[Jack Frost] Moving On

[Jack Frost]

CJ, Forum lurker and resident hypocrite.

LOL!!!

 

Gotta love your new name.

[Jack Frost]

Tata...after being betaread, I added some other stuffs.

 

Moving On - Chapter Nine is up! (03/28)

[Bondwriter]

Ben nodded and quickly appeared to realized

That's what happens when changes are not overlooked by your team! By the way they are really nice, despite my sly remark, and add interest to the episode. But now I'm confused as to Matt's age... I'll have to go check it back.

[C James]

Great chapter

 

I really liked the scene with Aiden, Matt, and the open door! Ben and Steph sure have a knack for getting discovered and almost discovered! And that line "Boy screwdriver" is hilarious!

 

Would a 12-year-old like Matt really be able to buy Porn in Montreal? I know he really didn't and it was just Ben's excuse, but is Montreal really like that?

[sat8997]

Ben nodded and quickly appeared to realized

 

That's what happens when changes are not overlooked by your team! By the way they are really nice, despite my sly remark, and add interest to the episode. But now I'm confused as to Matt's age... I'll have to go check it back.

 

Er...that one was overlooked by me. The dang phone kept ringing while I was working on this chapter. It always amazes me that, while I'm at work, they actually expect me to work.

 

Sharon

[TalonRider]

Ben nodded and quickly appeared to realized

Er...that one was overlooked by me. The dang phone kept ringing while I was working on this chapter. It always amazes me that, while I'm at work, they actually expect me to work.

 

Sharon

I used to do some editing of stories at work but had to quit. At work, we use Office 2003 Professional, at home I use the home version of Office 2003. After I sent the chapter back to the author, he complained about the punctuation being all screwed up so I quit doing it work.

 

Jan

[Jack Frost]

I'm confused about Matt's age too.

 

What age did I put him as? I forgot...this time I intend to make him a 15yr old. Now I have to look it up later and change it.

 

Would a 12-year-old like Matt really be able to buy Porn in Montreal? I know he really didn't and it was just Ben's excuse, but is Montreal really like that?

I don't know. I made it up about Montreal doing that. It's true that age thingie is not strictly enforced as it is in the USA concerning tobacco and alcohol (you have to be 18 to buy these stuffs in Quebec)...so giving some porn to 15yr olds like Matt wouldn't surprise me.

[Drewbie]

Birthday parties are always good, esp if they have good pizza

 

If my brother said, that I would blushing more then ben did.

[C James]

I'm confused about Matt's age too.

 

What age did I put him as? I forgot...this time I intend to make him a 15yr old. Now I have to look it up later and change it.

I don't know. I made it up about Montreal doing that. It's true that age thingie is not strictly enforced as it is in the USA concerning tobacco and alcohol (you have to be 18 to buy these stuffs in Quebec)...so giving some porn to 15yr olds like Matt wouldn't surprise me.

The only ref to Matt's age that I'm aware of is from his brother Ben in Ch 8

He's just happy to see you again," Ben finished for him, "He's only 12, and he hasn't gotten many English courses yet," he explained,

But, Ben's claim about Montreal doesn't really matter anyway, as the gift wasn't porn; he was just making that up.

 

Hmmm, Montreal sounds like quite a den of evil goings-on... And Ben and Steph are heading there.

[Jack Frost]

Hehe yes, he made it up.

 

Ah Matt's 12...hmmm, no need to fix it. As you said, just a quick excuse that Ben made up.

 

I can't wait to write about Montreal...I've been waiting for ages to do that and it's getting closer.

 

Oh yes, after April 5th, I won't be in Montreal, so I won't be seeing them when they come.

[Bondwriter]

Hehe yes, he made it up.

 

Ah Matt's 12...hmmm, no need to fix it. As you said, just a quick excuse that Ben made up.

 

I can't wait to write about Montreal...I've been waiting for ages to do that and it's getting closer.

 

Oh yes, after April 5th, I won't be in Montreal, so I won't be seeing them when they come.

Oops, sorry for the sly remark, Sharon. But actually, it was not as much the porn magazine as Matt walking on his brother having sex that bothered me. (In my memory, Matt was 13, so it did depend on the nature of the porn, but it didn't seem completely outrageous, whereas him giggling seeing his brother having sex, I don't know)

 

Oh, that's really too bad you don't get to meet Steph and Ben, Jack. (Hey do you realize they're fictional characters, they're only figments of your imagination)

[Jack Frost]

Oops, sorry for the sly remark, Sharon. But actually, it was not as much the porn magazine as Matt walking on his brother having sex that bothered me. (In my memory, Matt was 13, so it did depend on the nature of the porn, but it didn't seem completely outrageous, whereas him giggling seeing his brother having sex, I don't know)

 

Oh, that's really too bad you don't get to meet Steph and Ben, Jack. (Hey do you realize they're fictional characters, they're only figments of your imagination)

Matt didn't catch them having sex, Adrien did. By the time Ben got his undies back on, Matt came in.

 

And I'm not changing your sly remark. It can stay that way, as a relic of Sharon's failure.

 

Naw, I'm joking, Sharon. Just few days ago I told CJames that you're the goddess of editing. I still love you and you're far from being sacked from the job. I still remember I still owe you a shoo-fly pie in order to get your mercy and blessing.

 

I'll keep it there to show my failure to watch for the grammar stuffs.

[Bondwriter]

"I knew it," Adrien smirked, leaning on the doorway.

"I asked you, do I look sexy in these undies?" he smirked. Adrien and Matt giggled lightly at the shock on my face. He wanted me to answer in front of them?

Matt didn't catch them having sex, Adrien did. By the time Ben got his undies back on, Matt came in.

So if Matt wasn't there at the beginning, shouldn't his entrance be mentioned? Or maybe Matt has supernatural powers allowing him to appear out of thin air? To change age easily? Is he a demon? A vampire? A ghost? If you think "picky", annoying", or" hair-splitting", I'll say: "Darn right!"

[Bondwriter]

On a more positive note, the CRAZY reference is quite to the point. But then with their friends' reactions, why don't Steph and Ben tell them they love each other?

[C James]

Naw, I'm joking, Sharon. Just few days ago I told CJames that you're the goddess of editing.

Sharon, he did indeed say that you are a "Goddess of editing".

 

So if Matt wasn't there at the beginning, shouldn't his entrance be mentioned? Or maybe Matt has supernatural powers allowing him to appear out of thin air? To change age easily? Is he a demon? A vampire? A ghost? If you think "picky", annoying", or" hair-splitting", I'll say: "Darn right!"

Hmmm, I think you are on to something with your "demonic theory". The age-shifting is veeery suspicious, and teleporting is a little suspicious too. Hmmmm, though, the Vampire theory has further supporting evidence; didn't we decide that Jack Frost was a vampire himself? Hmmmmmm....

[Bondwriter]

Hey guys, tune your fiddles! Did Jack say the goddess of editing or a Goddess of editing? This makes a whole lot of difference.

[C James]

Hey guys, tune your fiddles! Did Jack say the goddess of editing or a Goddess of editing? This makes a whole lot of difference.

I suppose I really shouldn't mention that our French Friend's comment was originally posted with corrupted HTML, and he had to fix it?

[Bondwriter]

I suppose I really shouldn't mention that our French Friend's comment was originally posted with corrupted HTML, and he had to fix it?

How could you be aware of such a thing? Only a stalker would know! But yes, I had to fix it, since I always try to post the best possible messages. The old quality VS. quantity issue. :king:

[Jack Frost]

So if Matt wasn't there at the beginning, shouldn't his entrance be mentioned? Or maybe Matt has supernatural powers allowing him to appear out of thin air? To change age easily? Is he a demon? A vampire? A ghost? If you think "picky", annoying", or" hair-splitting", I'll say: "Darn right!"

The entrance was indeed mentioned.

 

"Que c'est qui se passe l

[Bondwriter]

Now doubt overcomes me and clouds my mind in its shades of red and grey.

Two possibilities:

1/ I'm a dimwit who tried to look smart at the expense of poor Jack, and failed miserably.

2/ I'm a victim of Jack's devious behind-my-back editing. The weasely author just went to correct the problem I pointed out and tries to make me look like a fool.

 

Isn't there a stalker around here who may access the editing info on eFiction? Someone with dark sunglasses? Hooves? A goatee?

[C James]

Now doubt overcomes me and clouds my mind in its shades of red and grey.

Two possibilities:

1/ I'm a dimwit who tried to look smart at the expense of poor Jack, and failed miserably.

2/ I'm a victim of Jack's devious behind-my-back editing. The weasely author just went to correct the problem I pointed out and tries to make me look like a fool.

 

Isn't there a stalker around here who may access the editing info on eFiction? Someone with dark sunglasses? Hooves? A goatee?

Sorry, but I don't have access to things like that... I do however remember reading the chapter after it was posted, and oddly enough, I don't recall that line either. The Frosty one is sneaky...

 

However, my vote is that both choices #1 and #2 apply.

[Bondwriter]

However, my vote is that both choices #1 and #2 apply.

I vote against using goats' brains in designing biocomputers. Unless they're meant to use 'fuzzy logic'. But if you implied I was both a dimwit and a victim, then...

[sat8997]

I just double-checked. Jack is correct.

 

 

Goddess (Who votes for #3 - all of the above)

[Bondwriter]

Darn! I feel quite humbled. Excellent motivation to look at Jack's story EVEN CLOSER in the future. *OK, this one really hurts, but I can't really do without* Sorry, Jack.

[Jack Frost]

Darn! I feel quite humbled. Excellent motivation to look at Jack's story EVEN CLOSER in the future. *OK, this one really hurts, but I can't really do without* Sorry, Jack.

Awh pauvre Fran