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So far, I totally hate Elli! I think Tys deserves to beat him to a pulp! Tys has a lot more patience than I do, because I would totally be out of there in a heartbeat! Elli doesn't deserve Tys friendship.
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I feel so bad for Dustin. I wonder if his dad really physically abuses him. I hope he was telling the truth when he claimed to have misspoke. Unfortunately, if it brought him to tears what's going on must be something big. I guess I have more sympathy for Dustin, because he's emotional and confiding in Billy, instead of treating everyone like shit like Brett is doing. Will be interesting to see how bowling goes!
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What a fitting last sentence. Seems like everything in David's world is all about him. How Mike can deal with someone as needy and self centered as David is beyond me. I still say he deserves what happens when we get to the prologue part.
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Chapter 18 A Day of Reckoning
jaysalmn commented on Headstall's story chapter in Chapter 18 A Day of Reckoning
Wow! What a chapter! I agree with everyone else as far as not feeling sorry for Tobyn. I once thought it was because he was under so much pressure as far as the pack goes. I now realize Tobyn is a self centered ass. Even though they're earth mates, Kellar deserves better than a man-child that only cares about his own feelings. Good thing Kellar brought his truck. I would load up and haul ass out of there if I were him! -
Wow! I never saw that coming! All that work that Tys went through to get everything ready, and this is his reward?? So Elli lied when he said he would come back for Tys. I, for one, would be walking in the other direction if I were him!
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Great chapter! The way Peter described the other jocks was entertaining. There's not much that doesn't turn on a horny teenager! Lol! The locker room after was pretty hot! Still loving these two! Can't wait to read more!
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I feel bad for Jackson losing his scholarship, but I honestly think the fact that everything is no longer just being handed to him on a platter is humbling him and making him a more likeable person. I also like the fact that he's taking Luke's support instead of pushing him away. I always thought I would never like Jackson, but he's slowly breaking down that wall. Just so he continues his becoming a more respectful young man.
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Wow! What a change from the summer. I know Brett is going through something, but I'm surprised that he's being an asshole to Billy, of all people. Billy definitely doesn't deserve the treatment he's getting from Brett. Maybe Billy needs to take a break from Brett and spend some time with Dustin. I would feel bad if a friend was going through something, however I wouldn't stand there and just take beimg treated like shit. Looks like Cold Winter is gonna be drama filled. Can't wait to read more!
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Pretty good chapter overall. Its surprising that Mariah went from trying to hit Will to being his friend, yet Jeremy went from what seemed to be a nice guy to a major asshole. So far I've liked the series, but for me personally the whole sex slave thing going on between Will and Jeremy kind of turns me off on the story.
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Oh, what are we gonna do with Tobyn?! Frustrated, angry and conflicted and lashing out at poor Kellar. I think Kellar made a very valid point that maybe part of Tobyn's anger had to do with feeling like Elinor was replacing his father. I think part of it also is the fact that Denver ended up being her mate, then Tobyn looks at himself and Kellar and sees the similarities. I ahree that Tobyn is a very stubborn guy, but I have faith that Kellar will break through that wall and make Tobyn see that they are earth mates! Boy, Kellar has his work cut out for him! Lol!
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Brett saves the day! So happy Billy's dad thought of calling Brett and his mother to let them kno what happened! Was a tear jerker when he showed up and Billy let go with the tears. Sometimes that's all it takes is the right person to let it all out. Can't wait for the next part of the series!!
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What a wonderful, but sad story. Had a feeling Damien wasnt "real". He was correct when he told Matthew he'd see him again. Now they're connected forever.
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Great chapter! Gotta love these two! Just the way Kevin describes Parker coming through the door is entertainment all in itself! Lol!
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Poor Billy! Yeah, I kno something happening to his grandma was inevitable, but its still sad nonetheless. Brett's mother picked the wrong time to take him on vacation. Billy is just devastated and he'll really need Brett.
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That had to be one of the best make out chapters I've ever read! These two definitely have it bad for each other. Was cute when Parker asked him to call the next day instead of waiting. Kinda lets Kevin kno that Parker is more like him than he thinks. Again, great chapter!
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Omg, Kevin sooo reminds me of myself at that age! The hesitation to not be the first one to call, writing down what I might wanna say before I do call. I can totally identify with him on that! Lol! The kiss at the end was pretty intense! I'm glad Kevin did that!
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Hey there Comicality, really enjoyed the first three chapters! I think Kevin and Parker are so adorable! Can't wait to see how their relationship develops!
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Chapter 11 - Thank God Friday
jaysalmn commented on Luiz's story chapter in Chapter 11 - Thank God Friday
Way to go Nick!!! Great chapter! Was so sweet that Nick made Peter promise that they would always be friends first. I enjoy these two so much. They have so much love to give, and are so worried about losing each other. I think how things played out was great, and they both confessed that they loved each other! Again, great chapter and looking forward to more!! -
Ok, so I have totally lost ALL respect for David. When he was telling Emily about him being a drunken asshole the night before, he lied right to her face when he said he didn't kno about the party. Rain had let it slip about the party at the bar after David's interview. The more we're getting into this story, the less I'm liking David.
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What a great chapter. It really warmed my heart to read about all the love and friendship these guys share. The hand holding and the hugs all around was just wonderful. The story about Mikey's dad's friend was a tear jerker. I think his parents have an idea just how close he and Jay are, otherwise I don't think the conversation would have taken place. I loved the swinging game, and that everyone participated. Its kinda nice to act like a kid again!
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Chapter 10 - After class practice
jaysalmn commented on Luiz's story chapter in Chapter 10 - After class practice
A very deep chapter. I love how touchy feely they are, yet still afraid to say anything about their feelings. The end with th laying in the grass, Peter laying his head on Nick while they rest was so sweet. The sprinklers going off was a funny add! -
Chapter 9 - Will Nick come over?
jaysalmn commented on Luiz's story chapter in Chapter 9 - Will Nick come over?
Another great chapter! I enjoyed their afternoon movie watching. U can have lots of intimacy without actually having sex, and Peter and Nick were definitely in that zone. -
Great chapter! Glad that Billy and his dad had that talk and Billy was able to get rid of some of what was weighing him down. Unfortunate how the whole thing started tho! Lol! I think I would have been mortified at that age being caught jacking off by either of my parents!
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Chapter 8 - Starting a normal week
jaysalmn commented on Luiz's story chapter in Chapter 8 - Starting a normal week
Omg, what are we gonna do with these two?! Lol! I think its sooo adorable how hard they're both trying to not let the other know about their feelings. I, too, am excited about the BIG MOMENT, but the lead up to it is great! -
Well, just came across ur story yesterday ahd have been loving it up until Parker found Nathan. As far as I'm concerned, if my partner needs more than me to keep him satisfied, he knows where the door is. Very disappointing that I had to read almost 37 chapters before I was turned off on the story.
