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Excellent job building suspense part of me wanted to go AAAH!!!! and part of me loved it .I never knew of any teacher who let go what Zack did.The look on Zack's face must have really indicated to her that something was up.

I can't help thinking about comparing this to the Anna Nicole case there are a lot of differences but the basic thought is the same the family thinks the spouse is evil.I would love to see the faces of Kelly's parents when the star witness at the trial is Matt. As far as Aidan running off as soon as somebody gives him a $20 dollar bill I know a lot of people who do that and they're adults.

You will really impressed with this author's first effort of this length if you didn't know it you would think this was an experienced GA author with a number of stories under her belt. Our main character Ethan has had a couple of very harrowing incidents involving abuse when he was a teenager in the aftermath he has spent half his life worried that one day the law might catch up to him.He find a out of the way place and goes under an assumed name when one day a person who was 12 years old when he last saw him 10 years ago comes looking for him and finds him what follows is a bunch of twist and turns that will keep you riveted with characters that you come to care for.I gave this five stars not because it was a GA first time effort it is 5 stars on merit

Have to admit didn't see that coming E was on the run for no reason all this time.But then if he isn't on the run we wouldn't have met all these great characters.I'm glad thing worked out well for the Jameson family for the most part especially Leah and I love that Sophie is in town and course E and Jonathan riding off into the sunset or the cabin if you will.Good touch with Beebee being in the play.Rayna didn't know what part Micheal was going to play does that mean he took Beebee from the store without her realizing it lol. You would never know this was your first story by reading it congrats.I know how much time a work goes int writing something good I had enough trouble in my creative writing class in HS lol.If you don't mind just a thought from an eager fan.I can see a good follow up story centered around Micheal with all the others making appearances for drama you could use the situation with his dad and since you never really identified Micheal. in any certain way you can have him be Bi and all the drama that comes with that.Just babbling whatever you come up with I'm sure will be great.Thank you again

It went on for two months?I could have seen after a couple of weeks Davey could have realized how wrong this was on so many levels but two months wow that is stubborn.I don't know where the story goes from here but I hope we don't see a repeat of local moron pastor and the TV station going to the school.And then I'm sure Mr. Rule will put his two cents in.In all the timelines some characters died too soon mostly from Davey's family but an a-hole like Mr. Rule is alive in every one of them just venting after all these are fictional characters LOL.I hope Brian remembers any stories about the Pastor the other Davey may have told him and I hope Mr. B hears this and thinks of a plan.

The way we are not sure that somebody in your stories are really dead or not are you sure you know which one you talked to?

Wow from a story that was possibly going on hold to 3 chapters in 3 days.Hunter might end up being the baddest ass yet.

So while all this is going down where the heck is Finch?

The guys from Wildwood tell West and the others to watch their backs doesn't seem like a good strategy and threatening to take the captaincy away from West makes no sense with them being new.It sounds they are being directed what to do by an older outside source

So none of the staff knew that were being charged for their rooms?That means it wasn't itemized on the paycheck. That certainly violates something another thing Arlene and the board had to hide.And another thing the trustees missed because they never asked for an accounting.

Two smart guys acting like idiots.More so Davey though he using Julie without her knowing what's going on and as far as his mother goes it will still be a shit storm if she finds out after he graduates high school only with the extra bonus of pretending to be something he's not.But the one thing he should be able to understand is he got so upset when he saw Brian with Todd how the hell does he think Brians feels about seeing him being with Julie .Its not that complicated As for Brian for a person with all that life experience he still acted like a....teenager

What @centexhairysub got me thinking did the higher ups make the decision to let James fend for himself and if he dies he dies?Finch had to be close enough by to come and assist.If I'm the Toranga's I would be saying we don't trust you guys

Wow every director took kickbacks since most of the students are sons of wealthy and in some cases well known people you would think this would make it in the media

If you remember Davey was the one that specifically remembered her number in the previous story in this timeline they haven't met.Brian might remember her but wouldn't know her number I don't think.

Based on your last chapter comments it sounds like a lightbulb went on and you though of this chapter pretty impressive. I guess people like Emma could do some pretty supernatural things I assume you worked out the details on how she almost framed TJ .Did she "create " some of TJ's DNA to put at the scene among other things?

@kbois She'll get it in at 4:59PM just to show you

What I worry about is Kayden being alone at the party.I have too much of a over active imagination I wonder if its a scheme to get Trent away from Kayden I hope I'm so wrong.

Love how things are progressing.They have 5000 coins? These are appetites of teenagers we are talking about you would have needed that many just for me.I exaggerate(but only a little)

Well I guess something might hit the fan in the next chapter.I remember Sandy being a little homophobic in previous lifelines but not this extreme.And like I mentioned before how will Jenny be?Before this happened all the other characters deserved kudos for how they acted toward Sean when he returned. This Sean is a little messed up thinking he deserves the bad stuff that happened to him is this the same guy that later in the original timeline was smart enough to help that scientist with the time machine? Unless Sandy pulls her head out Davey may be a permanent resident in The Breckenridge house.We didn't get to know Aunt Bev as well in the other do-overs but in this one she's awesome.

This spirit isn't exactly evil it just wants to find it's way home.You referred to it as a Guardian that implies that it was a leader of some kind. Is there a way to communicate with it.Casper can find out what its emotions are but does anybody have a communication power?

How ever long it takes for you to get inspiration we will be here no worries. I know it's been awhile since the last chapter but is this the first we heard of the murder?I forgot Just what every teen boy like Hunter wants penises on their phone 🙄 come to think of it I wish I had friends like that in highschool

The Trustees still don't communicate adequately.Adam had to hear from the architect about being the college president.Maybe some of the Trustees don't because he didn't have a brandy with them.It will definitely be a challenge but Adam is up to it Hmmm Onion Pie.Never had it but it sounds great.

It sounds like some of the trustees were ready to grill Adam on what's been going on only to find out it was them who didn't do their due diligence to begin with and previous staff got away with a lot of stuff.

I'm sure there's a precedent for what Davey's Dad was trying to do but the California lottery was still fairly new in 86.While what the dad was trying to do was dead wrong Sandy should help out some of that side of the family's issues after all they are relatives to her children and in some cases they have a good relationship like Aunt Bev.It will be interesting how sandy and her materialistic ways will react.This Davey is still pretty smart and with Brian to influence him with his experience I think they will do OK. This Sampson that was mentioned I wonder if he's going to get into this story.This comment I was going to make last chapter but I forgot Jenny is a little different in this timeline and is a molestation victim.Is it possible she won't be supportive of Davey when she learns he is gay

It is still an issue today if somebody isn't careful.I'm worried that among the people if it's not in the media they don't pay attention to it out of sight ,out of mind.I worry that a new strain will come.