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I love Omelets but I have to say I never heard of omelets in a wrap.is that a similar concept to a breakfast burrito?If Tim can make them that well then Paul and his mom are the real winners here lol
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Paul's mom said "Wait till his friends find out he's home" I don't know if you plan on I don't know if you plan on them appearing in you story but if they do Tim could observe and realize that it might not be so bad.In addition to Paul's family helping him out it could also be good for Paul's mom to have Tim around after Paul goes back to school
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The Cowboy Finds His Poolboy
weinerdog commented on FlyOnTheWall's story chapter in The Cowboy Finds His Poolboy
I've had people tell me variations of stories about seeing a loved one who passed like Hunter saw Jaime you know what I believe them.Looking forward to seeing the guys next chapter -
Sorry for the reaction I gave This does look like a start of a good story.But every time I read about something like this in a story and know that this actually happens IRL it just gets to me.I said this before but I would want to hear their answer to the question "Is this what Jesus wants you to do?"
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Very nice story.A couple of questions You never gave an age for Toby so I'm guessing13-16.I think you may have left out a sentence when Toby was crying on the park bench then hears "Why are you crying,my child?" At first you did not identify the man was he the guy who was running the diner? I thought the use of the old man, the boy etc reminded me of ghost of Christmas past, present etc. very good.Thank you
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You did say this was a short story.We all heard the expression "Short and Sweet"Well this was short but also definitely sweet.I had to notice when Tony was speaking to Chet he said "Mom and Dad" like they were his Mom and Dad so that showed that made a impression on each other.Thank you for a nice story
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A few times I have picked up people stuck in a rain storm one time it was a kid another time it was an elderly gentleman.One time in the middle of the night on a freeway interstate I picked up a lady who's car broke down.I found out while I was taking her home that she was recent Jamaican immigrant here but she was still plenty skeptical she said"You only picked me up because Im a women didn't you" I replied I picked you up because you were in trouble but it did get me thinking if the person was a rough looking character maybe I wouldn't have. Ok back to the story When Tony told Chet why he was hitching it makes me want to ask these so called Christians in there anything in the Bible that suggests Jesus would kick someone out? Liking the story
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I'm not crying really I'm not crying.Andrew and Susan being overcome with emotion with the first gifts they opened was touching I guess they hadn't gotten anything for Christmas for a while.Just one other observation I know when they were living at the old house they had modest means but even our flawed health care system should have been able to provide Dave with a wheelchair instead of them having to use a office chair.Thank you for a wonderful story
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'"Take a Chance on Me "would be perfect for Rick.But for Rita?I think "SOS" or "Waterloo" would be more appropriate.
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Dave already got his Christmas gift with Chad and Troy taking the kids.Since Father James brought the lawyer over I'm guessing he's Episcopalian.I will say some of the younger Catholic priests take the position they would rather kids be placed with a loving gay couple then a loveless home the old guard still balks a little but Pope Francis seems to be ok with a situation like Chad and Troy.I don't know when you will have Dave die but I hope it's not on Christmas or new year's
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Nice move by Rick maybe he can get them to go to the fireworks then drive them home.Rita geez can you say manipulator?I bet some here would say worse.One small complaint sounds like nobody got anything for Vincent poor dog.I do have one worry that incident that happened to Rick as a teenager that was July 4th also right?I hope nothing triggers that memory while he's with Gus.
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This was very well written Mike may not have been a homophobe but he was uncomfortable with the topic and he did not know how to act around Andy at first.But when he saw what happened at the mall and saw how devastated Andy was Mike was the loving big brother again and when push came to shove that didn't change.Andy had to do some growing up the hard way but at the same time so did Mike.Im glad Andy was able to find someone else quick and is able to talk with Mike about it and more so Mike being happy for him.
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A Cape Cod Yankee (Part 2)
weinerdog commented on FlyOnTheWall's story chapter in A Cape Cod Yankee (Part 2)
Yeah it was important stuff that was left out.But you know something it was a good chapter even with that missing.That shows how good a writer you are. -
I believe Father James knew what he was doing when he asked Troy and Chad to have Andrew and Susan over for Christmas.The way you described Andrew I bet they made up their mind to adopt as soon as they met.
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I wrote a review about another one of this authors stories called A Boy At The Lake.What I wrote in that one applies to this one even more so and pretty much everyone of his stories.So why am I writing this review you may ask.Just to say that this story may be his very best story he's ever written.I have no doubt there are going to be many good stories still to come from Mr. Lobe but he may not ever top this one.Please take the time to read this .Highly recommended
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There is nothing I can add to all the excellent comments.Thank you for what you do.
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I think there are people like him but not with the same means. We need a Warren Buffett type to do this
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A Cape Cod Yankee (Part 2)
weinerdog commented on FlyOnTheWall's story chapter in A Cape Cod Yankee (Part 2)
The Vega's have suffered more losses than any family should ever have I would not even wish that on parents that are like Hunter's.Speaking of Hunter's mom would not go the funeral?What the hell is wrong with her?I'm pretty sure Hunter will do this but I hope he's around a lot for Mr and Mrs'Vega just like another son would be. -
Beautiful writing with Michael talking to Carlton in his sleep.And It's awesome that some of the boys went back to Europe to do the same thing Carleton did with help from The Hague.I noticed the last chapter said 56 and this chapter said 58 I hope you didn't unintentionally skip one.So common sense tells me the next chapter is about Robert
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Excellent idea to post a chapter from Steven's POV.He could tell us things that Carleton can't such as what the other boys say in private conversations among themselves about the house Carleton,Maria etc.Im curious why house is empty now,Wasn't there a plan for when Carleton died?Maybe Robert is part of the plan.
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If they think somebody is going to try to work there on behalf of the Sultan I would love to set that guy up on a sting operation make him think it is one of those kind of places The Sultan thinks it is and then have law enforcement listen in and arrest him then that would be a reason for The Sultan to be banned from the country. I don't know what you have in mind so I hope I didn't unintentionally do a spoiler lol.
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Depending on what happens this could get governments involved.At the very least very unwanted attention.Short chapter but a lot in it.
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It's a wonder more of those boys didn't have those nightmares like that one boy did.Carleton is right if somebody could help just one kid they are a hero.I even feel the same way about people who take on homeless dogs.
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I'm a wee bit confused Mac and Ike said they were put in two different foster homes but it then sounds like they were in the same single location as the two younger boys.Sounds like a very badly run foster system.Gee what a big surprise.
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I didn't remember the part about the boys climbing the fence.So they must of heard about Carleton's place through word of mouth after it was revealed in the newspaper.The last 5 boys showed up unexpectedly it may come to the point where they'll be no more room for anybody what then? Carleton would take that hard.
