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"Do you have a roommate?" He bit my nipple, making me shudder. "You shouldn't be able to talk right now." He leaned up and moved his hips in a circle. I couldn't help but groan and shiver at the intense sensation. I was flushed, my chest tight, panting through my mouth as I tried to think past the pleasure. He undulated again and I couldn't help but thrust back to get his cock deeper. Tonight's celebration of meeting my article deadline was going VERY well. Then I heard it ag
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LOL, no kidding! If you can feel how someone really feels, not just what they say they feel or how they act, we would understand each other's motivations quite a bit better. It's hard to lie if someone else can feel it!! Keep reading, you'll find out all about the cure, I promise!
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Ahh, there are some scenes but I don't tend to be too liberal with them, I prefer to write more story than sex. What I do have I try to make... appealing, lol. I'm glad you are liking the story so far, thanks again for leaving reviews, I really appreciate it!
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LOL, my hubby always asks me why I'm smiling when I read stories I really like. I'm glad you had one of those moments! Loving the reviews, thanks so much!
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I didn't want Bashta to be weak at all, even with the bad things from his past. He's survived on his own, he can make it through anything!
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This one doesn't have much d/s in it, not in the traditionl sense but I hope you like it! I love the sexy cats
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LOL, yes, my ongoing readers at the time would have tortured me if I hadn't written that in. I toyed with not adding it and it didn't go over well The torture was a tad rough, most of my stories aren't as explicit as this one. You'll find if you read my stories, most of them end up happy. I am a sap at heart and as much as I feed them angst and issues, I like to reward them with happiness after, lol. If you liked this story, I wrote a 2nd story in the series called Two of a Kind. It's longer and while there are problems you won't find any torture Thank you for all of the great reviews, it was a great way to wake up!
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Well in many ways they have been taking turns. Remember, in the beginning, Natham took a knife for Velaku. A good partnership allows each person to be both the protected and protector. It's all about balance. Most importantly I wanted Natham to have that moment of fighting back. No one should remain a victim; he took control just when he really needed to.
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Mates are bound well before they meet; they just don't know who it is until they meet. Then the recognition is instant once they are old enough to understand. It was the extreme torture that made Natham reach out along that bond and link them before they met in person. Thanks again for reviewing!!
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Yes This isn't the most dramatic chapter of the story but I did try to make it as unexpected as possible.
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I can create visuals, I know I can do that quite well. Dialogue requires much more editing to ensure the correct flow as if people were really speaking. Thankfully I have a great beta. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!
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It took me a minute to find anything about this guy, since you didn't mention his username. It doesn't appear as if Jevic is an 'active' member of the site since he hasn't been on since February. The one story he has posted in GA Stories is a 'linked' story. His website appears to have quite a few more stories as WIP's, the link is on his profile page, but as I'm not a follower of his I have no idea if he is posting anywhere else or not. You might consider sending him an email or comment through his website, most authors respond to those.
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[Cia] Online Writing Course Exercises
Cia replied to Cia's topic in Promoted Author Discussion Forum
Wow Synth! Great work. I'm not great at poetry but I really like this. Your imagery is right on. I can see this little girl in one of those old white Sunday dresses, running through a field of flowers and then jumping on this little old wood swing that's hanging off this big tree, swaying back and forth. Seems almost a period piece to me, very nostalgic. I love it when I get a picture from a poem, it doesn't happen that often. -
Getting to know what happened between Jake and Eli is good but other than that this chapter was a rehash. You could easily just swap pov's for the scene without having to go back over everything. Many people use more than one pov for their story and it can work if you don't try to head hop paragraphy by paragraph but I feel it's almost cheating to just write the same story from a different perspective. I try to pick the one character that is the most integral to the chapter and use their pov. You can give clues to how the other characters think and act with their actions and expressions and movements still.
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It would definitely be an unpleasant way to be outed! Not to mention just flat out embarrassing to be caught by your mom in your jeans with a raging erection and your boyfriend the same way. I'm glad you didn't make Jake an abusive jerk who would beat up on Viz but one part did confuse me during their conversation. You wrote, You're the closet thing he has to a brother, from Viz to Jake, but Eli has a brother. I think the sentiment you were going for is that he is as close to him as a brother would be.
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I do like these characters. You have really made them come to life. I wonder how you will have the Jake/Eli situation pan out though. So many directions it could go.
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Good chapter, just moved the story along. I like that it didn't rehash anything from previous chapters really. The only part I didn't understand is why the house would remind the mom of the dad? They just moved there didn't they?
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Oh, those video clips would be amazing to watch! I read that and definitely could see it in my head. It was also a great way to let us get to know the characters. I like that you did that, very original! The part where Eli's video of Viz shows is in a different and really small text though and that really flawed the chapter for me. You should edit it all the same so it's not as distracting from the good scenes you have witten.
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I'm not usually a fan of alternating pov and including past action in the chapter but you went beyond what the previous chapter did so it worked here. It is good to let us know how things seem from Viz's pov but it cut down a lot on the action in the chapter that was new. I'd like to have seen more go on in this chapter.
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Good start. This is a story that has been done before but you can make it your own through the characters and their interactions. You do have very original characters so that should be easy for you to continue. There are a few mistakes through the story, wrong or misspelled words for the most part. If you self-edit you might try reading your chapters from the end, paragraph by paragraph. It helps you see the words you might miss on a regular edit.
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That color shirt looks really good on you JC! You do look relaxed, even if you had no one to relax with.
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Finally! A full month late you post!! I love the 'bloody' water trick, that was hilarious!! Growing up with many siblings there were always pranks being pulled. It was hilarious sometimes and other times I just wanted to roll my eyes. I feel bad for Mrs. Lamoureau. Now... next chapter?? Hop to!!
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Prompt 38: Three Wishes 2.0
Cia commented on Andrew Q Gordon's story chapter in Prompt 38: Three Wishes 2.0
Ooh, someone who is outside the box and thoughtful! I saw the wish for his grandma and just went... awwww!!! And gay to boot Good drabble -
Pompt 38: Three Wishes 1.0
Cia commented on Andrew Q Gordon's story chapter in Pompt 38: Three Wishes 1.0
Ha Ha Ha! I've heard that the djinn are are tricksy folk. Most of the time it takes the advent of a lawyer to make a flaw proof wish. What would you wish for??? I'm sure you could do it! -
LOL. You are very good at ending a story and yet leaving it so open for your next one to come. It's a great way to get readers to continue and read your work, a true boon to an author. I love how you give us answers and questions all at the same time, and I even have an in as your beta and still never quite know what you are going to have the characters doing. This is one of my fav's of the 'It Was A..." series.
