Aditus' prompts and circumstances - 26. Poetry Prompt 15 - Free Verse: Kiss

Cool. I liked it on the first reading, then wanted to play with it on the second. Thanks!

Nice! this is a great example of how powerful imagery can be created in just a few lines.

Like the imagery, the storm inside us wanting, desiring, yep it worked for me.
tim

On 11/07/2015 09:30 AM, Parker Owens said:

Cool. I liked it on the first reading, then wanted to play with it on the second. Thanks!

Mission accomplished then, huh? Thank you, Parker!

On 11/07/2015 10:42 AM, albertnothlit said:

Nice! this is a great example of how powerful imagery can be created in just a few lines.

Thank you for your kind words, Albert. I shifted those lines around quite a few times. I might try again.

On 11/07/2015 03:19 PM, Mikiesboy said:

Like the imagery, the storm inside us wanting, desiring, yep it worked for me.

tim

Cool! Thanks, Tim!

I read this one a few times, thinking of different meanings each time.

The first time I read it I was thinking of one person seeing the storm brewing in the other person's eyes, but the second time I read it, I thought of the storm and the planets colliding being one thing, and how the planets colliding could mean a kiss.

I'll have to read it again. I love poems like this that really make me think because they could be taken so many different ways.

Thanks for taking the poetry prompt challenge, Adi! You mentioned on the prompt a Whitman-type channeling of emotions here.

I actually get more of an E. M. Forster vibe, as his work is often about the colliding worlds happening, although they are mostly unseen. That sort of tie-in would bring you back to the clips from Room with a View perfectly.

Can you tell? I think this poem is pretty darn brilliant.

This is very good. I particularly like the sentence "Planets are colliding, giving birth to ideas".

"Evil Genius" could be an alternate title of this poem.

I enjoyed it. As everybody said, you did a lot with very little. Thank you.