careful with forgiving people. They treated him like shit with no reason, and really none of them deserve forgiveness. I also hope that he calls them all out too!
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Great chapter! I absolutely love Austin. It was nice to get some backstory on him from his mother. He's a great guy, and Zac would be lucky to have him. I agree that Zac has to prove to Austin that he wants something more than just to be his subject for an article. I hope he earns that trust from Austin and doesn't fuck it up. Very surprised about Billy and Lonnie. I have a lot of respect for Billy for waiting to go all the way until its with someone he loves. As always, looking forward to reading more!!
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Loved this chapter! Zac and Austin are sooo cute together. Pretty obvious if Zac's teammates notice. That kiss at the end....omg MY heart was fluttering!! Lol!! I'm hoping that Zac had made a mistake and that maybe Austin is his door number three.
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Brett Gets a New Boyfriend
jaysalmn commented on jkwsquirrel's story chapter in Brett Gets a New Boyfriend
I would have to agree that Brett's mother definitely knew what was going on before she got home. She can't be a doctor and not know. I'm happy for Brett and Billy, but they have so many issues and secrets to work through. I hope Billy calling Brett Anthony at the end of the chapter means he has some sort of clue that Brett buys drugs from Max. I also worry about Dustin's situation with the new neighbor. The guy seems very sketchy, and poor Dustin is just begging for attention and love from anyone at this point! A lot for u to clear up -
I'm very surprised that nothing has been said to Alan and Lisa's parents about what happened. I agree that maybe they will be a big help as far as Craig's parents. I'm starting to get the feeling that Peter is more on the selfish, self centered side. All he's been trying to do this chapter is to find someone to dump the kids on. I understand he wants time with Alan, but with this situation kids come first. Not the best side of Peter.
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Wow! That was a drama filled ending to the chapter! Loved every minute of it!! I really enjoyed the way u exposed Sasha as the evil bitch she really is! So many questions that need to be answered after her rant. What's the deal with Callen? Callen and Jase? Was Alex really with Trace because he couldn't have Callen? Omg, I'm overflowing with curiosity!! I'll just be over here sitting on pins and needles waiting for the next chapter! Lol!
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Well, this chapter had a great twist with Austin. I totally agree with Jimmy. Zac is just gonna end up getting hurt with Adrian. Zac needs to close that door, padlock it, nail it, then brick over it! Lol! Adrian is a lost cause, living in his own self centered world. I do, however, like Austin. The fact that he's so shy is cute. I also like the way Zac was flirting with him. I'm keeping my fingers crossed on this one!
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Liked the chapter. I agree that Billy's dad might have already figured out who Billy was talking about. I like the conversations when its just Billy and his dad. If Billy would listen instead of jumping to his own conclusions, I think he'd learn a lot more from their talks. I still wanna kno what Amanda was talking about when she told Billy a couple chapters ago that they make enough money off of Brett. Drugs is the only thing I could think of and was kinda hoping Billy would have found something when he was looking around Brett's room. As always, looking forward to reading more!
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For me personally, this was one of the best chapters yet! I kno I've kinda talked Jackson's friends down in past reviews, but they have definitely redeemed themselves in how they so quickly accepted Jackson and Luke's relationship without even having to think about it. Even Ally seemed to have realized how she's been acting. Very ironic how the kids seem to be growing and maturing and Cindy seems to be regressing. No big shocker there. The church going, god loving people are usually the meanest, most hypocritical. I hope Henry went up one side and down the other with her. No excuse for her actions or what she said to Jackson's parents. A horrible person all the way around! That being said, as always, I look forward to reading more!
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Well, that was a disappointing "date". I think Zac is looking at this situation all wrong. What if Omari is Zac's door number 3?? I was disappointed in Zac for leaving Omari and Irene just standing there in the middle of the mall. I feel really bad for Omari. He chose to want to date Zac, and he gets a slap in the face. He doesn't owe Adrian a damn thing. He doesn't deserve to be hurt and jealous! For what?? He made his asshole descision to stay away because of his daddy. I still say Zac should move on. That aside, I thought Billy's reaction to Omari and how he was acting around him was hilarious! Billy is a very comical character. Personally, much more likeable than Zac is at this point.
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Wow! What a sad and happy story all rolled into one! I was always rooting for Ben and Jake to get back together. The sad part was Richard, Lee and the kids were collateral damage. Neither Ben nor Jake could be blamed considering the circumstances. Great story!!
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What a great, dramatic scene! I love that Ryan stood up for himself. Too many stories have the character just lying there being a doormat. It had to have taken a lot to do what Brady did. I have a lot of respect for him, although I think he totally deserved the fist to the chin! Lol! I hope we hear more about Ryan and Brady.
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Good, although frustrating chapter. What the hell is Elli doing anyway? Is he fucking with Tyler's head on purpose?? I hope this is where Tyler finally gets the chance to get all of the hurt, anger, and frustration out. I, for one, wouldn't even be giving Elli the time of day at this point.
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Great chapter! I'm so happy that Zac's parents were ok with Billy and Lonnie. Also glad that going back to school went way better than he imagined. I'm looking forward to movie night. I like Irene and Omari is definitely crushing on Zac. So, Marty is a complete moron! In so many words he told Zac not to give up on Adrian. So how long is Zac supposed to wait for Adrian to grow a pair and stand up to his father?? 2 months? 4 months? 5 years? 10 years?? Has Marty never heard of the old saying "don't beat a dead horse?" Zac is doing the right thing by closing that small chapter and moving on to find someone that isn't afraid to be who they are.
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I hate to admit it, but I agree with Amanda. Even though she bullies Dustin, she's still protective over him when it comes to others. I agree that Billy treats Dustin like his number 2, inky hanging around with him when Brett isn't around. I feel bad for Dustin and think Billy is an ass for treating his so called best friend that way. For me, Billy isn't as likeable in this round as he was in the last ones.
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I, too, am happy it was just a dream. I actually quit reading it and read the comments to find out it was just a dream.
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Omg, what a great chapter!!!! I'm so happy that Alex and Tracy are finally on the same page! Now what to do about that bitch Sasha!!
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I hope Alex didn't actually say it to be an asshole, but I'm guessing he really didn't kno it was Callen's brother that made the sculpture. I can understand how Tracy could take it that way tho, with their history and all. I think Tracy should absolutely tell Callen about Sasha ASAP! From the sound of it, everybody knows she's a megabitch! Tracy would have everyone to back up what he's saying. I'm kinda surprised that Callen would fall for that anyway. He pretty much saw how she was treating Tracy. That alone would have pissed me off if I had been Callen. Maybe something for Tracy to confront him with.
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Great start! I love that Tracy and Callen are so close. What can I say about Alex except WOW!! Ur description of him definitely got my attention. Seems like he's changed a lot, and fortunately for the better. Can't help but notice that Alex was maybe checking Tracy out when they were reintroduced. Can't wait to read more!!
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Great chapter! I'm so happy that Zac has come to the realization that he is the same sweet, big hearted person he always has been...just gay. I also agree with him that Adrian can go to hell! I'd be mad as hell about that whole situation too. Who the hell needs someone that's gonna leave u holding the bag when its their fault ur there in the first place??
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Omg, Dustin's world is so heartbreaking! I feel so bad about what he has to go through day after day, and how he's treated by his whole family. No child deserves that, and definitely not Dustin. I nearly cried when he told Billy he was the only one who loves him. A great, but very sad chapter.
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Great chapter! Glad that the principal was lenient on Zac. Have to say I have a lot of respect for Zac. If it would have been me, I would have enjoyed seeing Kenny's dream crushed. He more than deserved it. I did find enjoyment in the fact that Kenny's own teammates didn't defend him. So happy that Zac has such a good support system.
