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Finally! It took them long enough. 😉 Thanks for more good story.
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Hello Rigby! What fun to read a new story by you! Your characters were somewhat bizarre, as only you can write them. Dialogue and descriptions were great! Parts of the story may have been a bit convoluted, or maybe I just need to go back and read a bit more slowly. Thank you.
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Thanks for more of this good story! Milan is a great character, and Rory can be so good for him.
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Maverick - "Funnel Web"
JeffreyL commented on AusGlitterati's story chapter in Maverick - "Funnel Web"
Thanks for the notes on the names at the end. I don't remember Mav being afraid of water. Is this the first we've heard this, or have I forgotten? I must say, once again, how much I am enjoying this story! Thanks. -
What a great story, and a perfect ending! Your writing was first rate throughout this story! Characters, dialogue, plot, and descriptions all blended together for a most enjoyable story! Thank you for sharing this.
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The Day After Yesterday
JeffreyL commented on Thorn Wilde's story chapter in The Day After Yesterday
I just found this story and have binged chapters one through six. I have to say I am really enjoying it! From your descriptions and dialogue I feel like I know your characters. Since I am about half way, I am certain the conflicts and confusion are not over yet. However, I am anxious to see what happens next! One of the good things about catching up is not having to wait for new chapters. 😁 Thanks. -
I enjoyed your very well written story. It was mostly sad, but liked the hopeful ending. Both Wyatt and Thomas were well drawn characters, and without an excess of words. Maybe with the principal's support, Wyatt will be able to stay at this school and be accepted. Thanks for sharing this.
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Great story with engaging characters! I love Milan and his family! I also love Rory! He's my kind of hero, and I like the way his friends look after him! I am curious to learn about his dad and other family he may have. Thanks.
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I must confess that your demon stories, while entertaining and cleverly written, were not my favorite of your stories. I don't know what it is about this one, but I may need to rethink my opinion. Su Yin and Zhihao are great characters! And I recognize names from your other stories, although it has been quite a while since I've read them. I am really enjoying this and look forward to more! Thanks.
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Obviously you were on hiatus taking lessons on how to write hot and horny sex between four guys!! 😉 I am happy to see you back with a new story. Thanks for this terrific beginning!
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Thank you for sharing your sad, but beautiful words. So many of the people commenting have already spoken words from my thoughts. More hugs and good thoughts being sent your way.
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Nicely written. A most enjoyable story. Thanks.
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I love the twins, and I really love Drew! He's my kind of hero. I can't wait for Mommy Dearest to make her appearance. Your dialogue is terrific, and I look forward to reading more. Thanks.
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Your super zombie has already given this a whole new dimension. You have really upped the danger factor. You really did a great job describing the location and introducing your characters. This promises to be a really good story! Thanks.
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Great story! Thank you.
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Chapter 4 - The Dawn of Day
JeffreyL commented on Dolores Esteban's story chapter in Chapter 4 - The Dawn of Day
I just binged chapters one through four and I am hooked! Your characters and set up are most intriguing. I can't wait to see how this moves forward. Thanks. -
Chris is a wonderful character! Thank you for writing and sharing his story.
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OMG! The dressing room scene was hot!! I love the clever dialogue you've written between Donovan and Shane. It really reflects their growing relationship. Thanks for more of this very fun story!
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Your writing really conveys the emotions your characters are feeling. I really like Josh and Kells. I hope they can get themselves sorted and work on getting together. Thanks.
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What a nice moment with Topher and Dom! As the more likeable of the quartet, it is great to see them have a happy moment. Thanks for more of this unusual bunch.
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It's always nice to have a visit from Brady and Ember! Who ever would have thought that it would be asshat Paul who cleared up all the confusion. Maybe now Ember and Brady can be a couple and move forward. Thanks.
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It was great to catch up with Nick and Noah and the rest of the family/friends! I am glad that work and health issues are getting better. I love these characters! Your descriptions and dialogue are easy to read. I especially liked the conversation with Mrs. Rodriguez about being a hero. Spot on! I look forward to reading more. Thanks.
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Chapter 5 - A Break Down
JeffreyL commented on kuragari129's story chapter in Chapter 5 - A Break Down
I binged from chapter one through five this evening. I enjoyed your characters and their situations, which seem real for their ages. I am starting to see them as separate people and to keep them straight. Thanks for sharing this story. I look forward to more. -
Chapter 1 Flight or Fight
JeffreyL commented on Headstall's story chapter in Chapter 1 Flight or Fight
This is a great short story about the importance of communicating! You managed to include interesting, well rounded characters and good dialogue with a fairly small number of words. Good job, and good story! Thanks. -
I am really liking your characters and their story! I don't know much about mental illness, but hopefully having a friend will benefit both of them. I wonder if the staff would talk to Tyson's mom about her being part of the problem? Good story. Thanks.
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