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You have written a great little moment in the narrator's life. I liked the character right away. And you did a wonderful job writing the dialogue between his sister and he! Well done! Thanks.
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I'd like to give Andy a big hug for his patience and kindness to Eric. It is great to watch him really listen to Eric and be understanding. It's a real change from the beginning of the story! Thanks.
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You can read chris191070's review. He has clearly and succinctly stated why this story is worth reading. I would add Carlos has written terrific character and excellent dialogue from the beginning. I repeat Chris's recommendation to read the entire CJ collection from the beginning. It is definitely worth reading.
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As usual, you have managed to give us updates on many of the people in CJ's world in a comparatively small space. And you've done it in a very clever way with the use of the TV anchors. All the new characters at the end is a bit of a challenge. With names and nicknames I will need to reread at least once and maybe scribble out a flowchart to get all the kids sorted. My only whine is I was expecting a bit more story than a prologue and one chapter. Carlos, it has been a real pleasure to get to know all your wonderful characters! ❤ Thank you for sharing them with us. I look forward to reading whatever you write next.
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I can't decide if I want to be happy or sad about this finale to the C.J. saga. Having read every chapter to date, many of them two or three times, I will have to restructure my life with no more C.J. stories to look forward to. 😉 I know I will enjoy this last story, and I will look forward to whatever you write next.
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I binged the first episode in two days. I really enjoyed it, even though I have more questions than answers. Too bad about Brendan. I enjoyed him as a part of the story. I thought maybe he would help Lane. I guess not. Maybe Vanessa will be able to shed some light on things. I'm looking forward to the next part. Thanks.
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It is good to see your guys growing and getting closer as a trio. And watching Kent and Stanley do the same as a couple. Now, if you could just get Markus sorted. Love this story! Thank you.
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You did a great job writing Stanley's and Kent's moments together! The dialogue was spot on. I enjoyed Kent being the one in charge for real not just for sex play. I am glad Stanley listened and understood. I was also happy to see the trio come to a better understanding of their relationship. All in all a great chapter! Thanks.
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A Mother Knows These Things
JeffreyL commented on FlyOnTheWall's story chapter in A Mother Knows These Things
Great chapter! Once again your storytelling, characters, and dialogue have combined to make some memorable moments! I like the changing point of view. You have used that successfully in other stories. I love Eddie and Matty! You have this knack for creating characters I would like to know. I hope family things get sorted for you. Thanks. -
I am excited for the trio! And moving to a new home together is a great idea! I rather like that this is close to what I predicted a few chapters ago. 😃 Even better, Chris has changed his attitude, and death for Tad is not imminent. Not to mention the sex was pretty erotic! I am also excited for Kent and Stanley! Their relationship is growing beyond "fun." I am curious to see that happens with Marcus and Thomas. I have no clue how they will move forward. Thanks for this great chapter and more of this great story!
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It was great to learn a bit more about Charlie, and to see his interactions with Tyson! There's more going on in his head than I thought. Thanks.
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Reminiscing About the Future
JeffreyL commented on Altimexis's story chapter in Reminiscing About the Future
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This was a terrific short story! Your professor is an intriguing character and very likeable. You have set up several possibilities for how this story could continue. I hope you will decide to revisit it and write more. You have some great stories already written! Imagine what you could do with this great start. Thanks.
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My heart goes out to this dad and his son. Parents who have children with disabilities or mental illness can be amazing! They have a lot to deal with while trying to keep their child's life (and their own) as normal as possible. You did a great job capturing Alan's worry, fear, and love. Thank you.
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I enjoyed this story! Never find fault with someone who daydreams. I am glad the end had Devon in a better frame of mind. Thanks.
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So, I assume the flu was just that and not a sign Ian's cancer is active? I like the way Stanley and Kent are getting closer, and I love the triad! How about trio? Is that acceptable? 😆 Thanks for another great chapter!
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Poor Keegan. He is being set up for a giant fall. You have nicely captured his infatuation with Hunter. Your writing has me thinking Hunter is just a player. I wonder, like Marty, if he is even really gay. This is a good start! I look forward to more. Thanks.
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Your poem has a good message. It makes me think of "to thine own self be true." I don't know much about your success with the format, although you followed through with the three line stanza, but the message was great. Thanks.
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Your format was great, and the story in your chant was interesting. It would be fun to hear this in a group choral reading. Thanks.
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I had to look up Sapphic Ode. I had never heard this term before. I am not knowledgeable enough to comment on your success with the format, but your poems both contain some great word choices and beautiful word pictures. Thanks.
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Been there; done that. And I didn't/don't like it. You did a great job of capturing the feeling! Thanks.
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I enjoyed all the poems, but "More Words" was first rate! In my opinion the best of the bunch. Thanks.
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This is a nice variety! I really related to the "Words" poem, but my favorite was "Absurdities!" It was clever and funny and... absurd, in a most enjoyable way. Thanks.
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Another visit to Florida is on my bucket list. I would love to look you up, buy you a beer, give you a hug, and say to your face, "Thanks for the hours of entertainment you have given me with your CJ stories." Your writing is first rate, and you have constantly improved. There are a lot of characters I love on GA, but CJ and company are up at the top of the list! I am glad you have more writing to share. I know I'll be here to read it. I wish you continued success. Thank you
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I wanted to give this wonderful story five stars, so I did! If you want a good review, read Daddydavek's review. He was spot on, and I couldn't think of anything to add.
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