Andrew Q Gordon Posted February 6, 2011 Author Posted February 6, 2011 Ah, then maybe Jason should move in with Peter! Probably much cheaper to split that rent anyways. Jason can sublet his room w/ Darryl until Dean gets to college, then he can have it. That is, if Jason can handle living on the "rough side" of town No comment - on what happens next. Sorry - you can't trick me that easily.
Andrew Q Gordon Posted February 6, 2011 Author Posted February 6, 2011 I really love that you held us in suspense with Peter being in the coma for so many chapters (I think 5?), but I did have one problem with that. In some chapters a few months could go by, but in these 5 only 4 days passed. I completely understand that the choice is up to the author and that no "rule" has been broken or anything by manipulating how time passes, but I am curious as to why you didn't just make his coma last two months or something so to keep the pace (of the linear story time, your pacing with the story itself is perfect) similar throughout? That might not make much since, but I'm not griping- just curious. And this story makes me want a boyfriend pretty badly. I don't think I kept to a time line - or better said, I didn't plan it that way. There were places where I would have two or three chapters devoted to a day or two - then skip two or three months between chapters. What controlled the pace was essentially conflict - interesting conflict or the lack thereof. So where there were things to write about that were moving the story forward, I would use however many chapters I needed, and when it would get redundant, I skipped them. I think when I was planning this out, I had a vision that this would encompass about a year and a half give or take. I wanted to include certain aspects - holidays apart while Jason was in the closet, being outed, summer apart and the temptation [Ethan] that entailed, a new school year, the assault - and so forth. [the so forth being what is still to come - Sorry Sara, no hints here either lol] To my mind - it made more sense that not everything would happen in a few weeks or even a few months. To me, saying I love takes a while. It took me and my partner 6 months before we said to each other. that was a bit over 15 years ago. I also think it is silly to expect everything will happen - being outed, mom and her classes, the attack, etc, in a few weeks. I wanted to give the characters some life to develop them away from the conflicts in the hopes folks would relate to them better. As to the other side, why didn't I skip some time between attack and recovery, IDK. This seemed the right amount of time - enough to show the effect on Jason, Peter's family, the reaction of Jason's family - .i.e. Dean, his friends while at the same time not just having him pop up in a day and say all is better. I did a bit of math - the first almost year when by in 24 chapters. The next week took 12 and counting to tell. The attack, it's affect etc, was the main focus of the story, we are starting to deal with the affect and that will be where it wraps up. Sorry if that was a long answer to a short question, but I wanted to give you better insight into the thought that went into this. Anyta and I bounced around a few things before settling on the end and while I think she is amazing, I begrudgingly admit she is not infallible so maybe we got some of it wrong. IDK. So far, I am happy with how it has come out and the response to it, but then again, I am not finished so I have time to screw it up I suppose. Thanks for the question, it made me really think about the 'why' that went into this. Andy
thephoenix Posted February 8, 2011 Posted February 8, 2011 I really like the story so far! I have a feeling Jason is going to want to help Peter in some way financially, but Peter is probably not going to like it... I hope the money thing isn't going to be a sticking issue with them. Money is supposed to make life easier! 1
Frostina Posted February 8, 2011 Posted February 8, 2011 I have a feeling Jason is going to want to help Peter in some way financially, but Peter is probably not going to like it... I hope the money thing isn't going to be a sticking issue with them. Money is supposed to make life easier! lol Phoenix... so true.. The chip on Peter's Shoulder... *sigh* I really really hope Jase and Pete don't 'fight' over this matter again!!! however, Jason's known to have handled money issues with Pete well in the past (like with the Grandparents' cheque who can forget the AWESOME argument he had put up.. lol ). so I wish Jase all the luck in the world in trying to deal with this situation as we all know he will.. :) 1
Andrew Q Gordon Posted February 8, 2011 Author Posted February 8, 2011 I really like the story so far! I have a feeling Jason is going to want to help Peter in some way financially, but Peter is probably not going to like it... I hope the money thing isn't going to be a sticking issue with them. Money is supposed to make life easier! No comment - well not until I comment in a chapter soon to be released. lol Phoenix... so true.. The chip on Peter's Shoulder... *sigh* I really really hope Jase and Pete don't 'fight' over this matter again!!! however, Jason's known to have handled money issues with Pete well in the past (like with the Grandparents' cheque who can forget the AWESOME argument he had put up.. lol ). so I wish Jase all the luck in the world in trying to deal with this situation as we all know he will.. :) Chip?? What Chip??? [Note the INCREDIBLY OLD electronics. Sadly I had one of each of those in my day.] As for the money comment see above.
Frostina Posted February 8, 2011 Posted February 8, 2011 Chip?? What Chip??? [Note the INCREDIBLY OLD electronics. Sadly I had one of each of those in my day.] LMAO Andy! 1
Andrew Q Gordon Posted February 9, 2011 Author Posted February 9, 2011 Chapter 38 is up a bit early - am likely to be really busy tomorrow so I am posting it tonight. Here's the link: Chapter 38: For Richer or For Poorer Hopefully this answers a few question about what Jason is going to do.
KevinD Posted February 9, 2011 Posted February 9, 2011 Hmmn...just keeping us off balance huh Andy? At first I couldn't believe the lecture from Royce about frivolous spending...huh? Haven't seen evidence of Jase wasting money in the story, but then it all worked out to be not so bad... Peter, another small but happy surprise. Not nearly the bad scene I had been expecting. Now let's see what you can do Andy to give us a really nice romantic first Christmas for the guys... ;-) 1
KevinD Posted February 9, 2011 Posted February 9, 2011 I've tried that setting both ways and no matter what, something does not work when you're posting to the story with a direct chapter review or trying to post to the forum. One will work, but not both... This message response was composed in Pages! Then copy/pasted in here... 1
MikeL Posted February 9, 2011 Posted February 9, 2011 Thanks for chapter 38, Andy. I'm glad Peter was willing to accept Jason's assistance. Their past disagreements about money were a real drag on a beautiful relationship. 1
Benji Posted February 9, 2011 Posted February 9, 2011 Chapter 38 is up a bit early - am likely to be really busy tomorrow so I am posting it tonight. Here's the link: Chapter 38: For Richer or For Poorer Hopefully this answers a few question about what Jason is going to do. ............................................ Hummm! I was a bit put off by Royce's reaction then assumed that it was only for character and not a monetary thing. Jason won big time there, I'm sure even his mother (surprisingly) would agree here. Pete's reaction was a bit different then I expected, I had thought he would be stubborn, but Jason did not have to sway him much as he realized that Jason was doing it beyond a pity mode. I was surprised at Peter's recovery, I thought there was mention that he might be paralyzed and for him to basically walk out of the hospital puzzled me. Oh, well there is still the grandparent thing I still see the chariot there, that aside we still have the hooligans that attacked Peter, expelled but not forgotten?? Great chapter, look forward to more!! 1
Andrew Q Gordon Posted February 9, 2011 Author Posted February 9, 2011 Hmmn...just keeping us off balance huh Andy? At first I couldn't believe the lecture from Royce about frivolous spending...huh? Haven't seen evidence of Jase wasting money in the story, but then it all worked out to be not so bad... Peter, another small but happy surprise. Not nearly the bad scene I had been expecting. Now let's see what you can do Andy to give us a really nice romantic first Christmas for the guys... ;-) No promises on Christmas, but I will see what I can do for the boys. Thanks for chapter 38, Andy. I'm glad Peter was willing to accept Jason's assistance. Their past disagreements about money were a real drag on a beautiful relationship. Agreed, money is great but it can also be the bane of peoples relationships. Hopefully it won't be the bane of this one. ............................................ Hummm! I was a bit put off by Royce's reaction then assumed that it was only for character and not a monetary thing. Jason won big time there, I'm sure even his mother (surprisingly) would agree here. Pete's reaction was a bit different then I expected, I had thought he would be stubborn, but Jason did not have to sway him much as he realized that Jason was doing it beyond a pity mode. I was surprised at Peter's recovery, I thought there was mention that he might be paralyzed and for him to basically walk out of the hospital puzzled me. Oh, well there is still the grandparent thing I still see the chariot there, that aside we still have the hooligans that attacked Peter, expelled but not forgotten?? Great chapter, look forward to more!! Jason is not as dense as some folks think. He is no rocket scientist that is for sure and maybe he isn't a smart as Peter, but his heart is in the right place and that helps in many situations. You have not seen the end of Ray and Flora Henry, B-man. Promise. As for the paralysis - when he was admitted it was unknown if he would be affected, evidently he was not. I'm no doctor so I can't say why or why not, only that he is expected to make a full recovery with only minor permanent effects. Thanks to you three for the post and for reading. Andy
Frostina Posted February 9, 2011 Posted February 9, 2011 See?? what did i say about Jason putting up a good argument about money that even Pete couldn't refute.. His heart being at the right place helped... Christmas is definitely something i'm looking forward to Andy! :) Oh, and Ray and Flora are gonna come back into the picture?? THAT should be interesting!! :P Oh and ESPNbar Darryl!! PS. for some reason, i couldn't post my review... so... 1
Nephylim Posted February 9, 2011 Posted February 9, 2011 As for the paralysis - when he was admitted it was unknown if he would be affected, evidently he was not. I'm no doctor so I can't say why or why not, only that he is expected to make a full recovery with only minor permanent effects. Andy In 1997 I broke 3 bones in my back and it was mentioned that I might be wheelchair bound but I wasn't. It took a fair time to recover though. The pain was almost unbearable for a few weeks and after that it took months before I was pretty much back to normal. I still have to be careful, just one wrong turn and I'm out of commission for a week or so. 1
Kavrik Posted February 11, 2011 Posted February 11, 2011 Agreed, money is great but it can also be the bane of peoples relationships. Hopefully it won't be the bane of this one. The kind of confusion regarding relationships that Andy hinted at above always happens when their lawyer doesn't fill out the form above properly. 1
Frostina Posted February 11, 2011 Posted February 11, 2011 The kind of confusion regarding relationships that Andy hinted at above always happens when their lawyer doesn't fill out the form above properly. AWESOME Karvik!! :) :) 1
Andrew Q Gordon Posted February 12, 2011 Author Posted February 12, 2011 Chapter 39: BackTo Where It Began is up. Sadly the last 3-4 chapters are a struggle for me, maybe I don't want it to end or maybe I was just preoccupied. Not that I have anything important going on in my life,. Anyway, luckily I have the next 5 written and ready to go, so hopefully during my vacation I finish writing it so there is no lag time in posting. Enjoy.
Andrew Q Gordon Posted February 12, 2011 Author Posted February 12, 2011 The kind of confusion regarding relationships that Andy hinted at above always happens when their lawyer doesn't fill out the form above properly. Lawyer? :wacko: Burn them all!! Too F'ing funny Mike.
Nephylim Posted February 12, 2011 Posted February 12, 2011 less od the 'little people' bitch. Are you suggesting that being Hosted will change me... (Sarcasm alert ) Well... it might help my plans for taking over the world but it won't make me a better evil overlord 1
Andrew Q Gordon Posted February 13, 2011 Author Posted February 13, 2011 less od the 'little people' bitch. Are you suggesting that being Hosted will change me... (Sarcasm alert ) Well... it might help my plans for taking over the world but it won't make me a better evil overlord Nephy, I am suggestion nothing other than we all live in your shadow and aspire to the same heights as you achieve. As for world domination, I don't see how having you as an evil overlord could make things any worse, so I am all for giving you a 'second shot' [Has to make this semi relevant no?] Andy
Andrew Q Gordon Posted February 14, 2011 Author Posted February 14, 2011 Just figured I would let you all know I am hard at work finishing the last remaining chapters and to give you some thing to look forward to. I am writing chapter 45 now, and unlike the previous 44 chapters, this one, the next one and the last one will all contain what are for me at least - some rather vivid sex scenes. Hopefully they will not offend anyone, and even more hopefully people will like them.
Andrew Q Gordon Posted February 16, 2011 Author Posted February 16, 2011 After being reminded by someone in Chat yesterday that today was Wednesday, I nearly forgot to post chapter 40 Chapter 40: Subpeonas Under ten chapters to go, time is running out for you to make your comments and have your say before I post the final chapter. Andy
MikeL Posted February 16, 2011 Posted February 16, 2011 I really enjoyed chapter 40, Andy. I liked all the legal discussion you sneaked in there. It seems things are settling down to a new normal for Jason and Peter. 1
Andrew Q Gordon Posted February 18, 2011 Author Posted February 18, 2011 I really enjoyed chapter 40, Andy. I liked all the legal discussion you sneaked in there. It seems things are settling down to a new normal for Jason and Peter. Snuck in??? Oh my, next chapter, I'm gonna have to hit you like a sledge hammer if you think that's sneaky. As for settling down? Really? Okay, I'll buy that - for now.
Andrew Q Gordon Posted February 19, 2011 Author Posted February 19, 2011 Chapter 41: Grand Jury is alive and posted. As I mention in the chapter note, this one has the character most like me - Martin. For those of you with vivid imaginations, this is fairly typical of the speech I give to witnesses before we interview them. Not saying everyone does the same but this is how I would talk to witnesses. There would be a bit more, but this was enough for purposes of the story. Let me know what you think. Andy
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