Irritable1 Posted December 4, 2014 Author Posted December 4, 2014 (edited) Ok, it's time for me quit dawdling on the side of the pool and jump in... when I next post here, it will be with something for you folks to critique... Edited December 4, 2014 by Irritable1 2
Percy Posted December 7, 2014 Posted December 7, 2014 Fruity Berry me, merry me, black, red or blue Old vine me, fine wine me, pour nothing new Some peach trees, some pear trees, either will suit In pantries, on pastries, fruit for a fruit Tum-Ti-Ti, Tum-Ti-Ti, Tum-Ti-Ti-Tum Ti-Tum-Ti, Ti-Tum-Ti, Tum-Ti-Ti-Tum Ti-Tum-Ti, Ti-Tum-Ti, Tum-Ti-Ti-Tum Ti-Tum-Ti, Ti-Tum-Ti, Tum-Ti-Ti-Tum Working from Wikipedia, the best I could figure is I’ve turned out a trimeter poem wherein each line has two feet in amphibrach trisyllables followed by a choriambic tetrasyllable foot. Couplets with 1-2 and 3-4. There is an exception to the pattern in the first line which has dactyls instead of amphibrachs. Poetry may just require a level of discipline and conformity that's not in my nature. 3
Irritable1 Posted December 8, 2014 Author Posted December 8, 2014 (edited) Hey, I've got no complaints The prompt said regular meter and that's more or less what you've got. It's so musical you've actually written a waltzing rhyme! I think you did a great job! the best I could figure is I’ve turned out a trimeter poem wherein each line has two feet in amphibrach trisyllables followed by a choriambic tetrasyllable foot. Sure, I'll take that Edited December 8, 2014 by Irritable1 2
Percy Posted December 8, 2014 Posted December 8, 2014 Hey, I've got no complaints The prompt said regular meter and that's more or less what you've got. It's so musical you've actually written a waltzing rhyme! I think you did a great job! Sure, I'll take that Ha. They say a little knowledge is a dangerous thing. Wikipedia is just that - a little knowledge. I'm totally into these poetry prompts. Thank for pulling this one together, Irri! 2
Irritable1 Posted December 15, 2014 Author Posted December 15, 2014 (edited) Gosh this one hurt! Sooo, I'm responding to my own poetry prompt a full 12 days after I posted it.... disgraceful! Mashed Potatoes Waxy or mealy? With garlic or chives? Flayed in the strainer, they yield me their eyes. Salt’s in the water, the butter is warm; Starting the timer; they splash and are gone! Following Percy's fine example above, I got a little fancy, and went with two dactyls and something I now know is called a choriamb finishing off each line. And a little slant rhyme, because I like it Edited December 15, 2014 by Irritable1 4
totallyy Posted December 24, 2014 Posted December 24, 2014 meter is rough. the theme rougher. it'll take some time for me to get it going. 2
Irritable1 Posted December 24, 2014 Author Posted December 24, 2014 meter is rough. the theme rougher. it'll take some time for me to get it going. Hey, ditch the theme if you need to for the greater good. 1
totallyy Posted December 26, 2014 Posted December 26, 2014 (edited) I sat myself down and made myself work on it. It's 2 4-line verses. Hey, ditch the theme if you need to for the greater good. I tried my best to keep to the theme, but like always I put my own spin on it. Just in time for the holidays too, you know, cheer and merriment. https://www.gayauthors.org/story/totallyy/rhymes/9 Oh and the stresses, I just emphasised the possibly problematic ones below considering i might have an uncommon accent. ; . ; . ; . ; . Fire ; . . ; . ; . ; . ; . ; . ; . ; . ; . . ; . ; . ; . ; . ; . ; . ; . sours ; . . ; . ; . ; . ; . ; . ; . ; . Past, fatigue devours ; . . ; . ; . ; . Edited December 26, 2014 by totallyy 2
Irritable1 Posted December 26, 2014 Author Posted December 26, 2014 Pretty freakin' amazing! I'm wishing now I hadn't made the theme so prosaic... I feel like it may have been limiting to the people who stuck to it more closely. 1
totallyy Posted December 26, 2014 Posted December 26, 2014 Pretty freakin' amazing! I'm wishing now I hadn't made the theme so prosaic... I feel like it may have been limiting to the people who stuck to it more closely. ahaha thank you! you shouldn't feel that way though. themes are there to guide people and guide me it did! constraints make me push my boundaries. plus taking something like favourite food and interpreting it my own way, giving it layers of meaning was fun plus i always like a challenge. 2
Puppilull Posted August 24, 2015 Posted August 24, 2015 (edited) Here is my attempt at least. Carbonara! This was genuinely hard! Both the math aspect of it and the theme. I had to think very hard... I think it’s trochaic trimeter or tetrameter and I suspect it’s catalectic. Maybe it needs a doctor… Bacon fried to careful crisp Eggs, then cheese that’s grated Add some pepper to the mix Then the pasta’s plated DUM-da DUM-da DUM-da DUM DUM-da DUM-da DUM DUM DUM-da DUM-da DUM-da DUM DUM-da DUM-da DUM DUM https://www.gayauthors.org/story/puppilull/puppilullspoetryprompts/6 Edited August 24, 2015 by Puppilull 1
Site Moderator Reader1810 Posted August 24, 2015 Site Moderator Posted August 24, 2015 Here is my attempt at least. Carbonara! This was genuinely hard! Both the math aspect of it and the theme. I had to think very hard... I think it’s trochaic trimester or tetrameter and I suspect it’s catalectic. Maybe it needs a doctor… Bacon fried to careful crisp Eggs, then cheese that’s grated Add some pepper to the mix Then the pasta’s plated DUM-da DUM-da DUM-da DUM DUM-da DUM-da DUM DUM DUM-da DUM-da DUM-da DUM DUM-da DUM-da DUM DUM https://www.gayauthors.org/story/puppilull/puppilullspoetryprompts/6 Well done Puppilull! Out of likes, so :heart: only one problem... now I want bacon and eggs and I don't have any 2
Headstall Posted August 26, 2015 Posted August 26, 2015 (edited) Okay, here's my attempt at the challenge. I read through this thread, and Irri said we could throw away the theme, so I did. Reading Wikipedia gave me a headache. I can feel the meter, but that's as much as I can say... Oh yeah, and I went with rhyme for this one. I know you can't behave It isn't in your genes Was not born in a cave You know just what I mean I don't fall for your lies All love for you aside Don't waste your time with guise I won't aboard your ride Admit you don't regret Untruths you spin with glee The fact is you won't let Remorse waste time on me Edited August 27, 2015 by Headstall 3
Headstall Posted August 27, 2015 Posted August 27, 2015 Here is the link for my prompt response: https://www.gayauthors.org/story/headstall/headstallspoetryprompts/8 1
J.HunterDunn Posted September 17, 2015 Posted September 17, 2015 Here's one with the original theme and a Dutch twist. Artichokes with nutty taste could do with some enhancing. All you need is eggyoke, milk and butter in abundance. Then you make Marie a bath and stirr with lots of patience. When it's thick you've done the trick and made: sauce hollandaise. Peter. 4
Emi GS Posted September 17, 2015 Posted September 17, 2015 I know you can't behave It isn't in your genes Was not born in a cave You know just what I mean I don't fall for your lies All love for you aside Don't waste your time with guise I won't aboard your ride Admit you don't regret Untruths you spin with glee The fact is you won't let Remorse waste time on me I know the Love I gave I know You Never let in... For Me what You have You Never out Again... I know I told Lies But Sure that You Smile... I let You go highs After all, My Heart that Fail... 2
Former Member Posted September 17, 2015 Posted September 17, 2015 Here's one with the original theme and a Dutch twist. Artichokes with nutty taste could do with some enhancing. All you need is eggyoke, milk and butter in abundance. Then you make Marie a bath and stirr with lots of patience. When it's thick you've done the trick and made: sauce hollandaise. Peter. This one is simply yummy!!! 1
Headstall Posted September 29, 2015 Posted September 29, 2015 Decided to revisit this form. This time I used 8 syllable lines... rhyming. I like this form a lot. https://www.gayauthors.org/story/headstall/headstallspoetryprompts/14 2
Headstall Posted October 8, 2015 Posted October 8, 2015 Back to this form again, but I combined it with Prompt 5- Rhymes and couplets... I don't know what this is called... maybe just Meter1- Rhyming? https://www.gayauthors.org/story/headstall/headstallspoetryprompts/16 1
Headstall Posted October 16, 2015 Posted October 16, 2015 Another return to this form. Meter 1- Rhyming... https://www.gayauthors.org/story/headstall/headstallspoetryprompts/18 2
Former Member Posted October 17, 2015 Posted October 17, 2015 Another return to this form. Meter 1- Rhyming... https://www.gayauthors.org/story/headstall/headstallspoetryprompts/18 This is a powerful one, Gary. Left a review for you... 1
Headstall Posted October 23, 2015 Posted October 23, 2015 I guess I must like this form. Another Meter1-Rhyming- 10 syllables per line. https://www.gayauthors.org/story/headstall/headstallspoetryprompts/19 1
Headstall Posted October 29, 2015 Posted October 29, 2015 Back to this form once again. This is for my best friend... my promise to him... I found Meter 1- rhyming... with only 7 syllables per line this time, more of a challenge... or maybe it was my state of mind... https://www.gayauthors.org/story/headstall/headstallspoetryprompts/20 1
Headstall Posted November 25, 2015 Posted November 25, 2015 Another one- Meter 1- 8 syllables per line with a variation... repeating first line of 5 syllables at the start of each verse... and it's rhyming... https://www.gayauthors.org/story/headstall/headstallspoetryprompts/25 1
Mikiesboy Posted November 26, 2015 Posted November 26, 2015 Ok, I'm still mulling over a holiday-based example, but here's one I thought about yesterday. We all love candy bars, right..? Milton Hershey thought that if one could see An empty wrapper then, his work was done. All the toil of an adman's brain was free If his Chocolate's name could, glint in the sun. Yes and then there's Stew finally: https://www.gayauthors.org/story/mikiesboy/timmysjournal/17 1
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