Cia

Well... it's over! Chapter 14, the final c hapter, is in GA Stories finally. Tell me what you think please!!! Two of a Kind

Cavel held Bashta's hand on yet another flight. This time his mate wasn't medicated or focused on any sick kitlings so Cavel kept talking to him. "What are we going to do about the baby?" Bashta asked. "Bring her home of course." Bashta caressed Cavel's hand, trying to ease the red marks he had left when the plane took off. Cavel pulled his hand up and kissed his knuckles. "You would do that for me?" Cavel nodded simply. "Look, from all the evidence and, while not much, what we do

Maybe some reseach on alternative solutions? Not sure what, if anything, could help but modern medicine doesn't know everything. I'm glad the work schedule, pay, and being there for Efan will be ideal for you. Good luck on the dragon lady boss but if you bite her a few times maybe she'll calm down

Life is full of ups and downs. That you can talk about them, share them with us, and also look on the bright side of life means you're getting through them as you can. I've the whole 'broken leg will never be the same' thing you might be experiencing. I had to give up scuba diving and some other things but I found new hobbies and even rediscovered my love for photography. Doing things like running and meeting your goals should make you happy, if they aren't or you are feeling too let down you should consider reviewing your goals and making new ones that might be a bit easier to meet. It's not giving up, it's facing life as it is and deciding to do things that are challenging without being impossible or will hurt you in the long run. Other than that, many many good wishes on your love making it to that safe place. Having supportive friends and family are great but when you find those people who just bring you that joy you have to hold on tight. Everything else will fall into places as it will, but if you two are happy that's what is important.

I'm an insomniac and I'm prone to nightmares when I do sleep. I startle very easily and also tend to get violent if disturbed when I'm actually sleeping though I've never hit the kids, just my husband. Moms are just good like that I guess It's a good thing I do sleep so lightly because my husband sleeps like the dead. With the kids as babies I'd have them in our room in their bassinets or our bed and do the whole nighttime crying, feeding, changing/crying, feeding, back to sleep routine and he wouldn't even twitch. Honestly I just can't make any good suggestions to go to sleep and sleep well. We have music on but it doesn't put me to sleep, tv sometimes will be it depends on how interested I am in the show. Reading keeps me up. The best thing for me is to write, that puts me out like a light for some reason but then I end up with whole pages of k's on the screen from my finger pressing on the keyboard. (Always k's too, just that one finger, totally bizarre). My only resort to avoid the nightmares and laying in bed for hours awake is to stay up until I just can't anymore. I average 4-5 hours of sleep with 6 being a very good nights sleep for me. Then about every 4-6 days I am so tired I'll get a 6-7 hour night in. It's not healthy but it's what works for me and since I'm a stay at home mom those hours during the late night are the only ones I get with peace and quiet. I'll trade being tired for that precious commodity.

No big comments but thanks for the laugh. I could 'see' the people as you described them, I love that.

Thank you so much! I'm still working on this story but as my final chapter to my other 'In Progress' story is with my beta/editor I should be able to finish this one up and continue posting it. It's been a while since I updated but a new review always gets me thinking about a story. There will be more coming soon. Thanks again for the review!

How many minds and bodies do you have again? I know we can't do much without money but which is more important? I'm the list maker so I have to say go with the pro and con of each choice and then really think about what you need to do for you and of course, Efan. I've lived with daily pain since I was 22 and I just hate that you have to as well. I truly hope they figure out something to help you more efficiently than just masking the pain itself.

I did but honestly the story wasn't about Doug. The relationship was there and obviously important but it was more of what he was doing FOR Wes than how he reacted to the recovery process after the accident and his emotions. I realize I made him a bit 'ideal' and it was a direct contrast to the realism of the accident and Wes' recovery but well, I'm a sucker for an all around good guy. I'll definitely keep in mind that my good guys can be 'too good' for future stories and try to give them realism by showing their flaws as well. Thanks for the comments Conner, and giving me something to think about!

A crazy GREAT story!! You guys will really love this one, I did the first, second, and third times I read it!

Next time, when you know something like the title go into GA Stories and in the Browse box on the right hand side click 'Title' It brings up all the story titles in GA Stories alphabetically but the important bit is at the top. You have a whole host of 'filter by' options if you aren't sure of the title itself but the really helpful area is the Search for story box. You can start typing in the title and the auto generator begins pulling up titles that start with what you have input so far. All it took was putting in 'Dan' and Dangerous Impulses showed up, along with 8 other options with those in the title. It's not a foolproof system but the search options in GA Stories are pretty helpful.

As most of you know, I have 2 kids. A girl and a boy, almost exactly 2 1/2 years apart. Sort of 'ideal' and all that. I was fortunate to get to stay home after the 2nd was born and I'm still here at home with them. It varies how enthusiastic I am about having them depending on how much they are fighting Case in point, just this morning I had to send him to the wall and comfort the girl as she screamed because they were wrestling after I said stop and things went horribly wrong, as they usually do. Still trying to break my 4 year boy from headbutting when he gets mad and hearing a nose go crunch at 7:30 am is NOT a good morning. Then again, in the past she dislocated both of his arms at the elbow. Ahh... siblings! All horror stories aside, I love having my kids most of the time though but I don't want any more. I am past the diaper stage, almost to both of them in school stage after this summer and trust me, when September rolls around and I get mornings to myself I'm going to be doing the biggest happy dance ever. I like looking forward to more school events, sleepovers, sports, junior high and high school. It is a definite privelege to get to watch them change and grow as they get older and a lot of fun. Being at home has meant some sacrifices but in the end I know giving up the money I could have made and it takes to raise kids has been well worth it. It's an adventure to be a parent and one I wouldn't give up for anything.

I think the one that affected me the most as I read it was Ben Goes to the Zoo by Hamen Cheese. I beta read for it and cried the first time and then cried again when I read it in the anthology. It just had a lot of meaning and you could feel the absolute dedication to his brother that laced the main character's personality. I can think of many others I enjoyed, even some that also made me cry, but I consider this one as my 'favorite'.

So... we're going this one way with Tina and Charlie. Screech... (literally) and we have a new way with Charlie and Scott. Throw in some drama to highlight the bi/gay issues with his family and force Charlie to think about those issues, though of course he still can't apply them to himself. Bang! Tim shows up and we have a whole new direction and don't forget a poor black and blue Rick Jr. Charlie's comfortable little world full of self-delusions is just about at it's end isn't it? That whole 'bubble' metaphor was pretty good for that. Can't wait to see what is going to happen next, you have me completely turned around and I just can't tell! Please tell me eventually Scott is just going to pin Charlie to the wall and kiss him senseless, cause he soooo needs it!

I think it depends on how strong the 'slang' or accent you use is. I played with posting a story with scottish characters and found while posting that the strong accent and using too many unfamiliar words distracted and displaced the reader so the flow suffered when they read. I used third person though, so I could make the narration more plain english and I've been re-writing the story to tone down the accent. Your best bet, I think, would be to post a sample of the story in the Sneak Peeks area to get feedback before you get too far into writing. That way if you get feedback that it isn't working and you happen to agree you won't have as much to re-write.

Very true Clumber. But there are things I just can't know myself. I can write the dynamics and the emotions but I still like to have a 2nd look. I don't always run them by the guys but it can help, especially when I'm not sure of the scene myself. I like to write what I know but to some extent it's all make believe of course. Realism as far as possible is always my goal, even if the sex is between two aliens, lol!

I'm pretty sure I am NOT a poet. Exercise #3 proved that to me at least. I'll let you guys make your own decision. 20 words: Warm, damp, soak, puddle, trudge, dance, revel, wallow, release, pressure, sad, lonely, hidden, emotions, overflowing, damage, mud, fresh, drip, patter. Warm raindrops drip down my face, my emotions overflowing with nature’s damp tears I trudge through the mud and puddles soak my feet Wallowing in the sad and lonely trip, the damage is done My fear drove me to run away, the world is a bleak place where I am all alone I follow the path, collapsing at the end I marvel in wonder at what stands before me In the midst of all the mud stands a single flower White petals dance with the patter of each drop It revels in the fresh gift of life from above I close my eyes and release the pressure of all the expectations I will learn to be the flower Ceril walked out of the house with nothing but the clothes on his back. His shirt quickly became damp as the warm raindrops dripped from the bare branches. He trudged along the hidden path in the woods, feeling sad and lonely as he relived the scene he just left. He knew if he didn’t leave everyone would have been able to see all of his emotions betrayed on his face. In the quiet of the empty woods he could hide the tears overflowing from his eyes and wallow in the pain without any more damage to his reputation. He never knew it would be like that. Ceril had just wanted to dance, to revel in the love he felt just hours before. He thought they had something special but he was wrong. They went to the party and that was when it all fell apart. Jennifer had tried to stop him but it was too late, the damage was done. Ceril ignored Damon when he tried to explain but he slammed the door on his way out. Not knowing what else to do he had taken off for the woods. He was alone again. He had known it would happen but his hope had blinded him. He scrubbed at his cheeks, trying to wipe away the fresh tears that continued to drip down his face. Avoiding a puddle in the middle of the path he stepped to the side and slipped in the mud. He fell to his knees. His hands clenched, he beat the ground. “Why!” His scream was a release of the pressure building up in his chest and choking him. The pattering of the rain on the flower petals was the only sound that broke the silence. He closed his eyes and let the sobs overtake him.

HA HA HA All very good reasons. The only problem with motive #1? I find sooo many more errors in the things I read and it's gotten to the point where I want to smack publishers. I read an e-book that was priced at $3.99 last night where the author didn't even separate dialogue only lines into new paragraphs! Good thing I got the story for free or I'd have been seriously cursing someone. I do like learning more myself though. I'm always on the quest to refine my story skills as well as the technical know-how to make each story as clean as possible in every way. I laughed at you this morning. Then I went to the store for 1 thing. Walked out with 2 bags. Got home... had to go back to the store for the third bag that had the thing I actually went to the store for. Sooo... karma smacked me for laughing

Yep, my characters usually find love. I met my husband and started dating him pretty much that night, almost 14 years ago. Attraction is definitely possible at first sight and I totally believe it can lead, sometimes very quickly, to love. I think that comes into my stories but the relationship usually isn't smooth sailing though and I'm a smart lady; I make sure at least one is 'experienced' so that I don't have to write that fumbling in. The one story I would say I wrote and focused on teenagers, 'Escaping the Pain', doesn't have sex in it at all and they're both virgins. Maybe I was avoiding writing sex in on purpose so I could put that off until I can get them in college and a little bit more comfortable in their own skin. I try to make the sex as realistic as possible and run it by at least one accomodating 'gay guy' author to make sure it's not totally off since I'm a woman and hampered at least a little with some of the details of sex with 2 men. I will have to say that I laugh at all of those 'virgins who are stretched a little and then sex is totally comfortable, what were all those people talking about??' plots. At least I know that isn't true.

Thanks hun. I was really trying to make that the central focus. Appreciate the review!!

I'm not good at poetry but I could tell you had a lot of thought and feeling in this.

I don't personally confront someone on a crime where no one is being hurt right then and there. I would inform store personnel though. I've called the cops for other things, like a woman I saw put a puppy in her trunk and then drive off. I was in an appointment and saw through a window so I got a license but couldn't do anything myself. Speaking for those who can't themselves is important but you have to be careful nowadays, the world is full of crazies. I'm not getting hurt over something like theft.

Ooh, good chapter. I can't wait for this to all come together and for the main characters to meet. I also wan to know what kind of music Sam does. Good flow, I like how you introduced us to new characters and yet didn't overwhelm us with names.

You know, you're right. In my mind the fact that Dane 'stole' his mom's car, not the Saab, was clear. However, while re-reading in all the previous chapters I just say his dad's car and don't specify that it was the 'spare' car that was his mom's before she died. I'll clear that up with a few revisions to my wording. Thank you for pointing it out!!

Thank you, Comicfan, for such a great review. My goal was to make this real, as real as possible for a fiction story to be, that is. I tried to bring as much emotion as I remembered feeling into what Wes and Doug were experiencing. I am glad to hear it work. Thanks again!